Ok I know I'm not one of the best writers but this is really hard for me I would really like to know what I did good and what I can do better so please R&R I really need it. Oh ya and the second part to this is Persimone ok?
The Beginning
The 7-year-old Persimone yawned as she woke up. She could smell the dew on the trees right out side her room. Quickly she got out of bed, dressed, and brushed her beautiful Silver-Blue hair. As she finished she ran into her best friends room to wake her up. "Cathlyne Cathlyne" she whispered while slightly shaking her. "Get up Cathlyne there's a beautiful sunrise today you have to come watch it with me. Cathlynes eyes slowly opened
"But I wanna sleep can't we watch it another day?" She asks tiredly.
"Please Cathlyne that's what you said yesterday..." Persimone adds pleadingly.
"Oh alright but just this once. And can I go back to bed afterward?" Cathlyne adds.
"Well I guess you could but it would be funner if you didn't." Persimone says happily. Persimone yanks Cathlyne out of her bed and pulls her outside onto the porch to watch the sunrise.
"Isn't this just perfect?" Persimone says referring to the sunrise. "I wish it could be like this forever" She adds.
Cathlyne yawns and looks at the sunrise "Ya I wish it could then I wouldn't have to wake up so early to watch it." Cathlyne says jokingly. The two of them walk over to the porch swing and sit down.
"I love this planet. Aquarius is just the best place to live." Persimone says looking at Cathlyne.
"I agree" Cathlyne says to Persimone.
"Lets go walk around the lake" Persimone says dragging Cathlyne behind her. They look into the crystal clear lake and see beautiful fish dart around as if playing tag. Then noticing the reflection of the sunrise on the lake Persimone says to Cathlyne "Look at how much the sunrise makes the lake sparkle... I know I notice too much stuff don't I?" Cathlyne looks hard at the lake.
"Ya you do notice too much stuff but I guess the sun does do that." Cathlyne looks down at her gorgeous necklace and then looks back up at Persimone with a surprised look on her face. "My necklace is glowing... I wonder why and how it's never done that before." Cathlyne says.
"Well maybe my mom might know something about it.... When we get back to the house you can ask her about it ok?" Persimone says looking at the glow on the necklace.
"OK" Cathlyne replies.
read on to see what happens...
Ok these are really horrible Please read my second story titled Persimone and then please reply and tell me if I should cont. Please.
The Beginning
The 7-year-old Persimone yawned as she woke up. She could smell the dew on the trees right out side her room. Quickly she got out of bed, dressed, and brushed her beautiful Silver-Blue hair. As she finished she ran into her best friends room to wake her up. "Cathlyne Cathlyne" she whispered while slightly shaking her. "Get up Cathlyne there's a beautiful sunrise today you have to come watch it with me. Cathlynes eyes slowly opened
"But I wanna sleep can't we watch it another day?" She asks tiredly.
"Please Cathlyne that's what you said yesterday..." Persimone adds pleadingly.
"Oh alright but just this once. And can I go back to bed afterward?" Cathlyne adds.
"Well I guess you could but it would be funner if you didn't." Persimone says happily. Persimone yanks Cathlyne out of her bed and pulls her outside onto the porch to watch the sunrise.
"Isn't this just perfect?" Persimone says referring to the sunrise. "I wish it could be like this forever" She adds.
Cathlyne yawns and looks at the sunrise "Ya I wish it could then I wouldn't have to wake up so early to watch it." Cathlyne says jokingly. The two of them walk over to the porch swing and sit down.
"I love this planet. Aquarius is just the best place to live." Persimone says looking at Cathlyne.
"I agree" Cathlyne says to Persimone.
"Lets go walk around the lake" Persimone says dragging Cathlyne behind her. They look into the crystal clear lake and see beautiful fish dart around as if playing tag. Then noticing the reflection of the sunrise on the lake Persimone says to Cathlyne "Look at how much the sunrise makes the lake sparkle... I know I notice too much stuff don't I?" Cathlyne looks hard at the lake.
"Ya you do notice too much stuff but I guess the sun does do that." Cathlyne looks down at her gorgeous necklace and then looks back up at Persimone with a surprised look on her face. "My necklace is glowing... I wonder why and how it's never done that before." Cathlyne says.
"Well maybe my mom might know something about it.... When we get back to the house you can ask her about it ok?" Persimone says looking at the glow on the necklace.
"OK" Cathlyne replies.
read on to see what happens...
Ok these are really horrible Please read my second story titled Persimone and then please reply and tell me if I should cont. Please.