Yes I know I suck but after finishing the climax I figured the beginning of the story needed to reflect the end. So I re wrote the whole thing. Loads of stuff is the same but I find it a whole lot more explicit and descriptive then the first version. I also found that I sucked at first person POV's and got rid of it all. GAAH, I'm such a fail! Though, if you do read both, could you tell me witch one is better, the first version or the second?

Enjoy…

aCoE; Re-Write

Chapter I

The green forest was passing by Shun in a blur. Birds jumped out of the trees as he passed. He was so high up the animals on the forest floor couldn't hear him, and they went along, not even noticing a human presence high up in their habitat.

It was very late in the day. The sky was starting to turn orange and purple, making the impression of beautiful water colors, delicately placed on a canvas. Just for people to pass it by, to go along with their lives, never to pause and see the wonders of nature.

Shun was not one of those people. He was introduced to the beauties of the world by his grandfather. Though the man was harsh and stubborn, he still knew how to appreciate the world around him. It probably came from having to fight to gain his living, his fame.

Shun was told to go and explore the forest, to spend the night. He was fourteen and mature enough, a lot more mature then a lot of other teens his age, to do so, and for that his grandfather was proud.

Shun made his way to the top of a tree, ignoring the harsh cold of early march, the wind bighting the uncovered skin of his face, as he scaled higher and higher. It was a good thing he wasn't scared of heights because he must have been sixty feet in the air. Any normal person would be mortified at the fall, but Shun was far from normal, he was a ninja, he could survive that kind of jump easily.

The tree Shun was climbing had a sturdy branch near the top. It served as Shun's perch for the evening. From there he could see the west side of the forest. The trees seamed to go on and on, as if it were an endless world of pure nature, as if this peacefulness went on for ever, witch it most certainly did not.

The sun had already partially disappeared behind the tall green trees, giving the forest in front in a slight glow, adding an even more mystical look to it.

Shun wished he could take a picture, to try and capture the moment. However, he acknowledged the fact that nothing could represent the scene and do it justice, not a picture, or a painting and certainly not words. One would need to see the miraculous event for them to understand its beauty. Sadly, no one would get a chance, it was near impossible for the rest of the public to ever come up this high, from this point of view. Shun felt very privileged to be able to witness it himself.

After the sun had fully set and the unearthly glow had left, Shun reluctantly got up from his perch and shook his feet, witch had fallen asleep. He couldn't sleep so high up in the tree; he risked falling and in his groggy state, hitting a branch on the way down. So, he descended, but instead of simply jumping all the way down, he went down slower than usual, to savor the sounds of the luscious wildlife. He could hear all the night time activity around him, caused by the nocturnal animals of the forest.

About mid way down, Shun saw a slightly deformed pine tree. It had a branch that was thicker then the others, and it sprouted at more of an angle, it would be a perfect place to spend the night, it was still high up, but the grove between the branch and the tree was deep enough so he would have a hard time falling out in his sleep.

The only problem was that it was about twenty yards away.

Somewhere, an owl hoed, as if in warning. Tough, it wasn't interpreted that way. Shun mentally made a path though the trees in between him and his objective, analyzing the best rout to the shelter. It would take a few simple jumps to complete his goal, a few short jumps and one bigger one from the last tree to the deformed pine.

He got a good leverage on the first jump, making it all the way to the first tree and then swinging to the next, landing perfectly with both feet on a branch and a hand on another to steady himself. He made fast pace though the next few jumps and stopped before the last, bigger one. He got a good push off, flying steadily though the air. The moon shone above him, brightening his view of his goal. He prepared to land about mid way, but, to the dismay of many surrounding animals, there was a bright light, and Shun barely had enough time to realize what was happening before he was sucked into the portal, leaving behind the beautiful forest and a grandfather that would surely be disappointed in him when he was found missing (I know, it's a oxymoron, but it works.)

(You won't believe it, the first time I wrote that ↑, it was 362 words long, now its 821. If you put them digits together it makes for my average chapter. I think I'll compare each scene that repeats just to show you.)

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The desert in witch Shun now found himself was void, empty. There was nothing but rocks and dirt. The complete opposite of the healthy forest he disappeared from. There was nothing for miles around. The only thing that stayed the same about his surroundings was the cold temperature, the fierce wind, and that the dark sky loomed overhead, though this sky was very different then the other one over the forest. Their were big orbs all around, all in different colors that shone brightly against the blackness of space, some striking a resemblance to the bleu portal Shun was just shot out of. If he were told the orbs were giant concentrations of energy, Shun wouldn't have trouble believing it.

It was obvious that he no longer found himself on earth; the sky was no aurora borealis after all. This place seamed familiar to Shun in some way, and he come up with two possibilities; either he had fallen asleep and dreamt it all, the less probable, or he was on New Vestroia, the more probable.

There were still problems, if he were on New Vestroia, then how did he get there, the portal had to come from somewhere. Another was that there weren't any Bakugan. With all the bear ground around Shun aspect to see at least a few Subterra Bakugan, but his surroundings showed no sign of any life form other then himself.

There wasn't anything Shun could do to answer his questions in the dark so he settled himself on a cluster of rocks a few meters away. It probably wasn't as good as that deformed pine tree, but it was better then sleeping in the flat dirt. Shun made himself comfortable and started to meditate.

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When Shun came to, the sun had risen and it now illuminated the desert, revealing the dull dead ground beneath Shun's feet.

He now took the time to look around properly, and, thanks to the sun, he now knew the approximate time and witch way was north. There was nothing east, nothing south, and nothing west, but thankfully, there was a feint shadow of something in the distance to the north. It could have been a mountain, another forest, or a large building. Shun didn't know much about mirages, but the feint shadow was the only thing Shun had to go by. And so, he walked.

After what felt like a few miles, the shadow could be made out to be another forest, this one more tropical then the last.

It had strange, colorful plants that Shun couldn't identify. There were strange flowers colored a violent yellow with green polka-dots, on the ground and spheres the size of beach balls, colored rouge, hanging from the trees, witch were also oddly shaped.

By mid day, Shun was in the forest, walking on the ground because he didn't trust the plants or trees not to be poisonous to humans.

There was a noise ahead of him, it sounded like talking. Shun crept behind a purple and bleu bush and got a better view of who it was. There were three Bakugan huddled together, close to a stream. They were whispering in hushed tones, but Shun could hear every word.

"Those retched Vestals!" one said.

"What if that thing comes back for us?" Another asked.

"I wish master Preyas were here to save us." Said the last.

"Come know Lumitraid, Preyas was a fake, you saw how easily he was sucked up by that thing." Said the first, Lumitraid, looked taken back.

"Don't be so harsh Snapinoid; Preyas was a very strong warrior."

Snapinoid countered; "Your one to talk Splight, you were screaming the entire time, your both fakes!"

Splight looked angry with Snapinoid so Shun decided to intervene before things got messy. He stood up from behind the bush and cleared his throat. The Bakugan scattered, flying into the bushes in their fright. Shun sighed, he could tell they didn't go very far, natural curiosity he supposed, so he decided to lure them out;

"What would Preyas think of you hiding in fear?"

His plan worked, Lumitraid came out of her hiding spot.

"You know master Preyas?" She asked.

Shun nodded, "Does he still hang around with Angelo and Diablo?"

Lumitraid was about to answer but Snapinoid interrupted her; "Who are you? You aren't a Vestal are you? 'Cus if you are…"

Splight cut him off this time; "Of course not you buffoon, he is a human."

"Why you little…"

It was Shun's turn to cut someone off; "I'm Shun Kazami and Splight is right, I'm human…."

Lumitraid gasped at Shun's name.

"…But would you mind telling me who the Vestals are?"

The Bakugan had stopped their bickering.

"They're the invaders oh great battle brawler." Said the Splight.

Shun raised an eye brow; "The invaders?"

Snapinoid answered, he felt sorry for threatening a savior of Vestroia "Yes. They invaded some time ago; they're sucking up all the Bakugan with their big flying ship."

"Yeah," Agreed the Lumitraid, "They took master Preyas!"

There was a loud noise that sounded a lot like a rocket engine, the trees were blown away by a sudden gust of wind, and from above the treetops came an aircraft that looked like it could carry all of Bay City. There were three yellow beams that came down from the center of the air ship. They seamed to be moving around randomly, each beam sucking up more and more Bakugan. A beam came over to the stream and the tree Bakugan before Shun started to unwillingly float up to the Ship. Shun snatched them out of the air and put them in a strange hollow log that was lying on the ground.

"Don't move." He said to them.

Shun moved as fast as he could up the trees to the air ship, anything that took the Bakugan against their will was bad in his book.

From the top of the tree, Shun made an amazing leap to the bottom wing of the ship. The wind was threatening to throw him off, but the threat was so minor impaired to the large aircraft that it went unnoticed. Shun knew next to nothing about airships, so he did the only thing he could think off, he made his way to the back of the ship and to the engines. They were blazing like the rockets they are, giving off a smell that resembled a mixture of burning plastic and Dan's gym socks.

There was a lose panel over one of the rockets, the end was turned up and it was easy for Shun to get it off and access the confusing wires and metal. Shun had no clue what any of it meant but grabbed a lone kunai from his pocket and cut all of the wires he could see. His luck followed though when the engine instantly shorted out and stopped.

The rest of the engines were still working but the ship made a fast descent into the forest. Shun jumped down safely to the forest floor before the ship took out a couple dozen tree on its way down. The engine then blew up and caused a chain reaction with the other engines, making a huge explosion that sent shock waves all around and lit some of the trees on fire. The ship 'landed' and the dust from the explosion cleared out with the wind, the entire backside of the ship was blown clean off and the debris was raining from the sky.

From where Shun was standing, he could see the inside of the ship. There was a hoard of Bakugan making their escape around all the confused people trying to keep them detained. Shun assumed that these people were the Vestals, the invaders as Splight put them.

Shun was carefully hidden in the bushes, but failed to notice the team of Vestal officers come up behind him. They had escaped on an evacuation of the ship. They located Shun with a bit of heat seeking technology.

"You are under arrest for destruction of property!" the head officer yelled in a strong voice, "Come out of the bushes with your hands where I can see them!"

Shun turned around and raised his eyebrows. He swept the officers with a glance, considering his options.

"Hey, did you hear me…?" Asked the officer again. Shun crouched down and was gone in the blink of an eye. The officers stared blankly at the spot he just vacated.

"Hey, where did he go?"

There was a soft 'pat' from behind them, a 'pat' that comes from someone landing on the bare ground. The officers all spun around and got to their knees at the same time. Their stun guns fired of at random times and three had the lucky chance to hit Shun. The blasts sent him into a gooey tree, but before the officers could get another shot in, Shun disappeared over the purple plants.

"Follow him!" Commanded the head officer. The group rushed into the forest as fast as they could. Normally, they wouldn't be nearly as fast as Shun, but for some reason, Shun felt really slow at the moment.

The officers shot at anything that moved, witch was, more often then not, at Shun. He was hit three more times and though that slowed him down, he never stopped. He got even more disoriented with every step until finally; he was hit in the back one last time with a stun gun. With that, he was out cold.

(Wow! That one went from 807 to 1'590, that's almost double. Chapter I went from 1'226 words total to 2'620! Go me!)

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Sorry again for the inconvenience of re-writing my story and I still need to update my other story too, don't worry, I'll do it soon.

The next chapter is already half written, it'll be up soon too.

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