Hi, it's my first time writing a story on here. Please give me feedback as I progress, also tell me what you like/dislike. I am using wordpad so if it looks screwy sorry!
"When will you realize all the pain I have went through to save you?!" Homura said as she was crying to Madoka.
"W-what are you talking about Homura?", Madoka said as she was freightened.
"I keep repeating this month over and over just to save you!" Homura screamed out, " Why don't you just stay the same and never change?" she was now sobbing.
"I feel as though this isn't this first time I have heard that.", Madoka said as she was now comforting Homura.
Homura is now crying and Madoka is doing all she can to calm her down.
"Will you please just let me save you, so I dont have to go through the torture of this month again?", She said as she was trying to stop crying.
"I guess.", Madoka said unsure of what she was talking about.
" Thank you.", Homura said as she was now standing.
"Now I must go protect the entire city from the ultimate witch, Walpurgis Night.", Homura said as she was now walking off into the middle of the unknown storm.
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"I feel as though I should help her, but she told me to stay here at the community center." she thought while watching outside expecting something to happen
"She has suffered so much to be like that.", Madoka thinking about what Homura told her before going to fight.
"Hey Madoka!", her mom now calling for her," look the storm is clearing up, we can go home soon."
Madoka stared in aw as she looked to see the ever so shining sun return.
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A few days later, while her dad was watching the news, she saw that Homura was dead.
"How did this happen, Kyubey?", Madoka said frantically, while outside with Kyubey,"I thought she could defeat that witch!?"
"She did defeat the witch, but she used up all of her magic and then turned into one of the most powerful witches ever.", Kyubey explained to her.
"For some reason though her body was still there it should have disappeared into the witches lair." Kyubey said unsuringly.
Madoka began to calm down.
"I have no choice then." She said nervously, " I wish to save Homura!"
A bright light began shining as Madoka transformed into her magical girl form.
"I'm coming", she whispered to herself as she ran to go save her best friend.
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Authors notes
So how was it?
I tried my best and I'm happy with my first fanfiction.
please review
