Okay. So. It's been more than four years since I've logged in, and when I read my story, all I saw was things I could fix or improve. So, thats what I'm going to do.
I also just saw how messes up the revised chapter was.
Sorry for all this.
Chapter One
Seventeen-year-old Loranna Potter sighed wearily as her eyes surveyed the damage done to Hogwarts and the grounds. Her eyes, once more, trailed back to the looming shadow of the place she had, at one time, called home.
"What will you do now, Potter?" a voice, familiar and not, called from a little ways away.
Loranna groaned in frustration as she looked over her shoulder to the entity.
"I don't know. I might just travel around a bit, before choosing where to settle. Where would you recommend, Death?"
Death smirked, enjoying her frustration. The entity had a habit of picking corpses to wear, most often choosing ones that people have emotional connections with. This time, he was wearing the body of a young man who was missing half his chest.
"Why not go to the States?" He suggested, smirking faintly as she considered it.
"Why not?" she repeated, sighing. "Well, if we're going to the states, we'd best go to Gringotts."
She turned on her heel, apparating to the goblin-run wizarding bank. Landing on the front steps, she quickly moved up and inside, going up to a teller.
"I would like to speak to the head of the Potter finances." She told the goblin, who - when realizing who was in front of him - told her to follow him.
In no time at all, they stood before a normal looking door. "Master Hillgunn, Lady Potter is here to see you." Loranna was confused. Lady?
p style="font-family: Times; font-size: medium;""Enter." a deep voice called her in, and when beckoned, she entered the room./p
"Ah." The withered goblin behind the desk sighed. "At long last. I assume you received our summons?
"Summons?" Loranna asked. "What summons? I've never gotten a letter from Gringotts in my life"
Hillgunn looked astounded. "Never?" At that horrified word, he quickly began barking orders to get him a list of all transactions made in the potter accounts. Not even five minutes later another goblin ran in with the list which was quickly handed to Loranna. Shrugging, she looked it over
All transactions made:
Molly Weasley - 100 galleons monthly.
Albus Dumbledore - 1500 galleons yearly
Ron Weasley - 200 galleons monthly
Hermione Granger - 200 galleons monthly
All items taken:
Albus Dumbledore - Potter invisibility cloak, various books and gems
Hermione Granger - various books and artifacts
"I want it all back." Loranna's voice was colder than ice. "Plus interest."
Hillgunn grinned maliciously. "Will do."
I hope you guys enjoy the changes?
