first fan fiction, not of any particular story, please review and give me feedback so i can write another charpter
It was Christmas Eve and the snow was falling lightly on the grass. The streets were quiet, with only the occasional car passing by. The carollers were out sing traditional Christmas carols. Amelia was hanging up the last Christmas decorations while her family was out doing last-minute Christmas shopping.
She was daydreaming about all the wonderful things that have happened in her life. Her reverie was broken by a knock at the door. Her parents had keys and she knew they wouldn't be back for another hour, so Amelia had no idea who was at the door. She heard a voice.
"Amelia I know you're in there. I can smell your Christmas pudding."
She smelt the air to see if that was true. She stumbled down the hallway to the door overtaken by tiredness and anger. He was back! Why, why now, at Christmas?
She stood at the door, trying to decide whether to open the door and yell at him or leave him in the cold. Finally she decided to open the door. She unlocked, turned the doorknob and opened the squeaky door.
He was standing on the top step and had specks of unmelted snow in his short brown hair, which made him look as if he had dandruff. He had big brown eyes with thick eyebrows and long brown eyelashes, speckled with tiny bits of crisp white snow. He was dressed entirely in black. If it hadn't been for the snow in his hair she probably wouldn't have seen him in the dark. Amelia looked again. Was this really the man she had been in love with just one day ago, or was it someone else? No, she thought, that's him. She didn't like him bothering her, and was closing the door when she decided to speak.
"What do you want?" she asked brusquely.
"Can I come in? I have a Christmas present for you," he requested in a nice voice.
"No you can't come in. I don't want anything from you. I know you now. Just go away!"
He stood there with his mouth open not knowing what to say to her. Amelia wanted to slam the door on his face and yell 'I hate you' but she didn't. Amelia just stood there. She wondered if she'd actually said those words aloud.
Amelia could see him planning his next move. He took a step towards her. I'm not falling for that trick, she thought, but she played along with it. Amelia took a step towards him and she put her hand on his chest. She could feel his muscles underneath her hand. She could feel her energy building and put her other hand on his chest. Before he could hold her, she shoved him with all her might and he fell backwards down the steps. He sat up. She stared down at him and gave a little laugh.
"And you better never come back," she said.
She smiled, turned away and slammed the door shut.
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