this is my first fanfic i ever wrote, plz comment
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"I can't believe im
back, I hope she can forgive me." said a blonde haired boy jumping
from the trees landing before the gate of Konoha. "She'll either
understand or forgive you overtime besides, it was his wish." An
old grey long haired man said landing behind Naruto. his wish huh
Naruto thought back to that fateful day.
Jiraiya hut
"huff huff….. okay Naruto that's it you've finally pass my training" Jiraiya said tiredly has he slumped against an oak tree. Naruto jumped from joy landing right beside Jiraiya. "Finally after six years, I thought id never see the day when I could actually get a few punches on ya" Jiraiya smiled at Naruto for a minute but then got a serious look on his face "Naruto I don't mean to get all serious but I must ask this question, what is your purpose to get stronger?" Naruto looked puzzling at Jiraiya wondering why he would ask such a question, but Naruto saw that he was serious so he closed his eyes and thought. "So that I can protect the people I love and.." Naruto clenched his fist "to bring back Sasuke" Jiraiya looked at the young adult and realized that he was ready "Hey, how would you like going onto a personal mission with me" All Naruto could do was get excited.
"Jiraiya why are we in the mountains?" Naruto complained as he walked up the side of the mountain. "Stop talking naruto, or you'll break your concentration."
"Please like ill do tha-… ahhhhhhh" Jiraiya sighed as he dropped to catch naruto
"Told you so"
"Shut up"
When they got to the top of the mountain Naruto became impatient
"So why are we here again."
"Just look" All Naruto saw was a cave giving of a cold draft, with a few little trees here and there.
"Okay you got me, it's a cave"
"Wow great ninja observation, no you idiot this is Orochimaru's hideout and were going to test how strong you are by getting Sasuke back." Naruto looked around one last time making sure he wasn't dreaming. So this is Orochimaru's hideout kind of homeless looking, no matter Sasuke I will bring you back. "What are waiting for, let's go" Naruto exclaimed rushing towards the cave. Jiraiya just sighed as impatient as ever
About 20 minutes into the cave Jiraiya made sure that no one had noticed them intruding, and lit up a torch. When the fire illuminated the cave they saw that they were in a murky passage way, with water dripping from the ceiling and moss growing in every direction "Man this place gives me the creeps." Naruto said as a chill went down his spine "Stop being a wuss and lets go"
ONE HOUR LATER
"We just had to listen to you Naruto what happened to "I got a since of direction." Jiraiya exclaimed as they wandered around the cave that seemed like it went on forever. "Well maybe I could concentrate, if I didn't have a perverted old man nagging all the time." "Oh you always gotta bring that up, I told you already its research"
In the midst of them arguing, they were being watched by someone deep in the cave "How foolish to be attacking me in my domain, Ronin, Stretch eliminate them"
"As you wish" they said in unison.
"WELL, YOUR HAIRS YELLOW…..wait what's that." As the two stopped arguing they realized that there was a fork in the passage "Orochimaru probably wants us to split up." Jiraiya explained "Then let's, either way were going to end up in a trap since we are in his domain, and besides if we do this we can separate the enemies into two smaller groups and probably meet each other at the heart of the cave." Jiraiya smiled he's grown a lot in the past 6 years. "All right, ill take the right path and you will take the left path" "OKAY" yelled Naruto "ssshhhh" maybe not.
As Naruto was walking down his path he started hearing a strange sound coming from behind him. Suddenly a spear pierced the heart of the young adult killing him in a instant "Humph, way to easy"
Jiraiya was having a lot of trouble, everywhere he turned either kunais were being shot at him, exploding tags going off, and spiked balls leaving nothing but scratches. After about 30 min Jiraiya had come to an open area of the cave where an unknown figure stood. "Man why do I always get the weak ones" the mysterious man wined.
"Weak, why am I the one that's weak" Jiraiya asked in an annoyance, looking the boy over it would seem he was a weird one, he was about 5'9 had a brown long hairdo that seemed like it was never washed, a black shirt that had it's sleeves ripped off at the shoulders and pants that had seem like the've never seen soap. "People who can't understand the sound of music, is weak" All of a sudden the man pulled out a guitar and played a simple note that sent Jiraiya flying into a boulder. Jiraiya got up, and the punk played the same note but a little louder, making Jiraiya flying diagonally upwards hitting a few stalagmites before hitting the wall of the cave. Wow that's amazing he must be generating his chakra into his guitar and hands heh pretty nifty.
"What's your name kid?"
"The names stretch, why want to become a fan?" "No, in fact I think im going to shut your business down"
With that Jiraiya gathered his strength, and jumped onto the wall focusing his chakra so that he would stick, and started dashing around the area. Stretch tried to keep up but the old man was to fast for him, making holes in the wall with his notes. When Jiraiya finally found a chance to move in, he concentrated his chakra into his right hand creating a swirling blue ball "Take this punk, RASENGEN." The rocker had enough time to realize what was going on; calmly he started playing a low note pretty fast creating a blue barrier around him which, when Jiraiya made contact, sent him flying into the wall again.
After Jiraiya stopped coughing up blood, he finally got the strength to stand back up. "That was a pretty cool trick there, how'd ya do it?" Stretch looked at the old man for a while then smiled "Since I can see your becoming a fan of my music ill tell you my secret, by now you realized I generate chakra into my guitar and hands, which in a result my notes are pure chakra. Since sound travels in every direction, if I play the notes low I can keep it in a sustained area, and if a play the notes faster I can produce more chakra, creating a barrier around my perfected self." Jiraiya looked at the punk before he started laughing "why are you laughing, is my music to much for you."
"No, it's just this might get interesting."
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well there's the first chapter, it will get better, and more interesting
