Hey everyone, VickyT36 here, I'm making this re-make, because I felt my first one lacked detail, and thanks to some constructive criticism I'm going to make it better, enjoy!
Chapter 1: An Accident
2011
In the city of Zootopia, in Tundratown, a polar bear, a wolf, a caribou, and a hyena were meeting in a hotel room. "Well, we got it, boss." said the wolf, handing the polar bear a flash drive. "Great work, Derek. I knew Jensen would come around." said Bruno, the polar bear.
He plugged it into a lap top, and waited. "Soon we'll have access to the bank accounts to the wealthiest mammals in Zootopia." said Bruno. Shane, the caribou clicked on the application the flash drive opened, but there wasn't anything on it.
"WHAT!" yelled Bruno, pulling the flash drive out. "It's a fake, boss." said Frank, the hyena. "That Jensen double crossed us." said Bruno, crushing the flash drive in his paw. "What now?" asked Derek. "We're going to pay him a visit." said Bruno.
"I don't think we can do that boss, look." said Shane, pointing to the TV, which was showing the news. "There's been a terrible accident on 97th street in Zootopia, where Roger Jensen was pronounced dead on the site." said the reporter.
"Great, the only person who could give us what we want is dead." said Frank. "Should we find another one, boss?" asked Derek. "No, we better lay low for a while." said Bruno.
Meanwhile on 97, police were directing the traffic away from the accident, and moving the car, and the body of Roger Jensen. But while all that was going on, a little girl mink was sitting in a police car. She had light brown fur, green eyes, and wore a green dress.
She didn't seem to understand what was happening, but she was clearly frightened, as she clutched a doll that looked like her in her arms. Then a rhino wearing a police uniform came into the car.
"Don't worry, sweetie. You're going to go somewhere safe." he said, and he drove to the police station. He sent her to a play room, while he called social services. "Rough day, McHorn?" asked Officer Fangmyer.
"Yep, that car crash victim left behind a 2-year-old daughter, and there's no other family to take her." said McHorn. "Rough." said Fangmyer. A while later, a leopard from social services came, and took the toddler away.
They then came to Zootopia's Children's Home, an orphanage for all the cubs, pups, kits, kittens, calves, piglets, and foals who had no families to take care of them. Paw in paw, the social worker, and the little tot, walked up to the building, and knocked on the door.
The head of the orphanage, Mrs. Maxwell, who was a black horse with blue eyes, wearing a cream sweater and khaki pants answered it, and let them in. In her office, the social worker gave Mrs. Maxwell her file on the girl.
Everything was in there about her, her name, who her parents were, why she was orphaned, her description, medical history, and a picture of her. Mrs. Maxwell, and the little mink, walked the social worker out, and watched her leave.
Mrs. Maxwell felt something tugging on her pants, and looked down. The girl, with her doll still in her arms, was reaching up to Mrs. Maxwell, showing that she wanted to be picked up. Mrs. Maxwell, scooped the little one up, into her arms.
"Don't worry, Rita. We're gonna take good care of you. Thank goodness, you're too young to understand any of this." said Mrs. Maxwell, and she took Rita back into the orphanage.
That's chapter 1, plz review and comment
