Ok I'm new to this. This is a Air Gear OC series. Please give me your opinion on my story and let me know what i can do to make it better. I will just start by naming and talking about the characters
Characters:
Team Alpha Logo: the alpha sign with a katana going through it
Name: Niyaka "Ni-Ni" Yoshimoro
Nationality: Japanese
Age: 14
Appearance: shaved head, 5 foot 3, 110 pounds, (school outfit) un-button black jacket with white collared shirt underneath and black dress shoes with black dress pants, (out of school outfit) white beeter with blue jean shorts red shoes and a digital watch, (Team Alpha outfit) Blue hoodie with hood covering face black shorts with blue flame designs and black gloves
Air Treks: Black base with blue flames as the design, white wheels that have blue lines going over it, blue straps
Road: Wave road- able to go with the flow as in adapt to any situation
Special Moves: Serpent strike: leaps into the air and does three rapid strikes to the opponents shoulder to off-balance them
Devil's tsunami: balances on one wheel then rotates at high speeds. a defensive move to protect himself from attacks
Tritons wisdom: closes eyes and becomes one with himself. a huge target for attacks but when process is fully completed, every move he makes is fluid, super quick, and undetectable
bio: as a child, Ni-Ni enjoyed swimming in water and fishing. When he was with his father, they always talked about how vast the ocean was and how their is an infinite amount of water on Earth which proved life went on no matter what. One day, while Ni-Ni was swimming he got a leg cramp and began to drown. His father who was on the shore ran into the water and went for Ni-Ni. he was able to get Ni-Ni out but he saw that he dropped his favorite watch in the water. His father swam out far to find it but the current pulled him farther into the ocean causing him to not see the shore no more. Ni-Ni called out for him but saw that he was out of his sight. He had lost his father. Later that day he goes into his room to find that his father bought him some AT's. A note on the box said "find your road and ride it like you did the ocean". Ever since then he has practiced AT's. People seen him ride his AT's in the city and he got the nickname "street surfer" because of how he rode.
Personality: Calm, cool, collective
Best Friend: Toru Akimori
Every character needs a best friend
Name: Toru "Big T" Akimori
Age: 14
Nationaltiy: Japanese/ African American
Appearance: braids, 6 foot 3, 310 pounds, (school outfit) white polo shirt with the school jacket tied around his waist with black dress pants and dress shoes, (out of school outfit) long sleeve white shirt with black stripe in the middle, black basktball shorts, and untied white shoes, (Team Alpha outfit) sleeveless black shirt with logo on the back, black jeans with blue flames
Air Treks: four wheeled AT's, blue base with black flames with a nitros built in
Road: Gaia's Road- can control the ground by just riding on it
Special move: rock throw: while riding on the ground, Toru skids and causes rocks of huge proportions to fly into the air
Earthquake: a move that happens all the time, when he jumps in the air then lands a huge shockwave is caused by his AT's causing people on the ground or on a solid surface to stumble
Bull rush: a risky move that takes away all of his stamina and causes him to pass out. he puts all his strength into one push of his AT's and uses his shoulders as a weapon that easily breaks an opponents body part
bio: Toru was the biggest kid in his middle school. he wasn't much of an athlete or a student so he was always picked on by the other kids. one day he snapped and picked a locker up and threw it at a group of kids. When he did that he injured a kid and became sadden by what he did. When he got home that day, his older brother gave him four wheeled AT's to use. his brother said "if you can utilize that strength in a AT battle, you could become the youngest king in history. The idea was set in Toru's mind and he practiced everyday to perfect his riding. Once he entered high school his personality changed and he became someone who is cocky and always looking for a challenge. He battles Ni-Ni in a circuit race around the school but loses horribly because he let him use triton's wisdom which enhanced his abilities greatly. feeling down he dedicates himself to defeat Ni-Ni and become the Ground King
Personality: cocky, angered easily, doesn't think things through
I got the first two characters down. they will be in the first two chapters and in each new chapter, i will introduce the bios of characters i put into the serie