The Raven
I'd just like everyone to know that 1) this is the first time i've written a fanfic, 2) I need criticsm, whether it be flame or advice just write i need it so i can improve my story for the audience -that doesn't exist.
The tanto blade gleamed mockingly at its audience as it protruded from the back of a certain bluenette. The rest had sheathed itself within her stomach, all the way to the hilt.
Nami's eyes widened, tears escaping her eyes.
Sanji's mouth went slack, his usual cigarette lay on the floor unattended to.
Zoro's eyes widened; a knuckle-white grip on WadÔ's hilt.
Chopper and Ussop had their eyes wide in shock, their mouth hung agape in horror.
Luffy had frozen in place eyes not believing what he saw, the words stuck in his throat except one:
"Vivi… "