Author's notes: I got my first review emailed to me! It made me smile like a smiley kind of person. I won't mention who in case they wanted anonymity but trust me you know who you are and it was appreciated! You're one of the good guys.
"Managing your emotions is an inside job"
Doc Childre and Howard Martin
"Your intellect may be confused but your emotions will never lie to you"
Roger Ebert
CHAPTER THREE: DEEP DOWN
Raven stood on the rock in space, the stars and galaxies glowed red, sinister doorways of rock can be seen far away.
A path formed from slate grey stone in front of her and she began to walk to the doorway she wanted.
"It's not wise to come in here often" said a yellow cloaked Raven pushing her large glasses up her nose.
Six different versions of Raven stood in a huge library, all wearing different coloured cloaks identifying them as different emotions or aspects of Raven herself.
The original blue cloaked Raven sat sullenly on a tall backed chair, her back straight and her arms folded, her hood was up.
"Tell me something I don't know" challenged blue Raven
Yellow Raven faltered
"Um… I could tell you things you don't remember so well... Maybe but nothing you don't already know"
Pink Raven threw an arm around Yellow Raven's shoulders as she laughed freely
"Ha! She got' cha there, smarty!"
The pink Raven smiled at the original
"So what's up? Party? Crisis? Chasing out another intruder or is it just a good old fashioned visit?
"Intruder!" shouted a green cloaked Raven rushing forward (and knocking a brown cloaked Raven and an orange cloaked Raven straight on their asses)
"We have to fight! We have to face them and get rid of any threats with an iron fist!"
She punched into the air
"Ha! Who's with me?"
All other emotions just mumbled or made other dismissive gestures
"We get it! Sheesh! I thought pinky was bad but at least she doesn't try to look for fights every other day" said the orange cloaked Raven sitting sprawled on the ground but not seeming to care
"Pinky! I like it!" beamed the pink cloaked one.
"Please, can't we just stop fighting?" pleaded the grey cloaked raven holding tightly to the brown cloaked one
"Hell no! I was challenged! It would be cowardly to back down now that..."
"EENOUGH!"
The original Raven was now on her feet,
"I didn't come here to listen to your petty disagreements I came here because…"
She noticed the red cloaked Raven smirking by the doorway, the blue cloaked Raven took a deep breath and swiftly gave the red one the finger before she turned to them all
"As I was saying; I'm here because you haven't been behaving yourselves, you seem to want attention and I want to know what you want."
"I know! And you know too" said yellow
"Enlighten me" said Raven apathetically
"You've been ignoring us!" whispered Grey, her lip trembling as if she was on the verge of tears
"What are you talking about? I meditate everyday to keep you all in check" sighed the original
"No. you've been pushing us down. It's not the same." said Yellow
"I mean it's not like you haven't got control! You've gotten so much stronger. Let us out a little once and a while" said green
"NO!" squeaked Brown, covering her eyes with her hands "what if something goes wrong? What if he doesn't like us anymore? What if..."
"He doesn't like us!" wailed Grey
"Don't say that!" snapped orange
"He's such a cutie!" squealed pink "and super nice! He didn't even yell when we hit him in the face, he's such a sweetie!"
"In case none of you have noticed, he's not exactly up for grabs" growled red
"What the hell are you all talking about? This has to stop!" shouted blue Raven
"Don't play coy! You're jealous!" sang pink with a smile "you are thinking very affectionately toward a certain boy wonder!"
Chaos reigned for a few seconds as all emotion shouted their opinions
"I KNEW THAT!" said Yellow loudly "I DID!"
"The princess doesn't even deserve him!" growled Red "when have we ever gotten something like affection that didn't go horribly wrong! KILL 'EM ALL! The sanctimonious do gooders!"
"I bet he could burp the alphabet. That is so cool" sniggered orange
"We don't need affection! It's for the weak! We're brave enough to be alone!" burst out green
"No! Don't do anything! They're scary! Something scary will defiantly happen!" shivered Brown
Grey just wailed loudly with the occasional sob
"The alphabet! Ha ha! Good one!" giggled pink clapping orange on the back.
Raven's eyes glowed white, the whole room trembled. All emotions fell silent at once
"I do not have a crush on Robin" she said coldly
"Pssft! Yeah, whatever" smiled pink
"Coward" shot Green
"At least find out what he's like between the sheets" leered orange but was pushed away by red.
"You're disgusting!" laughed pink
"I thought Malchior would've kept you all quiet for a while" whispered Raven
Everyone was silent for a few seconds
"… Let's go burn that book" said Red
"We won't be ignored" said Yellow "nothing good can happen if we are. Things are changing"
"Change! Change! Change!" sang pink "CHANGE! Chaaaaaange!"
"I'm leaving!" growled Raven, she spun on her heel and marched out of Yellow's domain
"Change is coooming!" giggled pink
"Go make a man outta boy wonder!" called orange then started sniggering again
SLAM!
Once again Raven was alone in a vastness of red stars and black space
"Hmpf" she muttered gathering her cloak around her
"What do they know?"
Author's notes: aah Raven, we have a saying where I'm from "don't be such a fuckin' eijit". But who can blame her? Crushes are scary things.
Anyways,
WHY AM I GETTING NO REVIEWS!
What am I doing wrong? Where am I screwing up so badly? Is it badly written? Does the plot suck?
I'm beyond confused.