Hello people! This is the edited version of my first fic called ' Life's not fair'. Constructive criticism is welcomed, but flames can be laughed at or go to hell. Thank you and have a great day.
Chapter One: What the Hell!
"AMAYA!" I shouted, bounding up the stairs and bursting into her room.
"What?" she whined, looking up from her laptop.
"Guess what! Guess what I got you!" I shouted excitedly. She looked up from her screen and gave me a glare.
Amaya quirked an eyebrow. "Um... a doll?" asked the girl in question.
I hit the back of her brown haired head, making quite a few brown hairs fall into her pale face. She then got up, walked over to me and... wacked me in the head. "No! A video game we both know and love!" I hinted, completely ignoring the wack. She then walked over to the bed and planted her lazy ass there.
Amaya glared at me, blowing the hair out of her face and ran her fingers through it. "Majora's Mask?" she asked again. "And what the hell did I tell you about hitting my head?"
I ignored the comment, being my too hyper, excited self to be concerned.
"No better!" I screamed, jumping up and down. "Ocarina of Time!" I yelled.
My step-sister opened her mouth, but whatever insult she had been planning on saying suddenly died on her lips. Her eyes widened, her glare and frown quickly being replaced by a look of pure joy. She leaped off the bed, nearly knocking over her laptop in her hurry to glomp me. She knocked both of us to the floor with her enthusiasm.
I turned to the side so as not to land on our newest prize-earning a bruise on my hip and elbow from slamming into the floor so awkwardly. I let out shout. Amaya was too excited to notice my small sacrifice, however. I unceremoniously pushed her off my bruised and hurt self. A few seconds later, she regained her usual calm composure and she let out a feigned cough, embarrassment showing slightly on her normally pale cheeks. "OW!" I shouted,
pushing Amaya off of me.
"Where is it?"
"Right here."
I answered. I pulled the game out from behind my back.
The brown-haired girl, lunged for the cartridge, knocking me over yet again, and knocked me down. This made it my turn to glare.
"Amaya," I whined, "stop knocking me down!"
Slam!
We both stopped whatever it is we were doing and looked fearfully at
the door.
"GIRLS! GET YOUR ASSES DOWN HERE!" our adoptive mother screamed. Looking at each other in surprise and horror,we ran down the stairs and stopped in front of the woman.
"What is it, ma'am?" We asked in unison.
"I have a checklist that I want you to complete. I also want it done by the time I get home. If not, you WILL be punished," she demanded, smiling sadistically when she
said 'punished'. "I have someone coming over and I expect you to stay in your rooms for the rest of the night. After dinner, of course." She demanded.
"Yes, ma'am," we complied, bowing. Handing us the checklist, she walked out of the door and locked it.
So... First thing on the list is.…," I announced after a few minutes of awkward silence, "cleaning the whole freaking mansion."
After making dinner for our "Mother,", Amaya and I went to bed.
3 Person POV
That night, a lone figure crept out of the T.V. The game had been left on. The person had long black cape and a hood over its head. After about ten steps toward the bed, however, the menacing slunk of the figure abruptly ended as it tripped, sending him falling face-first to the ground with a resounding thunk!
When Bob (That's what I named him) got up, he looked to the ground and found a... bouncy ball? What the hell? There goes the awesome entrance. When he got to the girl's bed, he didn't see a lump, he saw the two girls, sitting on their bed, talking. They were probably so engrossed in
talking that they didn't even here him. Sneaking up behind them, Bob cast a
spell... and just like that, they were gone.
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'Splash!' My eyes shot open as the cold water hit my back. I sunk closer to the watery ground for a minute before the shock of the sudden rush of cold water wore off.
'Shit! I need to swim!' was the only registered thought in my mind. I clawed and kicked at the water, trying to get to the surface for my precious air. I didn't notice when my feet got tangled up in the seaweed (Lets just pretend there is, how else would the fish get hiding places? All water ecosystems need plants) , but I did notice I wasn't getting any closer to my goal.
The burning in my lungs made me want to gasp for air that wasn't there, but I couldn't. I do NOT, under ANY circumstances, want lungs full of water.(..in case you haven't noticed)
I continued attacking the water, but the grips of the seaweed just wouldn't loosen.
I continued kicking, finally feeling the death grips on my ankles loosen. Black spots covered my vision from the lacking air supply. I tucked my lips into my mouth and bit them, refusing to part them so I could get a watery grave.
With one final kick, my ankles were let free. Kicking with all my might, I reached to the top of the water and resurfaced. Finally!
I coughed and spluttered, gulping large amounts of air. I swam to land, my feet getting dirty in the mud. I shuddered, a breeze hitting my wet, darkly tanned skin.
I looked at my surroundings, finding myself wanting to know where I almost drowned. It was... breathtaking! Dark green grass, light blue sky with fluffy white clouds, but the lake, oh the lake was gorgeous! It was pure, light blue. But, the most beautiful part about it was how the light shone on it. All that pure, beautiful water, with the sun high in the sky, making the water sparkle. It was the prettiest thing I had ever seen!
I shuddered again, my arms getting goosebumps. Looking to my right, I saw two scarecrows, and looking to my left I saw a white house with a blue roof and (what looks like) a chimney. I walked over to the door and knocked. No one answered. Maybe they're gone?
I knocked again, this time louder. Still, no one answered. I sighed, turning around. I spotted another building, it was white and had a brown roof, but... it was a little bit harder to get to.
It was on a little piece of land that was disconnected from the land I was standing on now. I decided that it wouldn't be worth it and I didn't want to take another chance at drowning.
So, I looked around once more and spotted an "Exit" to this part of land. I walked forward, heading towards it so I could look for someone else. Maybe they would be nice, if I was lucky.
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What felt like hours later, I was walking along a dirt path leading to... somewhere. The sky was blessed with beautiful pinks and oranges of the evening sky.
'I wonder what's happened to Amaya. I hope she's all right. I need to find out where I am- and fast! But first, I need to work on surviving. Dammit! Why couldn't I have- Hey,that's a castle!' I thought, continuing my walk in the unknown land.
I ran as fast as I could, wanting to get to a town as fast as I could. It looked like it was about to rain, so I needed to get to any type of shelter as quickly as possible.
The minute I ran onto the drawbridge, though, it started rising. With a burst of speed, I ran faster than I had before, jumped off the drawbridge, and... fell flat on my face. 'That's gonna leave a bruise in the mornin' I thought, quoting Hellboy.
I silently stalked into the town, my stomach rumbling as loud as the roaring thunder above me in the sky.
Sadly, and unknowingly, I wouldn't be eating for a few days.
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Hu... hu... hu...
My footsteps ran across the ground, my heart pounding in my ears.
Hu... hu... hu...
I could hear other footsteps behind me, three men shouting for me to stop and give me back their money.
No, I hadn't stolen anything, but I did cheat them out of their money playing a card game.
I kept running, but spotted an alleyway and ducked into it. I saw the two of them run past and let out a breath. 'Wait. There were three men, weren't there? Where's the other one?' I thought, beginning to panic.
I didn't hear the footsteps until it was too late. A hand clamped on my mouth, making me let out a muffled shriek. The man chuckled and yelled to the other men I had cheated.
They came running back and turned into the alley. My eyes widened in horror when one of the men pulled out a knife and walked towards me.
I struggled, trying to get out of the man's death grip. I fell limp,trying to get man1 to let me go (That actually works). As expected, I slid out of his arms and ashed, only to have someone else grab my wrist.
I twisted my wrist towards his thumb, making him let go again. 'Jeez, they're persistent! Why won't the just believe that it was beginner's luck! Even though I did lie about that...' I thought.
I ran forward again, but something stopped me from going any further. Pain exploded in my abdomen, making me look down at my (hungry)stomach. There was red. And there was the dagger. It took a moment to recover from the sudden wave of pain, my stomach producing another. I felt something in my throat build up. I couldn't help it, after all the abuse my mother put me through, there was never anything as bad as this.
I let loose a bloodcurdling scream.
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Sheik: You forgot to do the disclaimer.
Me: No I didn't.
Sheik: Yes you did, see. points at top
Me:*grumbles* ** hole... Sheik.
Sheik: What?
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Sheik: SMILEH does not own anything except cyber cookies, Roozu and Amaya and
her plot.
Me: When I said 'Flames can go to hell' I meant that I would have them tickled
until they're nice. So...ya *tosses cookie into conveniently placed lava pit*
Sheik:*paws at lava pit and whimpers* but I like the cookie.
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Shiek: There might be a song next chapter, so we'll put up a warning for those who don't like to read the songs.
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