Okay so here is the revised version of the first chapter. It wiould make me feel good if you could review and tell me if I improved the chapter. Also if you for any reason have any correctons, or constructive critism than please feel free to tell me and ideas are always welcome!

"So this is Konoha" said a female of medium height and probably 17 years of age. She had white flowing hair down her back and her eyes were pale but you could swear you could see hints of blue, purple, and a bit of red at times.

The young women approached the large entrance gates. She allowed her chakra to seep out from her body and cover the landscape in front of her in such a slight way that it would take someone extremely keen to chakra to notice it.

As she got within 10 feet of the gates a pooping sound echoes through her ears and the chakra that now lay on the ground signaled to her that a man, 'most likely a anbu' she thought to herself, now stood before her.

"What is your business here?" he asked her sternly. She looked at him dumbly at first her eyebrow raised and then realised that he needed the pass that she had. "Oh I'm so sorry" she said quickly with a bow before sticking her hand it some random pocket and fishing around for that damn piece of paper that was her passport. As she finally got it into her hands she held it out to the man that now stood in front of her and she could tell by his chakra that he was thuroughly annoyed.

She faced him and put a smile on her face after he took the paper and began telling him who she was and why she was here "You see I'm here to see the hokage and see if I can be of any use to Konoha my name's Atachi Rain" she relaxed her body trying to seem...what was the word, unnoticable maybe?

"Understood" he said in a crisp voice that seemed to scream at her to just leave his sight already. He pointed towards the middle of the city where a tall building stood in the center of the village. He looked back at her to be sure she knew where she was going. However when he turned back towards her his annoyance flooded his veins 'stupid wench isn't even paying attention' she hadn't even pretended to follow his finger. All she did wa sstare at him with that stupid grin still in place.

"That's the hokage tower; go there to meet the hokage" he told her annoyed, not caring if she got lost bacause she didn't pay attention to him it wasn't his job to be a tour guide to ditzy broads.

She only continued to smile at him completely annoying the glare that would normally send someone back to their mommy's. She bowed once again to him thanking him slowly "arigato" and with that she walked past him. Not even taking notice of where he had pointed.

As she walked through Konoha she closed her eyes and let her mind wonder. Her chakra stretched before her so that her body was able to avoid any bumps with the rushing traffic of people buying stufff at the market.
'Wow this city is packed full of people, I can feel their strength in mind and body' she smiled softly 'such strong spirits' She felt the warmth of their energies sink into her.While she looked at the city in a way only she could she accidentally ran into something. She felt herself fall backwards and her back become close friends with the ground.

"Gomen are you alright" she heard a male voice ask from above her. The man had brown hair that was pulled into a tight pony tail. He put his hand out for her to grab on to.

"Oh it's fine, it was my fault" she said as she reached for the hand. grasping only the air. She sighed to herself as she stopped searching for the invisible hand and just held it out for the man to grab ahold of.

"I haven't seen you around here are you new?" he asked her as he caught her hand. looking confused at her flailing. Before he hefted her light form back to it's feet.

"Hai, I'm here to see the Hokage, can you take me to her?" she asked as she cocked her head to the side. One of her hands sliding along her back and trying to sooth the bruise that would most likely form in a few hours.

"Of course follow me" He told her as he turned towards the large building that stood in the center of the city. She sent her chakra out once again. However she didn't notice the shiver that creeped up the spine of the man who she was now following. She once again closed her eyes and let her mind try and concentrate on the man leading her to her destination.

'His chakra is weird' she thought to herslef as she allowed her chakra to slightly bathe him in its light. 'it's like a shadow, know wonder I didn't feel it' her eyebrows furrowed as she wondered about this strange man, who had an aura almost as opaque as hers."Here we are" She heard his voice enter her mind knocking her out of her reverie and back to the present. She shook her head and directed her eyes towards the mass of shadow that made up the puzzle of a man before her.

"Arigato um…" she never introduced herself and his name was never said either. She felt silly as the silence stretched. She began tow onder if he would even bother to answer her.

Suddenly his voice cut through the air "Oh, I'm sorry I forgot to introduce myself" he said with a smile that seemed to envelope his entire body. she shivered as she felt his smiel through gher chakra, and not for the first time regretted not being able to see it. She smield softly to him in return waiting for him to begin the introduction.

"I'm Nara Shikamaru" he told her in a voice that was soft and yet held hidden strength. A smile and warmth spilling from his words.

"I'm Atachi Rain, It's nice to meet you" she said no longer being able the hide the infectious smile that seemed to want to take over her face. For some reaosn she felt very happy to have met this man that stood before her, and for an even wierder reason she felt drawn to him. She shook her head and calmed the jaw splitting grin.

"Well here you are" he said to the beautiful women that he hadn't been able to tear his gaze from. 'I don't want to leave yet' he heard himself say,. He felt shocked to realise that it was the truth. But how could he be so drawn to such a stranger?

"Um which room is it?" she asked him moving her head around like she was lost and without direction. 'I have no clue where to go' she thought to herself almost desperately.

"What?" he asked her disbelief evident in his voice. His face held a funny look that held the 'are you shitting me look' he rose his eyebrow before saying "The one right there that says 'HOKAGE-SAMA'" he told her slowly like a child who was in a dazed state.

She felt her face heat up and she knw that it was covered with a bright blush "thank you" she said so quietly he had to strain in order ot hear what she had said.She then let her head drop and her face stared at the ground she disposition being that she wanted to melt into the floor, she sighed again to herslef before attempting to head for the door.

He saw her body slump as she headed toward sthe door. "Well since I'm here I'll come with you" he said with a sigh as if it was a bother and went to open and hold the door for her, all the while trying to hide his smile.

"Are you sure it's not too troublesome" she said in a voice that tried to hide her hopefulness. At her ill attempt to keep her true emotions from her voice he felt himself begin to struggle to keep the laughter that threatened to erupt from inside him.

He smiled softly at the girl in front of him that still wore that strange smile that was attampting to be meek and yet completely failing. He laughed to himself "no its not troublesome" he said to her flashing her a reassuring smiel 'I think this girl is growing on me' he thought to himself. ((Yea I know Shikamaru's a bit OC but please bear with me))

"Ok then" she said with a smile a bounce now evident in her step. He opened the door for her and allowed her to step in before him. She entered the chambers of the Hokage slowly. Turning her head to his face and flashing him a slight smiel before completely entering the beasts lair. ((LOL))

"Who's there" said a woman who looked about in her 20's she had blond hair and an abnormally large chest. Her hands were rubbing at her eyes as though she had only recently woken up. Her sleeping may have explained the disarray of the papers that lay about her desk

"Hello Hokage-sama my name is Atachi Rain and I've come to offer my services to Konoha" she said in a confident voice as she bowed to the powerful figure in front of her. She never even noticed the disarray in the office. The only thing she could tell was that th women in front of her held incredible chakra that nearly made her knees go weak.

"Hmm were are you from and what are your qualifications?" she asked slowly as she looked the newcomer up and down. She noticed how the person in ront of her held very few weapons and seemed to posses a body that seemed very delicate. She couldn't help but wonder who this strange girl was.

"I'm from the rain country and I am skilled in many different aspects" she began as she pulled the passport from another random pocket and stepped towards her and held her outstretched hand with the paper towards her. "I'm a skilled med-nin, The people who taught me told me that I was unhumanly good at gen-jutsus" she said as if that was all "Oh and I'm at my best when I am working in the rain or the dark." she said in a voice that seemed somewhat lifeless.

Suddenly Tsunade cut her off "in the rain and why's that?" she wondered why anyone would choose to work in the rain and much less be betetr in th erain that without it. She looked on at the very strange girl before her noticing the change in her facial expression.

"Well you see to tell you the truth I'm blind" she said allowing her words to sink in. However before she could say anything she began again "I don't see with my eyes I see with my mind so to say" she told the women in front of her slightly wishing Shikamaru hadn't come with her.

Her voice held both shame and pride of her ability and it was this combination that caused Tsunade to raise her eyebrow 'A strange girl indeed. in a way that seemed ashamed and proud at teh same time

"what?" Tsunade asked her voice echoing her confusion, as to how that could be possible in such a young girl."You see I am blind however I can feel the vibrations in the earth and air around me, and I can sense the chakras of poeple as well" she recited as she had, had to do many times before. She waited to either hear the disgust or the lust for her abilities in the voice of this person.

"Oh really" said Tsunade in a voice that held disbelief and wonder. She raised her brow yet again 'that seems somewhat unreal' she thought to herself continuing to look the strange girl in front of her up and down."Hai, and I would appreciate it if you didn't tell anyone, it would seem like I'm handicapped and that's not true I can function like everyone else except that I can't perfectly see small things unless I put in a lot of concentration and I can't read" she said. Determination evident in her voice.

"Understood, Shikamaru take Miss Atachi and test her skills" she said her interest pulled out even more at the sound of this girls voice. "I want you to rate her skills and then report back to me" she said firmly as she traded looking at the girl to Shikamaru who had been standing in the back of the room silently until now.

"Hai Tsunade-sama" he said as he grabbed her hand and left the room. 'well what a troublesome day this turned out ot be.' He though silently to himself however he couldn't stop a small smile from creeping onto her lips.

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