Special thanks to Jack Storm 448 for doing this collab review with me. Jack Storm 448 is the author of "Rising Storm- Book 1"
BOOOOOM!
A black wall was blown apart by Keldeo's Focus Blast.
Keldeo the Critic!
Keldeo activated his Secret Sword and swung it, causing the screen to burst.
Keldeo sprayed water from his hooves, using Hydro Pump to send Nature's Child Rosella blasting off.
Keldeo and Santa Paws screamed in horror as huge burst of dark purple energy erupted in front of them.
Ghost Pony Rider roared.
He reviews those Pokemon FanFics!
Kyurem and Cryogonal the Critics both screamed as a zombie Lucario with a chainsaw appeared on their TV.
Keldeo screamed in horror, but slapped himself to snap out of it.
Justinian was seated behind a desk in his study, with Keldeo standing on the other side.
Keldeo the Critic!
Mewtwo punched Mewtwo Girl in the face.
"FORESHADOWING!" Munna exclaimed.
"NO SHIP, SHERCLOCK!" the Intoxiquer shouted.
"Eww," Meloetta said.
"AHH!" Keldeo jumped back in shock as Rosella was now floating there.
So much to see and do!
Matthais Unidostres and BrickBrony1894 bro-hoofed.
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Meloetta danced around and sang while dressed as Elsa from Frozen.
Sherclop Pones laughed demonically as his eyes glowed a demonic red.
Keldeo and Ryan the Lucario fought on a cliff top, Secret Sword and Bone Rush clashing over and over.
He's a Sword of Justice!
Button Mash and Sweetie Belle bonked heads as they tried playing Wonderbolt Free Fliers.
Keldeo burst out of the ice encasing him in an explosion of light.
Keldeo the Critic!
Keldeo reared up on his hind legs, his expression serious and his Secret Sword raised and glowing brightly.
Keldeo the Critic- Season Three
"Conquering the Dark" PREVIEW by AuraWielder
Keldeo is back on the stone in the Moor of Icirrus lake. "It's me! Keldeo the Critic! I review Pokemon Fanfiction when I'm not training with the other Swords of Justice!" Keldeo smiled innocently and said, "Do you remember my review of Breaking the Chains?"
A large pan suddenly landed on Keldeo's head. His left eye twitched as the pan fell to the ground.
"I already apologized for part three of that review, okay!" Keldeo exclaimed in frustration, "Gosh! . . .Biscuits. . . Anyway, AuraWielder has started writing a sequel to that story, and I think it's just as good if not better! Conquering the Dark!"
Conquering the Dark
By: AuraWielder
In a dark new world, all are to bow before Overlord Cyrus. Only the Resistance, who aims to overthrow him and refuse to bow, remains. And in the middle of the chaos, Riley and his Lucario Aaron are called upon to save this alternate reality from the Overlord Cyrus, Palkia, and Aaron himself. An AU fic and sequel to Breaking the Chains. Like BtC, it also contains Christian themes.
"The story isn't finished yet. Heck, it's hardly even begun. But I feel I have to check out what's occurred so far and what things are different from the first story. But I have to admit, Conquering the Dark is kind of a harrowing exploring into the gloom and doom of an uncertain future caused by people who've made the wrong choices and life. And well, that makes me kinda nervous."
Keldeo sighed, "You know, I'd really appreciate someone to collab with right now, like those collabs I did with Ryan and Jordan. That would be nice, but I don't have anyone to do that with right now."
Suddenly, a swirling blue portal opened up right behind Keldeo, and out of it tumbled a human boy with ragged golden hair, and a jacket with a lightning bolt on the back.
"GAH!" Keldeo shouted in shock, shying away from the human.
"Ouch," the boy groaned from the floor, "What just... Where am I?"
Keldeo blinked as he studied the person with his eyes, "Wait. . .are you Jack Storm?"
"Ugh, who wants to... Oh; it's you, Keldeo." Jack got up and surveyed his surroundings, "Okay, two questions; where am I, and how did I get here?"
Keldeo shrugged, "Well first, you're in Unova, in the Moor of Icirrus. As for how you got here, I really don't know. Maybe you fell through a Magnagate or something? What were you doing before you got here?"
"Sleeping," Jack dead-panned, "It was the middle of the night in Sinnoh."
"Middle of the night?" Keldeo asked, "Well, you dropped in here at an odd time then."
"Speaking of which," Jack said, suddenly interested, "What were you doing before I fell into existence?"
"Oh, well I was just about to start a FanFiction Review," Keldeo's eyes widened, and he smiled, "Hey. . .do you wanna review it with me? Maybe comment on the event in the story with me? It has a Lucario in it!"
Jack thought for a moment, then a smile crossed his face, "Well, since I'm here... Just give me a minute to don my 'traditional' apparel."
With that, Jack grabbed his bag, which had fallen on the ground beside him, and walked off-screen.
"Um, okay, you go do that." Keldeo smiled, "Alright then, reviewing this story with me today is the human who was raised by a Lucario family, from Rising Storm, give it up for Jack Storm!"
Jack ran back on-screen, in his trademark blue robes. He then waved to the audience, "Hi, Mom!"
"Okay then, Jack. Are you ready to take journey. . ." Keldeo's eyes widened and his voice echoed mysteriously, "INTO THE FUTURE. . "
Jack cracked his knuckles, "Definitely. I just have one question."
"Ask away."
"Exactly what are we reviewing?"
Conquering the Dark
Chapter 1: A Dark New World
"A tale of an dark alternate future, 'Conquering the Dark' by AuraWielder," Keldeo explained.
"We start off with the three main villains of this story."
"So… how are things fairing along? The prisoner, what is of him?"
Those were the words that World Leader Cyrus had to ask. He sat on his remarkable throne of shining white, with the colors of the throne contrasting greatly with his black cape ever since he had quite literally become the King of the World. He smiled a bit to himself, something he rarely ever did as he reminisced of how the world came to be his. Only a few fleeting thoughts were generated in his head before he quickly brought himself back to reality.
"Well, Commander?" he asked again, before a large, and rather intimidating Lucario. Of course, he was not intimidated in the slightest. But he had no reason to be. After all, the Lucario served him, not vice versa.
"Of course, master." the Lucario nodded. "An update. We have detained the prisoner and he is currently in his jail cell. We have tried interrogating him upon the whereabouts of the Resistance, but he is adamant about refusing to confess."
"The Resistance…" the King thought to himself. They were the only thing left standing in his way. Sure, he already had every nation bow to him. Kanto, Johto, Hoenn, Sinnoh, Unova, and Kalos… but what did it mean if some simply refused to bow? And worse yet, some of those that refused to bow formed their own resistance, aiming to take down Cyrus. Cyrus himself knew it was impossible for him to be overthrown, but the discovery of the Resistance bugged him. Since then, he vowed to find them, and make absolute certain of two things. The first would be to have them submit and acknowledge him as their lord. The second would be to kill those that refused. But that would be a matter of when, not if, he would find them.
"You've tried torture, haven't you?" Cyrus said aloud.
"Tried it." a disappointed Palkia sighed, coming in from the hallway. "He screams, but nothing else comes out of his mouth."
"And right away, I can tell that Cyrus is the mastermind; this guy practically radiates evil," Jack said.
"NO SHIP, SHERLOCK!" Keldeo exclaimed comically, but then he blushed nervously and said, "Um. . .I was quoting the Intoxiquer. . .he's a Crobat. . .he's friends with Genesect. . .uh, never mind. Anyway, if you think Cyrus is bad, check out Palkia's character!"
Palkia nodded. He walked from the entrance of the hallway to the step of Cyrus' throne, which was quite the long distance. Similar to Cyrus, he reminisced about everything he had done to get into this position of power.
Power. It was all he wanted, really. Money and riches never meant much to him. Power was what he craved. It was his love, his passion, and his addictive drug. He thought back to what he had done to attain all of this power. He betrayed his mother, the powerful deity Arceus. His betrayal helped stir Cyrus' own plans of power into motion. He had gathered the material necessary to create the Red Chain, the only thing that could enslave Arceus, all in exchange for more power, more say, and more dominance than his mother. He was relatively happy with the position he was in right now. As the official 'punishment deliverer' (or simply the top torturer), he had more power than Arceus would have ever agreed to give him. He held his power and dominance over every disobedient and rebellious slave. He had just come back from torturing the prisoner, disappointed that he hadn't spilled any information regarding the Resistance.
"That is one seriously disturbed Pokemon..." Jack stopped short, "Wait a second; what did he just say?"
He betrayed his mother, the powerful deity Arceus.
Jack angrily powered up an Aura Sphere in his hand, before taking several deep breaths and calming down.
"Okay, I'll let the 'deity' thing pass, but it drives me up the wall when people portray Arceus as female."
Keldeo shyed away from the Aura Sphere, "Gah! Put that thing away!"
"So… both of you say that the prisoner have refused to reveal any information, correct?" Cyrus inquired. "Not even after torture?"
"That would be correct, master." the Commander nodded.
"…Then I believe you know what to do. The prisoner shall have the same fate as that of Zekrom. Go to it immediately, Commander Aaron." the King ordered.
"So, anyway, the conversation ends with Cyrus telling the Commander to take care of their prisoner like they did Zekrom. Wow, they managed to catch Zekrom. But then, we get a look into the Commander's tragic past."
Anakin Skywalker: "I killed them. . .I killed them all."
"Uh, no, not like that."
Flashback
"Mommy…Daddy…where are you?"
He was lost. Lost in the fire that flooded the valley. He ran through the valley looking for them.
"Mommy! Daddy!" he cried to them. "What's happening?"
There was no answer.
"Where are you?"
Silence. Throughout the entire valley.
"Help me!"
After an eternity of searching, he came across their two lifeless bodies. Burnt to death by the fire…
"I have to admit," Jack said, "I can't help but feel sorry for the guy when I read that. Unfortunately, the feeling passes quickly."
Shortly after the deaths of his parents, he was kidnapped by Team Galactic, the same people who burnt down the Green Valley, where the large Lucario community used to live. The location was long forgotten now. Team Galactic did many cruel things to him as a Riolu, and even as a Lucario after a forced evolution. But all of this torture stopped when Cyrus made him an offer. Join Team Galactic, or continue to suffer. At first, he wanted to refuse and have nothing to do with the evil man. But upon being offered power… power beyond his wildest dreams… and the promise to help him conquer the world… he seized the chance. Since the fateful day where Aaron had accepted the offer to join, he had been treated with much less cruelty. His evil ambitions were propelled further when Palkia joined up with Team Galactic, with the power of Arceus in his, Palkia's, and Cyrus' hands. He hadn't regretted the decision to join Team Galactic at all, satisfied with his position as the Commander of Cyrus' army. Getting to torture uncooperative prisoners was just a nice bonus.
"Well, we've yet to see what the Commander can really do. So we follow him as he meets up with their prisoner who happens to be Rayquaza."
Rayquaza: "This is punishment for trashing LaRousse City, isn't it?"
The Commander stepped closer to Rayquaza, with the Legendary unable to do anything to propel or force him back. He placed his paw on the Legendary's head, sending psychic waves of energy into his mind, and altering everything that Rayquaza believed in. Rayquaza jerked around as he tried to force the thoughts out of his mind, but to no avail.
"You don't belong to the Resistance anymore." Lucario stated as a fact. "You obey our Empire. You obey me. You obey your lord, Cyrus. You are my soldier, and will do as I say."
Rayquaza jerked around even more violently underneath the chains, trying his hardest to break them, and trying to eject the manipulative thoughts and powerful suggestions out of his head.
"I am your master, and Cyrus is your lord." Commander Aaron stated again, harshly re-enforcing those thoughts back into Rayquaza. "You are my obedient soldier, and you worship and obey the Empire."
"N…No." he whimpered, with his will weakening. His heart and soul truly did not want to give it to this manipulative and evil brainwashing, but the psychic powers altered the heart and soul themselves. His mind was slowly starting to give in, as tears formed in Rayquaza's eyes.
"That's it." Commander Aaron smiled, caressing his head as the brainwashing completed as the tears in Rayquaza's eyes dried out. "You are my soldier, my slave, and… you belong to me."
Keldeo shrugged, "Well this makes sense, because Lucario is a Psychic-type. . ." Keldeo blinked and frowned, "Oh wait. . .no he's not-HOW THE HAY IS HE DOING THAT!?"
"I know! Right?" Jack agreed, "And remember what I said about me not feeling sorry for him for long? This scene is why."
"Yes... Master."
Jack shivers, "I have to admit, that gives me the creeps for some reason. Fortunately, that scene is over now, and we move on to..."
"Keldeo, you need to remain calm and focus. You'll never hit your target if you thrash wildly in frustration."
A sigh of annoyance was heard. "Yes, Xerneas."
"Oh, hey; it's you, Keldeo!"
Xerneas and Keldeo were out in the practice fields. Located about half a mile away from the main headquarters of the Resistance, it was used as a training ground by the members. Right now, Xerneas was battling Keldeo, using less of his normal power to help train him.
Keldeo didn't seem to hear Jack at all. He seemed to be completely captivated by something.
"Oh my gosh, Xerneas. . ." Keldeo gasped out, looking totally star struck, "Xerneas is SO awesome."
"Now, listen again. Your goal is to be able to strike me down and leave me helpless. As you know, I am a Fairy-type. Dragon moves will not work against me, and I am also super effective against your Fighting-type. Tell me Keldeo… what is the best way to defeat an enemy that has an advantage over you? You don't have any Steel or Poison moves."
Keldeo thought for a moment. "Well… if I don't have any Steel or Poison moves, and if Fighting-type moves aren't effective against Fairy-types, then wouldn't a Water-type move be my best option?"
Xerneas nodded. "Indeed, it would. However, if you do find yourself trapped in a situation you cannot win, then there is no shame in fleeing to save your life."
"Xerneas is so wise. . ." Keldeo said as his eyes grew big and sparkly as gazed at the bigger Legendary Pokemon.
Jack let out a small laugh, "Well folks, I think we've found his weakness. Hold on, wait a second; why is Xerneas training AU-Keldeo anyway? Where are the other Swords of Justice..."
Keldeo scowled at the sound of this. "I'm not running away! I'd be a coward! The last time I did that…"
"Oh no; don't tell me..."
Flashback
"Keldeo, wake up." said a voice.
Keldeo slowly blinked his eyes and stood up. "Terrakion? Virizion? It's the middle of the night. Why…?"
"We don't have time to explain. We'll tell you on the way." Terrakion stated, urging the young colt to follow him.
It wasn't until Keldeo got outside of the cave did he know what was going on. The entire Moor of Icirrus was on fire, burning away everything that Keldeo knew and loved. The three began to gallop out of the area, planning to find a safer area in Unova. "V-Virizion?"
"Yes, Keldeo?"
"W-What's going on? Why is our home on fire? Who would…?"
Keldeo snapped out of his trance and tilted his head to the side. "Wait, what's happening?"
The Lucario chuckled, with his eyes as red as blood and his laugh being a very dark and cruel laugh. "In a few words… I am Commander Aaron… and your ultimate end."
He swiftly charged up a glowing red Aura Sphere almost to signify that the attack itself had a ruthless, evil aura, and aimed at Terrakion. Keldeo, the first to react, ran towards the Lucario in an attempt to stop him from attacking. But the attack was in futile effort. It barely made a scratch on the powerful Lucario as he painfully smacked Keldeo aside, and he fired his Aura Sphere towards Terrakion.
Terrakion flared up in anger. "Don't you dare do that to him! I'll show you whose end is coming! Sacred Sword!"
Terrakion quickly charged his most powerful attack, and swung at the Aura Sphere to counter it back towards the Lucario.
But it didn't work. The attack that he had always relied on failed him. A painful shattering sound was heard as the Aura Sphere broke through his Sacred Sword counter. Terrakion took the entire force of the hit, and was sent flying backwards into a stone cold rock.
"Terrakion!" Keldeo shouted in horror. He ran towards Terrakion as fast as he could, but the Lucario was even faster. The Commander used ExtremeSpeed to get over to the fallen Sword of Justice before Keldeo could. The sound that Terrakion's neck made would never leave Keldeo.
*snap*
The sound of that, along with his lifeless eyes, emotionally broke Keldeo, tears forming in his eyes. Looking at Keldeo and then the Lucario, Virizion knew what she had to do. She wasn't going to make it out of this alive, but would make sure that Keldeo would.
"Run!" she ordered.
Keldeo tried to weakly protest. "B-But…"
"RUN! NOW!"
Keldeo stood there for a moment horrified and whimpered, before following Virizion's orders. As he ran, Keldeo knew that Virizion wasn't going to get out of there alive either.
"WORSE THAN ZALTON! HE'S WORSE THAN ZALTON!" Keldeo shouted in a blind rage, appearing ready to attack wildly at any moment. But as the flashback went on and on, Keldeo's rage gave way to shock and he began to fall into a traumatized catatonic state.
Jack flinched, "And I thought 'I' got upset. We'll be right back, folks; I think Keldeo needs some therapy."
KELDEO
THE CRITIC
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