Ok i know I put the story up and then took it off because i made sooo many mistakes and the criticism was driving me crazy. So here it is, the improved, not so different first chapter:

Chapter 1: Invisible

Naruto's POV

Arrhh why did I wake up so early this morning? School doesn't start for like another 2 hours (yawn). Oh well better get up and dressed anyway.

Hi, I'm Naruto Uzumaki and I'm 14 years old and……..I'm going to school now.

I'm going to tell you one thing about my life, I don't have that many friends….well there is this one kid called Konohamaru who looks up to me and then there Shikamaru my only friend at school. We don't get bullied, even though our school has bullies, its just that we don't get noticed, no one really cares if we're there or not they don't …y'know notice.

I was on my way to school till I heard a little boy shout my name (oh crap kill me now) "hi….Konohamaru" I saw him across the road waving until he looked like he was going to run to me uh oh I better make a break for it!

Ok…ok...huff huff I think.. I'm all good now and what luck I ran straight to the school. I saw Shikamaru sitting by the entrance with his arms spread out as usual. Shikamaru was like a laid back lazy kinda guy hehe I'm gonna sneak up on him….."GUESS WHO FUCKER!!!" "HOLY SHIT AHHH!" Shikamaru rolled over and fell. "Ha ha that was classic Shikamaru you should of seen your face!" he was giving me that 'I really hate you right now look' "Fucks sake Naruto don't do that, I practically crapped my pants" "heehee mission accomplished" when we got inside the school cheerleaders were passing through the hall and nudged right passed us, see, that's what we're use too. Cheerleaders pushed passed us, jocks nearly knocked us out, it was like they didn't see us and that we were invisible, I don't complain about it and Shikamaru definatly doesn't , we just accept it.

I've accepted it for too long

I don't know about Shikamaru, but I'm starting to get sick of being pushed by, treated like I'm invisible, sooner or later I will get noticed and people in this school will know my name: Naruto Uzumaki!

So the bell rang and it was time for first period: maths…holy shit this is gonna be a long ass day (sigh) let's get this over with.