Hey guys! I'm Lizzie and I'm Izzy. This is our commentary of the infamous fanfic My Immortal written by Tara Gilesbie AKA XXXbloodywrists666XXX. We hope you guys don't lose too many brain cells reading this shit. We accept constructive criticism but please don't flame! English is not our first language and we don't have a Beta yet. Sorry in advance of our grammar sucks. We hope you enjoy our commentary because the story itself sucks. Good luck and may the force be with you.
Bold: Lizzie
Italics: Izzy
Bolded Italics: Both
AN: Special fangz (get it, coz Im goffik) No I don't get it. 2 my gf (ew not in that way) (Well what are we supposed to think? My great friend? Nobody says that) raven, bloodytearz666 4 helpin me wif da story and spelling (if this is the result of when she helped you with the spelling, I'm scared to think what it looked like before). U rok! Justin (I hope it's not the beaver) ur da luv of my deprzzing life u rok 2! (Poor Justin) MCR ROX! (Noooooooo! How dare you like one of my favorite bands!)
Hi (Hullo! Hiya!)my name is Ebony Dark'ness (random apostrophe) Dementia Raven Way (I feel sorry for you) and I have long ebony black hair (that's how I got my name) (your parents where sooooooo original) with purple streaks and red tips that reaches my mid-back and icy blue eyes like limpid tears (what the hell are limpid tears? Beats me Izzy) and a lot of people tell me I look like Amy Lee (You have GOT to be kidding me! Don't you dare compare yourself to Amy Lee! SHE'S TOTALLY AWESOME!) (AN: if u don't know who she is get da hell out of here!) (Can I?). I'm not related to Gerard Way but I wish I was because he's a major fucking hottie (INCEST ALERT!). I'm a vampire but my teeth are straight and white (Wow. Even Edward Cullen is a better vampire and that's saying something). I have pale white skin. I'm also a witch, and I go to a magic school called Hogwarts in England (Hogwarts is not in England dumbass, It's in Scotland) where I'm in the seventh year (I'm seventeen) (No shit). I'm a goth (in case you couldn't tell) and I wear mostly black. I love Hot Topic (you just ruined Hot Topic for me, I'm never going there again) and I buy all my clothes from there. For example today I was wearing a black corset with matching lace around it and a black leather miniskirt, pink fishnets and black combat boots. I was wearing black lipstick, white foundation, black eyeliner and red eye shadow. (SLUT!) I was walking outside Hogwarts. It was snowing and raining so there was no sun, which I was very happy about. A lot of preps stared at me. I put up my middle finger at them (Well she's just a ray of sunshine).
"Hey Ebony!" shouted a voice. I looked up. It was... Draco Malfoy! (What are you going to do with my imaginary husband!)
"What's up Draco?" I asked. (THE SKY DUMBASS!)
"Nothing." he said shyly. (Draco, shy?...HAHAHAHAHAHA!
But then, I heard my friends call me and I had to go away. Well that conversation was completely useless)
AN: IS it good? (let us think….NO!) PLZ tell me fangz!
PLEASE REVIEW! Whoever finds the two AVPM references will get virtual cookies and a shout out on the next chapter!