Ok, this isn't really my whole first chapter. I'm just going to post it in
small sections at first to see if it is okay. When I know it is, I'll post
the whole chapters.
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Black boots tread in the dirt road with such majestic grace that they left no tracks, no marks what so ever. A deep blood red dress that just touched the ground. Slits up the sides to mid thigh.
It was hot that day. Yes, but a pure black cloak was present, billowing out behind her, gently sweeping the ground. The hood was pulled up, casting shadows on her perfectly proportional face.
She was thin, yet her body showed strength. That she had been through the worst and survived. Long, flowing, black and silver hair that looked as if it fell to her lower back. (The two colors were mixed together in natural streaks, both colors playing an equal part.)
Eyes hidden by the shadow.
She looked as an angel would. A dark angel maybe, but and angel all the same.
She knew not why she was there, but she knew she had to go. She didn't know where she was going, but somehow, the feeling that made her leave her home told her she was going the right way. A feeling, an instinct, made her drive on. Even thought her body was deprived of sleep and food, she drove on.
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Please tell me what you think of thisso I can post the whole thing. I have about 4 or 5 chapters completed now (just not all typed up) and this is only about 1/8 of the first chapter. Or I might make it an prolouge. Tell me what you think. Please review ^_^
::~//~::
Black boots tread in the dirt road with such majestic grace that they left no tracks, no marks what so ever. A deep blood red dress that just touched the ground. Slits up the sides to mid thigh.
It was hot that day. Yes, but a pure black cloak was present, billowing out behind her, gently sweeping the ground. The hood was pulled up, casting shadows on her perfectly proportional face.
She was thin, yet her body showed strength. That she had been through the worst and survived. Long, flowing, black and silver hair that looked as if it fell to her lower back. (The two colors were mixed together in natural streaks, both colors playing an equal part.)
Eyes hidden by the shadow.
She looked as an angel would. A dark angel maybe, but and angel all the same.
She knew not why she was there, but she knew she had to go. She didn't know where she was going, but somehow, the feeling that made her leave her home told her she was going the right way. A feeling, an instinct, made her drive on. Even thought her body was deprived of sleep and food, she drove on.
::~//~::
Please tell me what you think of thisso I can post the whole thing. I have about 4 or 5 chapters completed now (just not all typed up) and this is only about 1/8 of the first chapter. Or I might make it an prolouge. Tell me what you think. Please review ^_^