This is my very first story. It is a poem about Narnia. This is the story in Susan Pevensie's Point of view. From the Lion, the witch and the wardrobe, and beyond. Anyway enjoy.

The Cronicles of Narnia

The Redemption of Susan Pevensie

Characters and story by C.S. Lewis

Ending by Zack Bradley

As we walked through the open door

We had a longing forever more

As we walked through the enchanted land

A speaking beaver found our band

But then one of us turned traitor

And he was to be redeemed a while later

Me and my sister followed his savior

Only to watch him be beat and then waver

And when we thought all things would fail

We heard the song of a nightingale

Aslan was risen, he had won

And soon the battle was done

We walked towards our thrones in awe

For we were now kings and queens by law

Fifteen years had passed during our reign

But then we found out there was more to gain

We passed through the wood and out the same door

Back in our world and children once more

A year later we were at the train station

Wishing we didn't have school in this nation

When all of the sudden we were whisked away

For in the same magic land dawned a new day

When we saw a prince descended from war

We knew at once what we had in store

We fought alongside him against our own race

Them thinking we had appeared from space

With Miraz my older brother valiantly dueled

Turning Miraz into nothing but gruel

War ensued but we did not falter

For Aslan came back and brought forth a god of water

As the water god swallowed his prey

Caspian was crowned king as we shouted hooray

But as the crowd cheered around the room

The four of us had to go soon

Four of us would leave and two would not come back

Every word hit us with a whack

Me and my brother here in our world we would stay

And did not know we could come back If we did not sway

And after we would leave and attend a lecture

We would all think of that great adventure

After many more quests had passed

My old self did not last

And instead of reality I would think it a game

I was a shame to Aslan's name

Until the greatest point of grief and sorrow

When all my kin had died on the morrow

A few more years I would live

Nothing but guilt and grief I would give

I prayed and prayed for Aslan's attention

Hoping then I would receive redemption

And then one night I was gravely ill

Yet I was praying for Aslan still

Suddenly I felt myself go

For at that moment I was dead and low

As I turned away from my lifeless self

And turned to the place of my shelf

But to my amazement the shelf was not there

But Aslan was there as I stopped and stared

And then I begged for certainty

Hoping then I would obtain mercy

And to my joy I was accepted

Because I had prayed and not relented

I followed him for what seemed a century

Following him to his new country

When at the end I ran and ran

For over there I saw a young man

This young man was my brother

Who was followed by my other brother, sister, father, and mother

We were all young and healthy spirits

All in Aslan's Country for our merits

Two sons of Adam and two daughters of Eve

Reunited again and never to leave

The End

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