Hey everyone, I decided to make this account to re-write stories that I found that have great ideas but either the grammar, spelling, or word choice makes the story either unpopular when it could be, or just plain unreadable, The first one i decided to do was The Hunger Inside Me by TJ231 and KOJ. Make sure to give the original a read or at least a look before you read my re-write. Well without further interruption on to chapter 1.
Chapter 1
Disclaimer: I don't own Tokyo Ghoul and Naruto or any anime reference that are in this story!
"Hello" Normal Talk
'Hmm' Thought or flashback
The Hunger Inside Me
"If you don't like to feel pain then why make others feel it?" That is the question I ask every day of my horrible life. Why is it horrible? One simple word: everyone. They ignore me, my Famile basically ingnore me to the point of neglect, and the reason for it is thanks to my siblings. I am the oldest out of my two sisters and brother, but back to the topic my "Family" started training them in combat because soon they would become members of the CCG or Commission of Counter Ghoul. My dream since I was little was to be like my parents but now that is impossible because I didn't receive the training to enter and because 'IT' happened. I became a Ghoul. A Ghoul is a person that can eat only human flesh and they have an organ called kakuhou that thanks to that they can create a unique weapon called kagune. Now, I am what my family hates and kills every day, but you know what? I don't really care! This is the perfect opportunity to take revenge on those pricks for ignoring me my whole life! I can imagine now their bleeding corpses on my feet now! And their hearts in my hands! A-A-And the blood t-t-the delicious BLOOD! HA HA HA HA HA ha ha. I cant do it alone. I know that attacking them right away would be suicide and I need to learn more close combat orientated skills if I ever want to beat all of them. I need help, I will build some type of Organization. Yeah! That could work I need to find the strongest ghouls possible so then I wouldn't need it to do it alone! I can't wait to make them suffer, after all, If they didn't forget about me and lock me out I wouldn't have became a ghoul.
(FLASHBACK, Normal P.O.V )
It was October 10 in Tokyo and everyone in the Uzimaki-Namikaze household were on their way back to their house since it was late at night and it was about to rain, but other than that they were all having a good day. Well almost everyone. At the end of a street unknown to everyone else was a boy around the age of 16 was walking alone with his head down trying to go unnoticed. He had spiky blond hair and a face that was the spitting image of his father and had blue eyes that when you looked at them you could see what looked like an ocean inside of them, he wore an orange long sleeve shirt with a grey fur neck coat over it with baggy black jeans and white sneakers (Try to imagine Izaya Orihara clothes with some modifications).
"God, why this is happening! First I got an F in chemistry and now it is going to rain on my birthday of all things! Can this be any worse! Oh yeah. maybe my family would forget my birthday again and go to a restaurant with Menma, Narumi and Naruko without me like last year!" The Teen yelled to no one in particular, This teens name is Naruto Uzumaki-Namikaze but he prefer only Uzumaki, the oldest brother of Naruko, Menma and Narumi and son of the best investigators in CCG; the "Yellow Flash" Minato Namikaze and the "Crimson ruin princess" Kushina Uzumaki. He was neglected by them since he could remember, it started by forgetting to call him for dinner or to go out somewhere and leave him at home, but then it got worse by forgetting his birthday and forgetting to wake him up for school. The result of this was he stopped caring about them, He knew that there must have been a reason they ignored him so, but he didn't know what the reason was. With a sigh he started walking to his house never noticing a pair of violet eyes watching him,
"Hmm he looks tasty, time for lunch." The figure said with a bloodthirsty near insane looking smile.
(30 Minutes Later)
"God damn it!" Naruto Said kicking the door to his house that was locked. Right now he was outside by the main door of his house alone on his birthday in the rain. With a last kick and scream in anger at the door Naruto turned around and slid down to the ground, his back on the wall of the house. "Looks that I was right... They forgot about my birthday again and left me outside" Naruto thought depressed, He didn't know why it was affecting him so much, He guessed it was because it was only the second year they forgot his birthday. "even though its my 16th they still forget". With a shaky sigh he got up and was about to find refuge in a box or alleyway when a feminine a voice called out stopping him.
"What is a boy like you doing here?" the voice said from behind Naruto. Quickly Naruto turned around and saw a beautiful girl with purple hair and violet eyes that were behind a pair of glasses. she wore a white dress and pink shoes and had a white umbrella in her left hand. Right now she was looking at him with worry in her eyes.
"O-Oh umm well I was trying to get to my house but I forgot the keys hehehe" Naruto lied nervously 'Damn! That is one of the most beautiful girls I have ever seen!' Naruto thought with a blush dancing across his face. The girl saw his blush and couldn't help put giggle at his nervous reaction.
"Oh you poor thing come with me I will take you to my home so you can dry up." The woman said boldly smiling at him making him blush even more
"N-N-No its okay I can handle myself-" Naruto couldn't finish as the woman grabbed his hand and started dragging him through the streets,
"Nonsense! Look at you, your all wet and obviously you cant find your house keys. I'd feel bad to leave you out in this rain I will take you to my house if you like it or not!" She said looking at him through the corner of her eye. Naruto seeing that he didn't have an option just gave her a wide smile and said
"Well if you want to-ermm, what is your name again? He he he" Naruto said realizing that he didn't ask her name "Mines Naruto."She looked back at him with a small smile and said
"Kamishiro, - Kamishiro Rize."
(10 Minutes Later in an alley)
"Emm Rize why are we here?" Naruto said a little nervously, they were currently at a construction site walking through it. Rize didn't respond and continued walking "Is this a short cut?" Naruto said trying to shake the bad feeling he was having, "Rize are you-" He couldn't finish as he bumped into her without looking " Oh shit! Sorry Rize I didn't want to bump into you it was an accid-" Again Naruto couldn't finish his sentence because he started to hear Rize giggling "Umm Rize your creeping me out. are you alright?" Naruto said nervously, for some reason his senses were screaming at him telling him to run but he didn't know why so he just ignored them. "Errr, Rize, you know what, I better go to my house and see if I can find my keys, well, see ya!" With that said Naruto turned and was about to run to the exit when "ARGG!" Naruto couldn't help to scream when he felt an immense pain in his stomach and at the same time heard flesh tearing. He shakily moved his head and looked down, what he saw nearly made his eyes pop out of his skull, a red veiny tail like thing had pierced his midsection! When he looked at it he noticed there were darker colored "veins" all over the thing, Then he started to throw up blood and slowly lose consciousness at the same time the tail started to lift him up until his feet couldn't touch the ground anymore. then it turned him around to face his attacker.
"Open your eyes Naruto-Kun." He heard the Rize. when he opened his eyes he noticed he was staring in to her eyes, but there was something different about them this time, instead of being purple color they were changed. Her sclera being black with a red pupil in the center of each one. making realization explode his his mind.
"Y-You a-are a G-G-Ghoul?!" Naruto struggled with the pain but still managed to spit it out. Rize started giggling like a maniac
"Yes I am a ghoul and I haven't had food in a long while and I am hungry so please stay still so I can eat your insides." She said with a happy tone, then she throws Naruto to the floor and started walking up to him 'Is this the end? is this how I die? Without anyone knowing where I am and on my birthday...' Naruto thought in anger 'This wouldn't have happened if my family had just remembered me and didn't lock the door. I hate them and I will get my revenge one day if I don't die here. Believe it' With that Naruto started waiting for his doom barely conscoius from blood loss. "Bye bye Orange-Kun" Rize said with her mouth wide open and moving towards his neck, Right before she was about to bite into Naruto's neck she heard something falling from the sky. looking up she went wide eyed, the last thing that Naruto heard before he finally lost too much blood and went unconscious was a scream of pain and something heavy hitting the floor.
So that was that, Give it a review and let me know what you think, Was it better than the original? worse? Opinion matter on here. So i"d like to hear all of yours, Untill next time.
Mikado