Hello to everyone that reads this and thank you for reading my first fanfic story is my version of StarFox: Revenge By: Rogue101 so if you ever read this i would like to thank you for inspiring me to do this so thank you and to everyone's fanfic i've read so far.

Savage: WaIt WhY arE YoU ReWriting ThiS?

Me: To make it a bit more better and to give a bit more development

Fox: Well it beats not being noticed

Sonic: Lucky

Me: Don't worry I also intend to fix your story too now since this the first chapter…again someone do the disclaimer.

Krystal (Gx): D. 1 doesn't own StarFox and this Story is based on Rogue101 StarFox: Revenge

Chapter 1: Savage McCloud

Screams of agony echoed the dark corridors. The screams of patients suffering from some of the worst forms of torture and experiments ever known. But they were all too common for the prisoners here, but still it poured fear in them. Soldiers would come to the prison, collect several prisoners, and take them away; they would be tortured or experimented on, then returned to their cells.

'Hehehe, sOuNdS LIke aNoThEr sUCkER biT tHE DusT.' said a demented sounding voice (similar to Crazy hand but more insane with a thirst for blood).

'Shut up.' said another

'Sssh, I heAr tHEm CoMIng AgAIn, whAT aRe Ya gONNa Do…Fox?'

Flashback

Cornerian forces were engaged in a heated battle with Venom forces over Venom orbit. Intel had confirmed that remnants of Andross' forces were regrouping in massive numbers. Star Fox had been hired to help the Cornerian forces do the job. Unfortunately, despite them being smaller in number, Venom forces had been outfitted with more advanced weaponry than ever, so Corneria was forced to send its entire fleet to meet them.

Star Fox flew along the hull of a Venom Battlecruiser and bombed the out its mid-section, causing the ship to split in two halves. Several squadrons of Arwing flew behind the team as they flew deeper into a Venom fleet. They flew past debris of a Cornerian Cruiser that exploded from heavy fire from another Battlecruiser. Some were hit by debris, while others were hit by enemy fire, and the rest were able to pass with their lives.

'Man, these bitches don't know when to quit? They keep coming and we keep winning.' Said Falco

'Hey if they did, then life would get boring and we be out of work!' said Slippy in a-matter-of-fact tone.

'…Point taken'

They fought their way straight through Venoms forces until they were at the center, however things got pretty intense and out of hand, but If they could destroy the main Battlecruiser, their forces would become disorganized.

They attack the mid-section, and were about to finish it; if not for Venom fighters hadn't distracted them and forced them to disperse. The dogfight between the two sides waged with Cornerian forces gaining an upper hand. Fox downed another fighter and had a clear shot of the mid-section.

'I can't shake this guy; he's going to hit me!'

It was Krystal's voice. Fox froze, he could destroy the Battlecruiser and end this battle now, but he risked losing Krystal. He couldn't bear to thought of it. Without a second thought, he went after the fighter who was attacking Krystal. He fired at him and watched as he span out of control taking with him another fighter.

'Thank you Fox, remind me to give you something special latter.' said Krystal in a seductive tone. Fox's face went dark red.

Unfortunately, their little moment was interrupted when a fighter opened fire on Fox. He did everything he could to avoid the attack, but no matter what, he couldn't shake him. Eventually, the fighter was able to make a critical hit against Fox's Arwing. Fox began spinning out of control and heading towards Venoms surface. The fighter followed him, but was destroyed by Krystal.

'FOX!' Krystal screamed over the com; with her eye's flooding with tears. Fox looked at her face on the screen.

'KRYSTAL! I LOVE YOU!' shouted Fox, right before the screen and com went static.

Fox's Arwing sped towards Venom at an incredible rate. The ship's outer frame was engulfed in fire. He tried to level out his Arwing as it shot the above the ground. There was a sudden jolt as it hit and grinded along the planet's surface.

It came to slow stop; Fox felt like he had been drained of energy, he looked around to see several figure in black amour standing near his ship, their red eye lenses glaring at him. He stared at them for several seconds before everything faded into darkness.

Flashback ends

'So yOu dONe WoNDerINg mEMorY LaNE?' said the demented voice.

When Fox started to check is surrounding he realized he was strapped down to the experimenting table with the doctor staring at him. He growled at the doctor. She simply smirks at him.

'Now, now Fox if you be a good boy this is going to end with you back in your cell' said the doctor.

'Inject chemical U174 into subject 437 now.' Said another doctor.

The doctors exited the room while the devices started to inject the chemicals in to Fox's body. The needles whit tubes attach to them were flowing blue glowing liquid. As the chemical enter his body, he started to cry out in pain. The chemical is reacting to the other chemicals that were tested in to him.

'C...Can't...hol-d o…out mu…ch longer' Fox muttered to himself as his vision was starting to fade.

'I'm i going to die here, can't, I won't not until I send these guy straight to hell!'

'WeLl THen lEt mE HeLp yOU WitH tHat' said the demented voice.

Fox suddenly found himself in a pitch black room. He looks all over the place crying out 'Who are you?' Then a shadow figure that look like with a pair of glowing red eyes with dark purple pupils appeared in front of him.

'NIce tO FiNaLlY MeET YoU Fox' it said.

'What are you?' Fox asked

'WhAt, NoW thAT's JuSt RuDE I'm tHe GuY whO wILl heLP yoU GEt YouR ReVeNgE!' it said extending its hand, it then had a very creppy and demonic smile on it's face.

Fox was a bit hesitant to grab it. Will this 'guy' really help get his revenge on these people; will he really help him get back home, back to his friends, back to Krystal? With another moment of hesitation he grabs it and shock signifying it he accepts his offer.

'Now you just sit back and relax Fox cause it's my turn to play' it said as it's smile grew bigger and it started laughing (Me: Like Flowey Vice: Okay use a creepy flower's laugh

Back in the lab.

A Private was undoing the last strap on the lower of McCloud's body, a fist punched him in the face. The force was so strong it ripped the head right of the body and sent it flying hitting another soldier in the head killing him as well. The other soldier back away and everyone else in the other room viewing through a one sided reinforced glass where frozen to what they just saw.

'Hehehe,hahahahaha,ahahaha' Fox laughing like a monster.

'He's a monster, bloody savage!' said a soldier sacred for his life.

'Savage? Hmm, not a bad name.' Fox said but it wasn't his voice it was a far more murderous and psychopathic voice. (Me: Basically Crazy Hand if he was an insane murderer on steroids Sonic: If that actually happen…better go write my will now.)

Everyone in there were either confused, scared or both when they heard Fox say those words.

"My name is Savage McCloud and here to send you all to hell." He said with a murderous smile plaster across his mouth.

Sly: Wow now that is way more worse than what i had went through in my first Chapter.

Jaden: Ditto, why would anyone in their right mind do this!?

Me: That's why they aren't the right minds but the left-mind

Everyone: -_-^ ...

Aven: That…that was just bad.

Me: DAMMIT, CURSE YOU SANS!