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DISCLAIMER:I do not and (sadly) will never own any Naruto characters. Only my OC Tsuki.
Finding Otou – prologue-age 7
"Kaa-san?" A small black haired girl said pulling on the deep blue yukata sleeve of an older woman.
The older woman's bright blue eyes met the curious gaze of the girl's glowing green ones.
"Yes Tsuki-chan?" questioned the woman.
The girl named Tsuki bit her bottom lip as if unsure if she should ask something.
"Um...Kaa-san w-who was my O-otou-san?" Tsuki finally asked while quickly bowing her head as if ashamed.
The older woman's gaze hardened but sensing her child's distress she quickly softened it. Tucking a blonde of hair behind her ear the older woman lifted the girl into her lap. Grabbing a brush from the stand beside her, she began running it through her daughter's waist length black hair.
They stayed silent for a moment before the woman spoke. "What brings about this question?" The woman set the brush down and began french braiding the girl's hair.
"W-well some kids at the academy were asking." Tsuki's timid voice replied. "Did they now..." The woman said offhandedly as she finished the braid, tying the end of it with a thin lavender ribbon. The girl's small hand came up and felt the finished product before returning to her side. Twisting in the woman's lap until she was facing her Tsuki timidly asked. "U-um Kaa-san y-you are mt Kaa-san right?" The woman blinked several times before her thin blonde eyebrow rose to her hairline. "Of course! What makes you ask."
"W-well...um... some at kids at the a-academy were saying you weren't my Kaa-san because we look n-nothing alike." Tsuki's nervous voice stuttered.
The woman pulled Tsuki into a tight hug. "Tsuki-chan I'm still your Kaa-san even if we don't look alike. You just take a little more after your father is all." She assured her daughter. Tsuki nodded into her shoulder before pulling away and looking up at with new found courage.
"So what was my Otou-san like?" Tsuki boldly questioned. The woman sighed. She should have seen that one coming. "Well..." The woman began, shifting her daughter into a more comfortable position on her lap.
"He had a massive obsession with money..." A small smile appeared on her face as she spoke. "Money was the only thing I worried about him cheating on me with." She chuckled softly at her joke before continuing, her voice growing softer and her gaze becoming distant.
"We were happily married for three years. I was pregnant with you when I found out that he had left the village." Tears pricked the woman's eyes before hardening.
"I was so upset and in denial at the fact he'd left leaving me to be a single mother..." Her voice hitched in anger before she continued. Tsuki listened intently at her side.
"I remember bursting into Raikage's office and demanding what was going on." She cleared her throat and continued.
"That's when I found out about all the horrible things he had done, such horrible things..." Tsuki's mothers voice had gotten softer before trailing off at the end. The woman stared at the far wall as if in some kind of daze.
"What was my Otou's name?" Tsuki whispered, silently waiting for what she had always wanted to know. The sudden question had snapped the woman from her stupor as she turned towards her daughter. She blinked slowly before registering what her daughter had asked. The woman immediately snapped up, her eyes hardening.
"I won't tell you!" She stated childishly, determined not to tell her daughter. Tsuki had been stunned speechless by her mother's sudden demeanor change
but her stubborn side quickly kicked in.
"And why not!" She demanded. The woman stared at her daughter, assessing the situation. The woman pursed her lips into a thin line before replying.
"Because I said so now run along." Tsuki blinked owlishly before opening her mouth to retort, but her mother quickly cut her off.
"I said run along." Her tone laced with irritation. Tsuki, frightened by her mother's sudden anger, jumped from her mother's lap and scurried to the door.
-8 years later-age 15-
Beep,Beep. Tsuki sat on a chair beside a hospital bed. Her hand held tightly to the hand of the bed's inhabitant. The once beautiful woman was now reduced to a pitiful pile of skin and bone relying on an oxygen tank to live. Tsuki grabbed a washcloth from the near by bucket. Wringing the washcloth she slowly wiped her mother's forehead. Her mother's deep breaths of sleep speed up a bit as she opened her eyes. Shakily raising her hand she cupped Tsuki's cheek and lightly ran her thumb across it.
"Ts-Tsuki." Her mother's voice sounded tired and looked worriedly down at her mother before whispering. "What?"
"Tsuki I know I've..." She stopped to catch her breath which had quickened drastically.
"...only said bad things 'bout him." Her mother's voice stopped and her hand fell to her lap, her eyes drifting shut. Tsuki's breath hitched as her brows furrowed in worry. Her mother's eyes fluttered open again and she laid still in her bed silently staring at the ceiling. Tsuki squeezed her hand causing the woman to sift her gaze back to her daughter.
"Him who, Okaa-san?" Tsuki asked, curiosity getting to her.
"Your O-Otou-san." Was the woman's hesitant reply. Tsuki stayed quiet, prodding her mother with her eyes to go on.
"I-I want you to f-find your Otou-san..." She began but Tsuki interrupted her.
"But you've always told m-." "I k-know what I told you!" Her mother snapped losing a little patience with the teenager.
It's-I-they wouldn't accept you." She finally said, while looking at Tsuki's face to judge her reaction. "Okaa-san, who won't accept me?" Tsuki asked bewildered. Her mother's face saddened as she whispered.
"The village." Tsuki opened her mouth to protest but her mother silenced her with her hand before speaking herself.
"They'll all judge you for what he's done and we both know I won't be h-here much longer to p-protect you from them." Her mother's breath became more rugged with each word.
"but if he's the cause of this then why would I want to go to him?" Tsuki demanded, her voice raising to an almost shout. Her mother stared at her catching her breath before answering.
"I want you to be with f-f-" she stopped to catch her breath yet again.
"Family." She finished, her voice having become strained. Tsuki was about to answer with another round of protests, but was interrupted.
"Please? F-for me?" Her mother asked, almost begged.
"I-I...Oh alright." Tsuki said giving in to her mother's wish.
"T-t-thank-you." Her mother said before relaxing into her bed and closing her eyes.
Tsuki let go of her mother 's hand upon which she must have grabbed sometime during their reached behind her head untying the cloth which held the headband of the village she belong to moments before. She traced a finger over the arrow like symbol for the lightning village. Tracing it once more she finally let it go and set it in her mother's lap. Patting down her mother's faded blonde hair, Tsuki's eyes widened in remembrance. Quickly shaking her mother awake she frantically asked.
"What was my Otou-san's name?" The woman just stared her breath coming in labored puffs. Having took a minute to register the question she finally answered using her last breath.
"Ka-ka-kakuzu."Just as the word escaped her lips her eyes fluttered closed and the heart monitor went off.
End/Prologue
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