Chapter 1
The reason I'm re-writing this chapter is because I know (well I think I know) is because I've improved a lot and I want to see what I can write now so in that case I hope you can understand what I'm writing now.
Work had just ended for red headed cat, who works at café mew mew, ichigo felt as if she has been hit by a truck; her whole body ached
"Ah! Damn that ryou! Making me work so hard! I hate him! I mean come on you can't give me a raise, for everything I do! I work, I fight chimera animals! AND I have to keep out my grads, which is so hard for me because I keep falling asleep! Mint just drinks tea all day, zakuro so cold to all the costumers! Pudding and lettuce, breaks expensive pales, why god oh why is my life so hard for a middle for a girl in the 8th grade?!" ichigo complain, the more she thought of it, the more she got anger, which made her cat ears pop out, an anger mark appeared on her head "devils! Akuma! That's what they are!" ichigo yelled in anger and clenched her fists, for just being small kitten ichigo growled in rage and her eye twitched, ichigo then realized her ears popped out "damn!" she said, and tried to cover her ears with her hands she started blushing a little
Ichigo looked at the watch on her wrist "dang it if I'm not home by 10 dad is going to kill me!" she started running down the street, her cat ears started to perked up, 'I hear noises!' she thought, but ignored then and kept walking down the street
When she reached the end of the street her eyes turned big, construction work was happing everywhere, 'why does construction work have to happen at a time like this?! I have school tomorrow!' ichigo thought angrily she looked around to see a man in a yellow jacket holding a clip board; marking down a few things ichigo walked up to the man and tapped him on the shoulder "hey, mister" she said, the man turned around "what? What is it" the man said "what happing here? Why is there construction work in the middle of the road all of a sudden?!" ichigo asked, with a hint of annoyance in her voice. "Why, young lady, there was a sudden earthquake that swallowed a good portion in the area" the man said and pointed to the hole in the ground with his pen
Ichigo started at it, raising her eyebrow 'it doesn't look like it happened natural' she thought her eyes turned big 'maybe it was a chimera animal; that what happened last time!' ichigo thought and blinked, from the corner of her eye she saw the man looking at her funny 'why is her staring at me like that?' ichigo thought, she looked down to see her tail sticking out of her school uniform, the bell on her tail did a little jingle, her checks turned red she got up and wiped her knees with her hands "ha-ha well look at the time, I have to go, well see ya!" she said as quickly as possible and ran back down the street, the man stood there and scratched his neck 'was that girl cosplaying?' He thought and rolled his eyes 'kids these days' he thought and went back to work.
Ichigo was panting "dang! That was close that man almost thought these ears were real!" ichigo then started giggling "it reminds me of the time I met pudding!" she started smiling, and then sighed, she looked around only to see darkness "WHERE IN THE HELL AM I?!" she started freaking out, which made her pop out again, "shot!" she covered her ears again, she started walking down the dark path until she saw light "yes!" she ran out of the alley way, her eyes turned big
There a chimera animal and a women laying on the ground 'that chimera animal must be her spirit!' ichigo thought, ichigo gasped and hid behind a wall "mew mew strawberry metamorphosis!" ichigo transformed into mew ichigo and ran up to the chimera animal "how dare you try to hurt an innocent women, when she's on her way home! I'll never forgive you!" ichigo did her pose "for the future of the earth I'll be at service nya~!" ichigo said and winked, the chimera animal roared angrily, its sharp nails was a weapon and started firing at ichigo, she tried her best to dodged them quickly, ichigo growled and jumped in the air "now you mad me mad! Strawberry bell!" ichigo said her strawberry bell appeared and her powers started gathering "ribbon….strawberry surprise!" ichigo attacked the alien, it let out a horrible scream, and speared, Masha appeared and ate the parasite "retrieve retrieved!" he said happily, ichigo smiled, caught the women's spirit and gave it back to her, she de transformed.
The women woke up and held her head "where am I?" she asked ichigo in a confused manner, a sweat drop appeared on ichigo head 'I can't tell her the truth!' ichigo thought, ichigo smiled and helped the women up "you slipped and felled unconscious" ichigo lied 'good lie!' she thought to herself "really?" the women asked confused ichigo nodded "all you have to do is be careful next time" she said and smiled. She started pushing the women's back "you should go home and get some rest your family might be worried" she said and smiled the women nodded "well I'll be careful next time! That's for the help, and for that here's a candy" the women said and gave ichigo a lollipop "ahh, thank you!" ichigo said to the women "no problem, bye, bye" she said and was on her way off.
Ichigo then realized the time, it was midnight, ichigo started freaking out again, her ears and tail popped out again, and she picked up her school bag and started running home. "Dad is going to kill me!" she yelled.
"Wow, I never knew she was THAT strong, for a little kitten in a fluffy pink outfit" said a voice; it narrowed her red eyes "oh well! I'll just have more fun next time!" it teleported away
Me: yes! finished please tell me what you thought of the re-make, and please no flames