so, this is my first story i have decided to share. i decided to use Harry Potter characters to share how it feels to have a serious medical condition. I own nothing except the plot everything else belongs to J.K. Rowling.
Snape's Secret and Harry's Condition
Harry Potter was in the middle of making a potion in the dreaded Potions class, when he suddenly felt weird. He felt as if the world was going too fast and he was feeling anxious and irritated. A feeling he was not unused to but still hated. "I feel like crying right now and I don't know why", Thought Harry, "I hate my life. Kill me now. please. I hurt all over. Why? I don't know what to do." Professor Snape was walking along in his classroom when he saw that Potter wasn't working on his potion, in fact he wasn't moving at all and he had a blank expression on his face. "Potter",snarled Snape, "Why are you not working or are you to lazy to work?" When Harry didn't respond like he usually did Snape began to be annoyed. "50 points from Gryffendor" Snape said. Ron and Hermione started to argue against it, but still Harry did not move. Snape became increasingly annoyed, yet a little worried that something had happened to make Harry non-responsive.
"I feel so tired... so sleepy... want...to...sleep" mumbled Harry suddenly. Professor Snape began to walk over to reprimind Harry for mumbling, but just as he was about to reach him him, Harry's eye's rolled back and he collapsed.
Should I continue or should i stop it here? any positive criticism is greatly appreciated. remember that this is how i feel when i have a seizure and the struggles i have so any negitive response will be hurtful.