Okay, for starters, please use periods at the end of sentences and comas for dialogue. Trust me, that would be one thing that will help. The pronoun "I" is ALWAYS capitalized, too. Beginning of dialogue is always capitalized. Spell out numbers.
And it's Chapter, not capter. Yolei is spelled Yolei and not Yolie. "Together" is to be together but "to gather" is to bring people together. "There" refers to a place, "their" is posessive, and "they're" is to refer to "they are." In order to get the quotes, you press the shift button and hit the ' button at the same time. Triceramon, not Tricerimon or whatever it was. Kabuterimon.
I also have a fabulous link that could help you out. It constantly helps me out, so it should work for you: .com/wiki/Digimon_Wiki Use this for character personalities and spelling of names. Please, use this. And please, read through it before you send me a chapter. And DO NOT send me a chapter until I send you the previous one back. Okay? This'll save me my sanity.
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Digimon: the Ultimate Doom
I do not own Digimon.
Chapter 1: The New Threat
Azulongmon throne the digital world
"Devimon, MetalEtemon, VenomMyotismon, MetalSeadramon, Puppetmon, Machinedramon, Peidmon, Diaboromon, and Apocalymon have been reconfigured and are now henchmen for the Seven Great Demon Lords which are Beelzemon, Belphemon, Lilithmon, Barbamon, Deamon, and Leviamon," said Azulongmon
"Digimon to Gennai, we must unite the Legendary Warriors, D.A.T.S, the Tamers, and the Digidestined Together in the digital world in order to defeat this evil," said Gennai.
Lucemon's throne room
The room is large, dark, menacing, with shadows. In a dark throne room lined with dimly lit monitors, a figure robed in shadows sat upon the cold arching chair, listening to the subordinate kneeling before him. Devimon didn't dare look up into his master's face, knowing full well that privilege was reserved for only when his master told him to.
"My lord, Lucemon," he began to speak in quivering voice, "I'm sending Triceramon to defeat those pests."
"I am pleased with your work." Lucemon's cold reply oozed out, showing a strange sense of twisted praise.
"They won't know what hit them. Nor will any of the Digidestined. No one will stop us. No one will dare try but those who do will be crushed underfoot as we complete our conquest of the digital world. All shall bow down before me! Even the mighty rulers of the digital world! We will be kings and queens of the digital world. They will regret defeating us!" Lucemon ranted madly, shaking the walls of the throne room with his rage and twisted joy.
"And when they start to defeat Triceramon, he will go mega at the last second and kill them all," Devimon added with his own mad cackle.
"Indeed they will… Then, I can have the revenge I've waited a long time for." Lucemon sighed happily at the vile as a horrid smile spread across his face. "But we will have to work Together to defeat those pests," he added, turning to the group gathered before him.
"Lets get it started. Activate the dig port. Let's send Triceramon to the real world, now!" Devimon stated with a sick anticipation.
"The Dig port will be ready in 25 minutes Machinedramon noted as he read the remaining time off of the monitor before him.
Those final twenty-five minutes passed quickly and soon Machinedramon spoke again, "Dig port ready to transport."
Kamiya residence, real world.
"Hi, Tai," said Izzy, Matt, Cody, Yolei, and Davis.
They had brought their Digimon with them (Kari was at Sora's house with Mimi).When the game was over, they decided to walk to the park but on the way their Triceramon appeared and started attacking them
AGUMON DIGIVOLE TO GREYMON
GABIMON DIGIVOLVE TO GARURUMON
TENTOMON DIGIVOLE TO KABUTERIMON
VEEMON DIGIVOLE TO EXVEEMON
ARMADILLOMON DIGIVOLE TO ANKILOMON
HAWKMON DIGIVOLE TO AQUILLOMON
NOVA BLAST
HOWLING BLASTER
ELECTRO SHOCKER
V - LAZER
TAIL HAMMER
Ring lasers
The attacks were supposed to do something but the attacks hit the floor
"And without our Crest, we cant digivole again," said Tai.
"We're doomed," said Yolei.
"NO your not," said Gennai. "Here are your Crest" But Triceramon attacked Greymon and Garurumon and they were reverted back to Agumon and Gabumon decided to wrap digivolve into WarGreymon and MetalGarurumon.
AGUMON WRAP DIGIVOLE TO WARGREYMON
GABIMON WRAP DIGIVOLE TO METAL GARURUMON
TERRA DISTROYER
METAL WOLF CLAW
This attack was supposed to delete him but it just helped him digivole to mega.
Triceramon digivolve to WarTriceramon
WarTriceramon had 2 feet and was 24 feet tall hand 10 cannons a tall full of metal 4 hands a gun on each hand and had bronze armor.
Metal wolf claw
Dramon killer
Nothing happened
"Digivolve to ultimate Kabuterimon."
"OK," said Kabuterimon.
Kabuterimon digivolve to MegaKabuterimon
Horn Buster
Dramon killer
Ice wolf claw'
Still nothing happened
Tricer cannon
When WarTriceramon attacked , MegaKabuterimon de-digivolve back to his rookie level. "We've got to call for back up," said Davis.
So Cody took out his d-terminal and wrote:
"Help! A mega level Digimon is attacking us and MetalGarurumon and WarGreymon are still not enough to defeat it and we need help and fast. P.S. We are at Odaiba Park."
Ken's house
"What? It is a SOS message from Cody," said Ken. "Lets go Joe, Tai, Matt, Izzy, Davis, Cody, Yolei are being attacked by a very strong mega level Digimon and, hear this, WarGerymon and MetalGarurumon is not enough to beat it."
"Then lets go," said Joe. "They are at Odiba Park."
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Meanwhile Kari, Sora, T.K., and Mimi were on their way to Ken's house when they receive a SOS message from Cody.
"We need to help! We are being attacked by a mega level need help"
"You all have your Digimon, right?"
They all said yes. "Where are they, T.K.?"
"They are at Odiba Park."
shibuya Railway Station
Meanwhile, the Legendary Warriors are talking with Azulongmon when he said:
"You must team up with the Digidestined and the Tamers to defeat this new evil. I already talked with the Tamers and the Digidestined have their Crests back but they are losing a battle with WarTriceramon. You need to help them at Odaiba Park".
"Then lets go," said Takuya.
Execute beast spirit evolution
MetalKabuterimon
Zephyrmon
Korikakumon
JagerLoewemon
Execute fusion spirit evolution
Aldamon
Beowolfmon
Odiaba Park
Tricera cannon
" He is so strong! We must DNA digivolve," said WarGreymon.
WarGreymon+MetalGarurumon DNA digivolve to Omnimon
Kabuteriermon digivolve to MegaKabuterimon
Transcendent Sword
Horn Buster
V-Laser
Tail hammer
But nothing happened and it hi the ground
Then the others arrived
Biyomon digivolve to Birdramon
Palmon digivolve to Togemon
Gomamon digivolve to Ikkakumon
Patamon digivolve to Angemon
Wormmon digivolve to Stingmon
Birdramon digivolve to Garudamon
Togemon digivolve to Lilymon
Ikkakumon digivolve to Zudomon
Angemon digivolve to MagnaAngemon
Gatomon digivolve to Angewomon
ExVeemon + Stingmon DNA digivolve to Paildramon
Paildramon mega digivolve to Imperialdramon
Imperialdramon mode change to Fighter Mode
Transcendent Sword
Wing Blade
Horn Buster
Flower Cannon
Vulcan's Hammer
Excalibur
Positron Laser
Blast Rings
Tail Hammer
Still nothing attacks just bonced off him and hit the floor
Supreme Cannon
Positron Laser
"Imperialdramon," began Davis.
"Change to Paladin Mode," finish Ken.
All of a sudden, Omnimon's body was transformed to a sword.
Imperialdramon Fighter Mode mode changes to Paladin Mode
Omni sword
but WarTriceramon tried evaded the it choped off a gun
"He is too strong," said Kari.
"We need a miracle," said Sora
Fist of the Beast King
Super Lightning Strike
Subzero Ice Punch
Bear Punch
Andro Rocket
"Its Leomon, Elecmon, Andromon, ShogunGekomon, and Monzaemon," said Tai.
Leomon wrap digivolve to Saberleomon
Then a demon like Digimon appeared.
"Who is that?" asked Davis in confusion.
"It's GranDracmon!" said MegaKabuterimon. releved for his life
"Help is coming. The Tamers are close by and the Legendary Warriors are at the park enterence You need to join forces with DATS, the Tamers, and the Legendary Warriors to defeat the evil that is threatening the digital world," said GranDracmon.
frozen hunter
Atomic Inferno
Hurricane Gale
Frozen Arrowheads
Thunder Cannon
dark master
Out of nowhere, Aldamon, Beowolfmon, Korikakumon, Zephyrmon, JagerLoewemon, and MetalKabuterimon appeared.
"Lets attack to gather to defeat him," said Imperialdramon.
Atomic Inferno
frozen hunter
Hurricane Gale
Frozen Arrowheads
Thunder Cannon
dark master
Omni Sword
Wing Blade
Horn Buster
Flower Cannon
Vulcan's Hammer
Gate of Destiny
Heaven's Charm
Tail Hammer
Grand Horn
The attacks blasted WarTriceramon into in the Gate of Destiny.
All the Digimon then reverted to their rookie forms.
"Who-who in the world are you?" asked Tai and Matt.
"I am Takuya, the leader of the Legendary Warriors," he said.
Infinity Mountain, the digital world
"Devvvvvvvvvvvvvvvvimon! You failed me!" yelled Lucemon in an angry tone.
Devimon, scared for his life, said, "They had help from the Legendary Warriors."
"WHHHHHHAAAAAAT?" demanded Lucemon.
"Lets send a whole army," suggested VenomMyotismon and MetalEtemon.
"Devimon should go to," added Apocalymon and Diaboromon.
"A whole army and all of us should go," said the Dark Masters.
"Yeah, lets all go" Arukenimon and Mummymon agreed.
"Master," they all asked, "what are we going to do?"
"Hum! Go and take the whole army," said Lucemon before adding, "AND DON'T FAIL AND DON'T COME BACK UNTILL THOSE BRATS ARE DEFEATED."
GranDracmon heard all this and is going to tell the Digidestined, the Tamers, DATS and the Legendary Warriors. then left
DATS HQ
"..."DATS, I come in peace. I need you to go Odaiba Park and there you will meet the Digidestined, the Tamers, and the Legendary Warriors. I need you to go help them. A whole army of evil Digimon are heading towards is to many many of them so they need your help you don't have many time. Go there immediately. I need to say this to them and I have limited"..."
"DATS you heard him," said commander Stoampson. "Go there immediately."
Odiaba Park
So then the Tamers arrived and DATS are only a half-mile from the park.five minutes later DATS arrived.
"We're DATS. We're here to help you," declared Thomas.
"We should introduce ourselves to each other," said Tai.
"I agree," said Takato.
"Hi. I am Takuya, leader of the Legendary Warriors. I have the spirit of fire. next to me is Koji; he has the spirit of light. That's J.P. and he has the spirit of thunder. That's Zoe; she has the spirit of wind. that is Tommy. he has the spirit of ice. that is Koji's twin brother Koichi. he has the spirit of darkness." said Takuya.
"I am Tai. this is my partner Agumon. I'm the leader of the digidestines. This is my sister Kari and her partner Gatomon. that is Matt and his partner Gabumon. next to him is his brother and Kari's boyfriend T.K. and his partner Patamon. that is my girlfriend Sora and her partner is biomon That is Joe and his partner Gomamon. next to him is his girlfriend Mimi and her partner palmon that is the computer genus Izzy and his partner Tentomon," said Tai.
"Hi, I'm Davis. this is my partner Veemon. over there is Cody and his partner Armadillomon. that's Ken and his partner is wormmon his girlfriend Yolei and her partner Hawkmon," said Davis.
"Hi, I'm Takato, leader of the Tamers. This is my partner Guilmon. That is Henry and his partner Terriermon. she is Rika and her partner Renamon. that is Ryo and his partner is cyberdramon Kazu and his partner Guardromon. he is Kenta and his partner MarineAngemon. that is Henry's sister Suzie and her partner Lopmon and that is Mako and Ai and his partner Impmon," said Takato.
"Hey, I'm Marcus this is my partner Agumon. she is Yoshi and that is her partner Lalamon. that is the Thomas and his partner Gaomon, he is Keenan's and that is his partner Falcomon," said Marcus.
Then a whole bunch of Digimon appeared out of nowhere.
"I'm late for the party," said Devimon.
"Devimon, I see you're still alive" scremed Tai
"Didn't Angemon kill you ten years ago?
"I am not alone this time; I am just going to enjoy the show. attack!" said Devimon.
Agumon digivolve to Greymon
Gabumon digivolve to Garurumon
Biyomon digivolve to Birdramon
Tentomon digivolve to Kabuterimon
Gomamon digivolve to Ikkakumon
Veemon digivolve to ExVeemon
Wormmon digivole to Stingmon
Armadillomon digivolve to Ankylomon
Hawkmon digivolve to Aquilamon
Greymon digivolve to MetalGreymon
Garurumon digivolve to WereGarurumon
Birdramon digivolve to Garudamon
Kabuteriamon digivolve to MegaKabuterimon
Ikkakumon digivolve to Zudomon
Angemon digivolve to MagnaAngemon
Gatomon digivolve to Angewomon
ExVeemon + Stingmon DNA digivolve to Paildramon
The four Tamers said, "Execute: Matrix Digivolution." (also say they slashed cards.)
Guilmon digivolve to Growlmon
Renamon digivolve to Kyubimon
Terriermon digivolve to Gargomon
Growlmon matrix digivolve to WarGrowlmon
Kyubimon matrix digivolve to Taomon
Gargomon matrix digivolve to Rapidmon
Guardromon matrix digivolve to Andromon
Impmon wrap digivolve to Beelzemon (Once again...)
"DNA Charge! Overdrive!" yelled all the DATS members. (describe the action thingy, would ya?)
Agumon soul digivolve to GeoGreymon, GeoGreymon soul digivolve to RizeGreymon
Lalamon soul digivolve to Sunflowmon, Sunflowmon soul digivolve to Lilamon
Gaomon soul digivolve to Gaogamon, Gaogamon soul digivolve to MachGaogamon
Falcomon soul digivolve to Peckmon, Peckmon soul digivolve to Crowmon (and again.)
" send them to my Gate of Destiny," said MagnaAngemon.
Heaven's Blow
Giga Blaster
Howling Blaster
Wing Blade
Horn Buster
Flower Cannon
Vulcan's Hammer
Tail Hammer
Atomic Blaster
Rapid Fire
Andro Lightning
Tao Lighting
Bell Fire
Holy Beam
Justice Punch
Trident Revolver
Crow wing
Beauty Shock
Howling Cannon
Devimon digivolve to ArchDevimon
MagnaAngemon proclaimed, "if I beat you before I will beat you again."
"And I will help," said Angewomon.
Devil's Lighting
Heaven's Charm
The two attacks collided with each other then Angewomon was captured.
excilbiar.
devils sword
that busted magnaangemon's sword in half
so devimon attacked and captured T.k,Kari,and magnaangemon
To be continued
What will Devimon do to Angewomon and MagnaAngemon? Will they be saved in timed?
Find out next time on Digimon: The Ultimate Doom
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