go read that one too. ill keep it as origanal as possible though.
"Lutenient Alana please report to the transporter room" came the captain's voice over the intercom. Alana rushed to the transporter room and jioned Captain Kirk, Commander Spock, and Doctoer Mccoy on the transporter pad. "Energise" said Kirk as Scotty beamed them down tho the planet below. They were immidiently greeted by a large group of hostiles who marched them at gunpoint to a jail and took Kirk and Mccoy in for innterrogation, leaving Spock and Alana togather. They sat in silence for a couple minutes until spock came over and kissed Alana, whispering "I love you, my k'diwa". Alana and Spock had been dateing for over a year now, and they had loved each other from the moment they saw each other. They had both stood out, Spock being vulcan and her with her blood-red hair and strange eyes, one silver and the other gold. She was from Adonias, and Adonians were natrually beatiful,
more so than any human could dream of, and exceptionally strong fighters, though Adonias as a nation was peaceful. So natrually, everyone was jelouse that they were dateing, each wanting the beatiful Adonian or Vulcan for themselves. The Captian and Doctor soon returned, breaking Alana out of her silent revire. The Hostiles, who looked surprisingly human and stronger than her, noted Alana, grabbed her next, dragging her down the hall to a room filled with high-tech machinery. She felt a prick on the back of her neck and everything went dark.
back at the cell, a white-haired man about 25 years old greeted the rest of the landing party."I will allow you to return to your ship. Do not bother yourselves with the girl, she is dead" he stated as two men dragged Alana's body out for the men to see. He threw a communicator to a horrifiyed Kirk, who had Scotty beam them aboard the Enterprise.
A/N: Theres more to come, I promise!