Hello, this is my oc for my fanfic, Moving On. Please give me some ideas on how to improve my oc. Sorry for any Mary sue-ness.
Name: Yuki Hana
Age: 21
Village: Konoha, formerly from Kumo
Rank: Anbu (wolf mask)
Family: A, Bee (adopted family)
Bf: unclear
Bff: Sakura, Hinata
Pets: A hawk called Hikari
Appearance: Long white hair tied in low ponytail. Light blue eyes and pale skin. Usually dressed in a dark blue mid-thigh length kimono with a red obi and a wire mesh shirt underneath. Black shorts, along with black ninja sandals, fingerless gloves and forehead protector. She ties her protector on her left arm and a weapon pouch on her left leg.
Personality: Normally very kind and gentle, however she will become very scary if any did manage to anger her. She will go quiet and beat up the person. Very loyal to her friends and those she considered as family.
Likes: Spending time with her Bff, Hikari, Tea, children
Dislikes: People who laughed at her white hair, people who hurt her Bffs
Fighting Style: Uses poisoned senbon, katana and genjutsu.
Extra: She is a medical ninja who is exceptionally skilled in the making of poisons, antidotes and medicine.
Background: Former Kumo-nin. Originates from the Hana clan, none of her relatives would take her in after her parents died on an A-ranked mission as she lacked the black hair, tanned-skin and dark blue eyes of the clan due to her being born prematurely. She was viewed as a cursed child and was picked on by the clan until she was 6, when the Raikage, A, took her away and raised her like his own daughter.
When she became older, she became involved with a fellow Kumo-nin and got pregnant. However due to his dislike for children, he caused her to have a miscarriage and damaged her womb so much that it had to be removed. After the surgery she went to look for her lover, thinking that it was an accident when she saw him going out with another woman. It was then that she realized that he had only wanted one thing from her. She was unable to bear the sight of him and sank into depression until her condition became so bad that A had to send her to another village, Konoha. It was there that she befriended Sakura and Hinata and became an Anbu with them.
Please R&R