Okay, I decided since I'd finished, to review and fix.
"MOVING ON"
SCENE 1
At the Bronze. Buffy, Xander, and Willow sit at a table near the packed dance floor. Soft music plays from the stage, where the female singer sways back and forth to the beat. Xander sits tapping his fingers on the hard table surface. Buffy takes a sip out of the straw sitting in her cup. Willow is watching all of the people on the dance floor.
BUFFY: Do you remember the first time I came here? I had to stop Willow from a makeout-fest I advised her on. (She takes another sip of her soda.)
XANDER: Ooh. Bad Willow.
BUFFY: ( Ignoring the glances between Xander and Willow.) I wonder why Dawn isn't here. She said she'd be here. She had a friend who wanted to meet her here.( Buffy scans the crowd.)
XANDER: Wow, who is that?
WILLOW: I don't know but I'd like to.
XANDER: Hey, I saw her first. ( Does a double take.) I never thought I would say that to you.
WILLOW: ( Realizing who the mystery girl was.) Oh boy, I think she's already here. ( She stared, shocked, at a tall, brown haired girl dressed in a leather top and pants. She was dancing with her arms around a guy a little bit taller than she. He was obviously a little older. They continued dancing, and kissing until Buffy saw them.
WILLOW: Buffy, I... ( Buffy was already on her way over to the couple. She put on a fake smile and tapped Dawn on the shoulder. Dawn turned.)
DAWN: Can I... Buffy. Hi, Ian, this is my sister Buffy. Buffy this is Ian. He's a friend of mine.
IAN: Actually, I'm her boyfriend.(He flashed white teeth and shook his head so that his reddish blond locks moved slightly.) It's nice to meet you, Buffy. Dawn mentioned you, but I didn't know you'd be so pretty.
BUFFY: I'm afraid I'm a little bit to old for you, Ian. How old are you anyway?
IAN: ( Very politely.) I'm seventeen. I know Dawn is fifteen, but she's so mature for her age.
BUFFY: Yes, obviously. Nice earrings, Ian.
IAN: (He touched his left ear, where his ear had two rings in the lobe.) Really? I got it pierced about a year ago. After I moved from L.A.
DAWN: Ian moved to L.A. the year we left.
BUFFY: Oh really? ( Not very interested in Ian's earrings, she tried to get them to the table.) Listen, Dawn why don't you and, uh, Ian come to the table. Xander and Willow are already there.
DAWN: Okay, why?
BUFFY: Just do it.
IAN: Okay, Hon, why don't we? (He wrapped his arm around Dawn's waist while Buffy led the way to the table.)
DAWN: Suck up. (She was mumbling in Ian's ear as they walked off to meet Willow and Xander.)
SCENE 2 - The Magic Box at nightfall. Dawn sits at the table with Ian doing her math homework. Willow sits at the counter with Xander. We focus in on Dawn and Ian.
DAWN: I think that the world order of history teachers has a large vendetta against the world order of overworked teenagers.
IAN: Dawn, do not act as if you are completely blind.
DAWN: What do you mean?
IAN: Your sister hates me.
DAWN: Come on, Ian. Stop that. She does not hate you.
IAN: Maybe she will hate me less if we tell her who I am.
Scene 3 - Switch to the counter where Xander and Willow sit watching Dawn and Ian
XANDER: Are they the cutest couple or what?
WILLOW: Yeah, they really are. And Buffy now likes him a bit more than she did when she first met him. I guess she didn't like him because he was a bit of a flirt, apparently.
XANDER: I don't know. I could use another guy to hang out with. Even if he's a few years younger. It may make me seem younger. I could get used to being a teenager again.
WILLOW: When you were a teenager, you couldn't stand the fact that you weren't cool. You cheated on your girlfriend, with me. And, you ...
XANDER: Thank you.
WILLOW: I was just saying that you are much better as the Xander you are today.
Scene 4 - Spike's crypt. He is sleeping, fighting with something in his imagination.
SPIKE: No, I won't. I love her. I won't kill her, I can't. No! ( He sat up, sweat covering his body and face.) What the- Buffy?
SCENE 5 - We are taken to the hotel in L.A. at which the Angel Investigations team is preparing for a big hunt. GUNN and FRED are packing bags while CORDELIA delivers items to them. She sets a large group of stakes on the table. WESLEY is reading a passage from one of his texts. He is rubbing his eyes as he does so. You can hear ANGEL in the background singing a soft Irish lullaby to Conner. We focus in on the door. A girl of about fourteen came in carrying a yellow flier. She was well muscled and obviously determined.
FRED: ( Quietly to Gunn.) I'll take this one. ( To the girl.) May I help you?
PAIGE: Yes, my name is Paige. I've only been in town for a few days, I'm having some problems finding someone, and I was hoping you could help me. A friend recommended you.
FRED: We don't really help find people.
PAIGE: I was told I could find a vampire by the name of Angelus here. My friend said he could help. ( Angel enters at this, with Conner in his arms. Cordelia walks up and puts the child in her arm.)
ANGEL: I go by Angel.
PAIGE: Of course, I am so sorry to interrupt. You're obviously busy, but I need to find someone.
ANGEL: Exactly whom are you looking for?
PAIGE: A lady by the name of Buffy Summers.
"MOVING ON"
SCENE 1
At the Bronze. Buffy, Xander, and Willow sit at a table near the packed dance floor. Soft music plays from the stage, where the female singer sways back and forth to the beat. Xander sits tapping his fingers on the hard table surface. Buffy takes a sip out of the straw sitting in her cup. Willow is watching all of the people on the dance floor.
BUFFY: Do you remember the first time I came here? I had to stop Willow from a makeout-fest I advised her on. (She takes another sip of her soda.)
XANDER: Ooh. Bad Willow.
BUFFY: ( Ignoring the glances between Xander and Willow.) I wonder why Dawn isn't here. She said she'd be here. She had a friend who wanted to meet her here.( Buffy scans the crowd.)
XANDER: Wow, who is that?
WILLOW: I don't know but I'd like to.
XANDER: Hey, I saw her first. ( Does a double take.) I never thought I would say that to you.
WILLOW: ( Realizing who the mystery girl was.) Oh boy, I think she's already here. ( She stared, shocked, at a tall, brown haired girl dressed in a leather top and pants. She was dancing with her arms around a guy a little bit taller than she. He was obviously a little older. They continued dancing, and kissing until Buffy saw them.
WILLOW: Buffy, I... ( Buffy was already on her way over to the couple. She put on a fake smile and tapped Dawn on the shoulder. Dawn turned.)
DAWN: Can I... Buffy. Hi, Ian, this is my sister Buffy. Buffy this is Ian. He's a friend of mine.
IAN: Actually, I'm her boyfriend.(He flashed white teeth and shook his head so that his reddish blond locks moved slightly.) It's nice to meet you, Buffy. Dawn mentioned you, but I didn't know you'd be so pretty.
BUFFY: I'm afraid I'm a little bit to old for you, Ian. How old are you anyway?
IAN: ( Very politely.) I'm seventeen. I know Dawn is fifteen, but she's so mature for her age.
BUFFY: Yes, obviously. Nice earrings, Ian.
IAN: (He touched his left ear, where his ear had two rings in the lobe.) Really? I got it pierced about a year ago. After I moved from L.A.
DAWN: Ian moved to L.A. the year we left.
BUFFY: Oh really? ( Not very interested in Ian's earrings, she tried to get them to the table.) Listen, Dawn why don't you and, uh, Ian come to the table. Xander and Willow are already there.
DAWN: Okay, why?
BUFFY: Just do it.
IAN: Okay, Hon, why don't we? (He wrapped his arm around Dawn's waist while Buffy led the way to the table.)
DAWN: Suck up. (She was mumbling in Ian's ear as they walked off to meet Willow and Xander.)
SCENE 2 - The Magic Box at nightfall. Dawn sits at the table with Ian doing her math homework. Willow sits at the counter with Xander. We focus in on Dawn and Ian.
DAWN: I think that the world order of history teachers has a large vendetta against the world order of overworked teenagers.
IAN: Dawn, do not act as if you are completely blind.
DAWN: What do you mean?
IAN: Your sister hates me.
DAWN: Come on, Ian. Stop that. She does not hate you.
IAN: Maybe she will hate me less if we tell her who I am.
Scene 3 - Switch to the counter where Xander and Willow sit watching Dawn and Ian
XANDER: Are they the cutest couple or what?
WILLOW: Yeah, they really are. And Buffy now likes him a bit more than she did when she first met him. I guess she didn't like him because he was a bit of a flirt, apparently.
XANDER: I don't know. I could use another guy to hang out with. Even if he's a few years younger. It may make me seem younger. I could get used to being a teenager again.
WILLOW: When you were a teenager, you couldn't stand the fact that you weren't cool. You cheated on your girlfriend, with me. And, you ...
XANDER: Thank you.
WILLOW: I was just saying that you are much better as the Xander you are today.
Scene 4 - Spike's crypt. He is sleeping, fighting with something in his imagination.
SPIKE: No, I won't. I love her. I won't kill her, I can't. No! ( He sat up, sweat covering his body and face.) What the- Buffy?
SCENE 5 - We are taken to the hotel in L.A. at which the Angel Investigations team is preparing for a big hunt. GUNN and FRED are packing bags while CORDELIA delivers items to them. She sets a large group of stakes on the table. WESLEY is reading a passage from one of his texts. He is rubbing his eyes as he does so. You can hear ANGEL in the background singing a soft Irish lullaby to Conner. We focus in on the door. A girl of about fourteen came in carrying a yellow flier. She was well muscled and obviously determined.
FRED: ( Quietly to Gunn.) I'll take this one. ( To the girl.) May I help you?
PAIGE: Yes, my name is Paige. I've only been in town for a few days, I'm having some problems finding someone, and I was hoping you could help me. A friend recommended you.
FRED: We don't really help find people.
PAIGE: I was told I could find a vampire by the name of Angelus here. My friend said he could help. ( Angel enters at this, with Conner in his arms. Cordelia walks up and puts the child in her arm.)
ANGEL: I go by Angel.
PAIGE: Of course, I am so sorry to interrupt. You're obviously busy, but I need to find someone.
ANGEL: Exactly whom are you looking for?
PAIGE: A lady by the name of Buffy Summers.