Hey everyone. This is my very first Fan-Fiction, so I want you to tare apart my work. Tell me what I need to work on or what needs to be fixed. What sucks and what is awesome. I need feed back because I have bad self-esteem issues, but I still need to be graded harshly.
Also, I cant remember some facts about Harry potter so I am just going to wing it. Well, anyways, may I present to you Jaspers Jest.
"Talking"
"YELLING"
"Thinking, writing, visions, and famous stuff"
Disclaimer: I don't own Harry Potter or any of its characters. If I did I would not be living with my parents.
AN: I do own all plots and characters I make though.
Jaspers Jest
Chapter 1
It was a calm cool night on the shores of the Great Brittan. No clouds in the sky, no wind, the ocean was calm, there were no animals or bugs making any noise, and it was a full moon. It was as calm as the grave, but in the very air, there was a sense of foreboding and un-paralleled chaos.
In a small little wizarding town called Cheering Charm Falls, a tiny little town that only had a convenience store (for all your wizarding needs), an owl mail station, a tavern/inn, and about 27 wizards and witches. This quaint little town was placed at the far boarders of The Forbidden Forest, perched on top of 100 foot high cliffs called the laughing falls which echo for hours if you try it out and shout.
You may be wondering what this has to do with our story; well our story begins 600 feet below the waters of the Atlantic Ocean on the ocean floor at the foot of these cliffs. A place forgotten by time where the old magic still resides. A spell casted by Merlin has un-raveled and the creature that the spell contained is unleashed. The dark silhouette, looking distinctly like a human male, drifts upwards to the surface of the frigid waters, with only one thought in its head "Air"
The creature breaks the surface, coughing and sputtering, gasping for air. The creature paddles over to the rock face of the cliffs grasping at the protruding rocks like they are a life line. As the creature looks around, an insane look appeared in its eye. The look would have make Bellatrix look-at-me-I'm-insane Lestrange cower in fear if she were near. The creature tilts its head back and let out a bone chilling laugh that promised pain to those that caused it suffering.
That night the residence of Cheering Charm Falls heard a haunting laugh, echoing off the cliffs. The only warning that un-limited chaos was approaching was a white jester hat with silver bells staked in the town square with a message sewn into it.
"To the wizarding world, I give my adieu,
but this is a warning, the Jest is upon you.
J.J."
When the dawn came the hat would be found, but the person who placed it would be long gone, looking for someone to help him. A crazed smile upon his face, and a sway to his stride, he makes his way to the edge of The Forbidden Forest. He looks into the ancient forest, a forest almost as old as himself. Curiously he dives into it. Later that night, the villagers of Cheering Charm Falls could hear cries and pain filled noises coming from the forest, but what chilled them to the bone was the fact that these sounds came from creatures that were obviously not human.
It would be months before anyone saw the creature. And the person who would stumble upon him would be our one and only Harry Potter.
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Till next time…fanbasher865.