This is my first attempt at a CM story and I really want to get some feedback on this.
Disclaimer: I don't own Criminal Minds expect my own characters.
Title: Your First Case
Author: collegegirl52
Rating: T
Genre: Friendship/Drama
Pairing: Hotch/OFC ~ Friendship
Summary: Wonder what your first case will be like? Here it is for first-time profiler SSA Maggie McMahon!
Notes: My first CM fanfic and more will be coming soon after this if the story get well-off.
Prologue:
Philadelphia, Pennsylvania
September 1998
Maggie McMahon was only fourteen years old when she figured out what she really wants to be after she's done with school and it started like this.
The moment school was over at three o'clock in the afternoon and after getting off the stone steps of Edward Bok Technical High School and ran all the way home a few blocks away in under five minutes to make her father, Robert take her to the library to return some books, magazines and videos she borrowed from them and get some new books, check and see if the library get any of the latest issues out of her favorite magazines and to get any new videos to watch or get her favorites instead even through that it might drive her older sister crazy but it didn't happened right away. It got postponed.
Because of that, the moment Maggie ran over to the small street, did the same all the way down to the two-story house she lived at with her family since Kindergarten at the end of the street, and once she reached her home, walked up the small amount of stairs, and the moment she got to the front door, she knocked on the door to see if her father's here and if the fifty years old man's inside, Maggie can jokily say to her, "Dad, hurry up now. It's time to go to the library. You know the drill."
But that didn't happened and after about thirty seconds of waiting, the door still didn't opened. Thinking that her father might be upstairs and can't hear her knocking on the door, Maggie had to use her key instead.
After looking through her junk-filled backpack for her chain of keys, Maggie finally founded it and the moment she founded the key to fit into the door lock, she put it in, turned the doorknob around with her hand, and the door was finally wide opened. Seconds after seeing that, Maggie walked into her living room and the moment she put her backpack on the sofa and started looking for her father when she heard voices in the kitchen. One of the voices sounded like her mother, Mary but the other voice sounded like someone else. It sounded like a male voice. A different male voice that isn't her father.
"What is going on around here?" thought Maggie when she heard that voice of the stranger and to see who is the man that isn't her father, Maggie walked over to the kitchen opening and when she looked through it, she saw her redheaded mother, half-talking and half-sobbing to a man with from where Maggie was at, a head of short dark brown hair.
Seeing that and still wanting to know about what is going on around here, Maggie walked into the kitchen but stopped when Mary's green eyes and the man who was talking to's dark brown eyes were staring at her and her mother was asking her, "Maggie, what are you doing here?"
Staring at her mother's eyes with her blue ones, Maggie looked at Mary and told her that she just came from school and was looking for Dad to go to the library to return some stuff but the moment she saw the man's face, Maggie was starting to think that the man in front of her was a serious mirror image of that man from that TV show, Dharma and Greg, Greg something but that didn't mattered right now because from staring at his face to down to her waist where a gold badge was sitting on one of his belt loops on his suit pants to all the way to her mother's weeping face and asked to them, "Did something bad had happened to Dad?"
After a minute of silence, Mary grabbed a tissue from out of a box and wiping her tears off her face, Mary put the damp white tissue down on the kitchen table and looked at her youngest daughter's face and answered her question by saying to her, "Maggie, I'm sorry to tell you this but you know about those recent unsolved murder cases from the news station and the newspapers, honey?"
Knowing about those because she read every newspaper out there in Philadelphia and watched the local news every time she got, Maggie nodded to her mother and said to her mother, "Yeah, Mom. I know about those. Why are you asking me this? Did something bad had happened to Dad?"
Mary took a few seconds to think about it but seconds later, she looked at her daughter's face again and with a sad look on her face, Mary McMahon told her daughter, Maggie that her father been murdered earlier that day and the suspect probably might be that person from the news stories recently from the profiling.
Hearing the bad news and don't knowing what profiling is, Maggie didn't had time to cry her eyes out and asked them, "What that means?"
The moment she told the two adults that question, the man next to her mother stood up and held his hand out to Maggie and said to her, "Hello, Maggie. I'm agent Aaron Hotchner from the BAU unit of the FBI." After hearing that greeting, Maggie shook Agent Hotchner's hand and the moment she shook it and let it go, she looked at him a little funny and asked him, "BAU? That likes profiling serial killers, right?"
Before hearing a 'Maggie, don't!' from her mother who sometimes treated Maggie like a four years old, Hotchner didn't let Mary do that to her daughter by saying to her, "Ma'am. Let your daughter ask me that."
"Okay, then." said Mary who took a minute to think that in and now, sitting down on her chair while watching the agent explaining to her daughter what BAU means.
"Ms. McMahon, that kind of what BAU do but the Behavioral Analysis Unit or BAU means that we assistance to law enforcement agencies like Philly PD here is provided through the process of 'criminal investigative analysis'. "
"What that means?" asked Maggie for the second time. Hotchner took his time on this one by saying to her, "Ms. McMahon, Criminal investigative analysis is a process of reviewing crimes from both a behavioral and investigative perspective. It involves reviewing and assessing the facts of a criminal act, interpreting offender behavior, and interaction with the victim, as exhibited during the commission of the crime, or as displayed in the crime scene."
"Also, BAU staff conduct detailed analyses of crimes for the purpose of providing one or more of the following services: crime analysis, investigative suggestions, profiles of unknown offenders, threat analysis, critical incident analysis, interview strategies, major case management, search warrant assistance, prosecutive and trial strategies, and expert testimony."
After hearing all of those things, Maggie crossed her arms and said to Agent Hotchner, "And so, are you telling that you work with the police to hunt down serial killers and put them in jail?" In return, Hotchner nodded to her and said to her with a slight grin, "Yes, the BAU does that and from the few months that I work for them, the people that we founded as the serial killers were unbelievable. Nothing like you ever imagined."
The moment she heard that, Maggie was about to tell him that his job sounded cool until her overprotective mother told her something that made her stop.
"Maggie, honey. Can you leave the kitchen right now so Agent Hotchner can ask me some more questions?" Pissed off about this but doesn't want to show it to her mother, Maggie quietly told her mother that she's fine with that and walked over to the fridge to get herself a bottle of coke to drink while doing some homework or reading a book. Once she passed her mother and Agent Hotchner out of the kitchen doorway, she cursed some foul words under her mother's breath for making her leave while Maggie wanted to learn more from Agent Hotchner who she thinks that he had a nice career ahead of him.
Fifteen minutes later, Maggie was doing her English essay when she saw Agent Hotchner leaving their home and once he was at the door, Maggie looked at him and waved at him while smiling at him. After seeing that wave and smile, Hotchner turned around and gave a wave to her while showing her a slight grin on his face.
Maggie felt her face blushing red when he did that and left the McMahons' home to go somewhere else when at the same moment, Maggie's older sister, Linda came into their home from coming back from her high school up north of the city and after closing the door, she turned around to her sister, saw her blushing red and asked her, "Maggie, why are you blushing?"
So, what you think about it?
