This is my first Love Hina fic. Honest critique is accepted. Flames, however, are not.
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Keitaro ran up to Naru's room. "Naru!" he called. "Narusegawa Naru!" He reached for the doorknob, and twisted it, causing the wooden door to open. He saw the girl of his dreams bent over what appeared to be a picture of all of Hinata Inn's residents. "Naru!" Naru looked up at Keitaro and glowered at him.
"YOU PERVERT!!!" she screamed as she raised her fist, ready to punch. Keitaro stepped back cautiously. "DON'T YOU KNOW HOW TO KNOCK?!"
"Uh… sorry…" Keitaro stammered nervously. "I didn't know you were busy… heh heh…" Naru's expression softened.
"Oh… uh, sorry. I wasn't that busy anyway. Anyway, what did you come here for?" Naru was blushing. Oh this was going to be so perfect!"
"Uh, I just wanted to tell you… that… we've been living in the same complex for a while and our friendship has increased over the weeks… I… just wanted to say… I… I love you…" Naru smiled. This was going exactly as planned! Immediately, Keitaro slipped into a fantasy. He was walking down the aisle. Standing at the end of it was Naru in a beautiful white wedding gown. She was holding roses that were as pink as her lips. She was a vision of simple beauty as Keitaro walked down the aisle. Kitsune, Kanako, Motoko, Shinobu, Kaolla Su, and Mutsumi all watched as he and Naru walked closer to each other. Naru opened her mouth as she started to speak.
"Keitaro…" Keitaro wanted to answer, but his breath was taken away by her beauty. "Keitaro!" Keitaro snapped back into reality.
"Huh?" he mumbled. Naru frowned at him.
"Did you hear what I just said?" she asked dangerously. Keitaro stiffly shook his head no. Naru sighed. "I said I can't go out with you." Keitaro's face fell.
"Why?" he asked. "Are you in love with someone else?" Naru smiled.
"Yes." Well, at least Naru was happy.
"Really? Who?" Naru's face turned a rosy pink as she laughed.
"Kanako!" WTF?!?!
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So? How was it? Please no flames.
