Hello, and welcome to the seventh circle of Hell... uh... I meant my commentary of My Immortal. If you are unfamiliar with this classic piece of FanFiction you make want to get acquainted with the original first. Since the admins here decided that it brought down the collective IQ of this site it was deleted. You can find it in its entirety at ( myimmortalrehost . webs .com ) remove the spaces, you know the drill.
Anything you recognize is not mine. Anything you don't recognize probably isn't mine either. I am only claiming the words written in BOLD. Some comments are written as full sentences, others are just random inserts. If there are any misspelled words I can only say that making corrections to my comments while keeping the integrity of the original text proved to be more challenging than I ever thought possible. That, and the fact the my hands would shake furiously from time to time. Mostly with frustration.
This first post will only contain one chapter because this rant is so long. All other posts will contain two chapters each, only because I refuse to commit more time than necessary to this. Those of you who are familiar with this, have already done the math. Don't fret my dears, after the last chapter I will include an 'epilogue' of sorts. I have already completed the commentary to all the existing chapters I will try to post daily as time permits.
Chapter 1.
AN: Special fangz (get it, coz Im goffik) 2 my gf (ew not in that way) (if you need to let us know that its 'not in that way' you may not be so sure your self…hmm) raven, bloodytearz666 4 helpin me wif da story and spelling. U rok! Justin (I wonder if you exist outside of Tara's imagination) ur da luv of my deprzzing life u rok 2! MCR ROX!
Hi my name is Ebony Dark'ness Dementia (explains a whole lot) Raven Way and I have long ebony black hair (that's how I got my name) (how original) with purple streaks and red tips that reaches my mid-back and icy blue eyes like limpid tears (what the fuck?) and a lot of people tell me I look like Amy Lee (in your dreams Tara, only in your dreams) (AN: if u don't know who she is get da hell out of here!). I'm not related to Gerard Way but I wish I was because he's a major fucking hottie. (first major issue with this chick 'ok with incest') I'm a vampire but my teeth are straight (making you an impotent vampire how the hell would you suck blood out any living creature without fangs) and white. I have pale white skin. I'm also a witch, and I go to a magic school called Hogwarts in England where I'm in the seventh year (I'm seventeen). I'm a goth (in case you couldn't tell) and I wear mostly black. (so do I but I'm pretty sure it does not make me goth) I love Hot Topic and I buy all my clothes from there. For example today I was wearing a black corset with matching lace around it and a black leather miniskirt, pink fishnets and black combat boots. I was wearing black lipstick, white foundation, black eyeliner and red eye shadow. I was walking outside Hogwarts. It was snowing and raining (the phenomenon also known as... sleet) so there was no sun, (I should think not) which I was very happy about. A lot of preps stared at me. (because you look like a scary clown) I put up my middle finger at them. (ooh, real creative)
"Hey Ebony!" shouted a voice. I looked up. It was…. Draco Malfoy!
"What's up Draco?" I asked.
"Nothing." he said shyly.
But then, I heard my friends call me and I had to go away. (if he's lucky you will stay away)
AN: IS it good? PLZ tell me fangz! (if you have to ask you should already know the answer)