Hey everyone. So, this is the first chapter of the first story i had ever made into a fanfiction but it has been completley redone since the first version was crappy. I made it when i was a complete amature and even worse at spelling than i am right now, and that's saying something! So enjoy the story cause i know i enjoyed remaking it. :)
The wind blew softly, making the field of wild flowers sway. Kiari stood in this beautiful field and stared at the flowers all around her. She started to dance and skip, making petals spring into the wind and fly away.
"Good-bye!" Kiari waved good-bye to the flower petals dancing in the sky.
Suddenly, the little five-year-old stopped. She felt the presence of another. She turned around and saw a large man with blood red hair and black eyes walking in the field. Kiari didn't know this man but her father talked about a man; that looked just like him, before.
The man had a hawk on his shoulder. It was very sinister looking in Kiari's eyes. The man was wearing a black kimono shirt with a gold sash and black pants. Judging by his head band, he was from the Village Hidden in the Flames.
The man looked at Kiari as he past her. When he was three feet away from her, he stopped. He turned to Kiari and smiled. "Hello there," he said to her with a deep voice. "What's your name?"
"Kiari." Kiari replied shyly. She never took kindly to strangers.
"That's a nice name. My name is Kama and this is Kurai," he said pointing to his hawk. Kama picked a flower and gave it to Kiari. "Don't get into too much trouble, ok?" With that, he walked off.
Kiari noticed that he was walking in the direction of her house. She followed the man from afar, hiding herself in the tall grass and wild flowers.
Kama stopped at Kiari's house and knocked o n the door. Her father opened the door and his expression was not welcoming. "Good to see you, Kumo." Kama smiled.
"Get away from this place, Kama," Kumo growled. "You are not welcome here."
"I came to speak with you." Kama said ignoring what Kumo had said.
Kumo sighed. "Fine, come with me." Kama followed Kumo inside the house.
Kiari wasn't liking this at all. She ran to the house and walked in. "Hello Kiari!" Her mother chimed.
"Hi mommy, where's daddy?" Kiari asked her.
"Oh, he's having an important conversation right now sweetie. I don't think you should bother him." Her mother told her.
"Oh, ok." Kiari sighed and headed for her room.
"Hey there Kiari, why so glum?" Her big brother, Hiro, asked her.
"I want to know what daddy's doing." She replied.
"Aw, don't worry about it Ari." Hiro smiled. "I'm sure it's just boring grown-up stuff."
Moments later, there was an explosion at the other end of the house. Hiro put his arms around Kiari protectively to keep anything from harming her.
There was a blood curdling scream and the smell of burning flesh. "MOMMY!" Kiari screamed.
The door to their room burst open and a wave of heat came in. Their father came in and he was severely burned. "You two have to get out of here!" He yelled.
"What about you?" Hiro asked.
"That's not important! What's important," Kumo put his hand on Kiari's neck and it started to glow brightly. Once it stopped, Kumo removed his hand to reveal a mark that looked like a black rose on Kiari's neck. "Is that the Black Rose gets away safely."
"You gave it to her?" Hiro asked.
"I made this decision long ago, Hiro. Please respect it and get Kiari out of here!" Their father commanded. Hiro nodded and picked up Kiari.
"Come with us daddy!" Kiari pleaded.
"I'm sorry sweetheart but I can't." Her father told her. Hiro jumped out the window of the room and started running.
"NO! DADDY!!" Kiari shrieked as she reached out to her father.
"I'm sorry." Kumo whispered before the house exploded with flames. Little coals were flying everywhere and some landed in Kiari's eyes.
"AHG!" she screamed in pain.
"Ari!" Hiro put her down. "What happened? Are you ok?"
"It's burning my eyes!!" Kiari screamed. Hiro pinned her down.
"This is going to hurt." He warned. Hiro opened her eyelids and took out the little coals. Kiari was screaming the whole time. "There."
"I can't see!" Kiari cried.
"Don't worry, your vision will come back soon." Hiro said as he gave Kiari a piggy back ride.
Kiari sobbed quietly for a while. Her eyes started to swirl with neon purple colors. Her iris's turned neon purple and her vision slowly came back. "I can see." She whispered.
"See? What did I tell you." Her brother smiled thinking he was right but he wasn't.
I know this sin't the best chapter i've ever made but it's much better than the first so please tell me what you think of the story so far! R&R!!! Thanks.