25 Drabbles
Just to show that yes, I am alive, and yes, I'm still writing. The drabbles may end up being long or short, whatever I need to tell the story. Drabbles based on 'first words' prompts on www(dot)feath(dot)com/idea/idea(dot)htm…. Various parings, genres, and characters… (All Emelan-verse.) Most likely these will all be unconnected.
XxXxXxXxXxXxX …Drabble 1
Only a Child
It was only a child, yet it was taking his place. He knew it was a baby, the shrieking, annoying thing, but he didn't have to like it.
He looked at it with half shut eyes. All he wanted to do was take a nap. A nap would be nice, he thought, covering his ears.
He watched Tris scurry about, her skirts flapping. He eyed her with affection. He would much like to chase her.
Giving a doggish grin, he got up. A nice pat on the rump would be good. He minced across the floor, and nuzzled close.
"I don't have time, Little Bear."
He sulked across the floor, and sunk back down, paws over his ears. The bird was still screaming.
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A/N: So? What do you think? R&R
Edit:: Because I gathered three anonymous reviews, I thought I would take the time to adress their concerns. I shall site them for you::
From: Lucky juju... What do I think?... I think it made no sense. Your sentence structure is that of a toddler.. Pay attention in english class mate... adios and buenas dias...
This is supposed to be simplistic in form. It's Little bear's reaction to Shriek when Tris first brings the bird home. (I was trying for something non-offensive for shippers in the first chapter...) This is not to say that all the drabbles will be like this- I tend to be very long winded and connot confine myself to the strict 'drabble is 100 words' meaning; I find myself leaning to use the 'drabble is less than 500 words' theory. (Actually, I couldn't make the 100 word limit work on this piece, either, though I tried.) Finally, this was a stream-of consiousness work. I put myself in Bear's shoes, (or paws, as it were) and wrote. Then I went back to do the most horrible thing one can do for this type of writing: I edited! -gasp!- ...To say this work has the diction and syntax of a toddler is right- and I did that on purpose. How in-depth of thoughts does one think dogs have? I conclude my explination on "Only a Child".
From: jojo the yak... Freedom? I would like freedom from this chapter.. its oppressive.. oh and btw brunettes have more fun
As for "Freedom", there are different types of freedom. What one finds oppressive, others may find appealing. A peasent may long for the freedom to lounge about all day, while nobility may long for the non-expectations of socity. Oh, and by the way, one must be very childish indeed to comment on another screenname... and, one may notice that I never mentioned who had more fun... besides, isn't 'fun', as well as freedom, relative?
From: rhine boy tono... briar should be with sandry not tris.. bo
I respect all opinions- all I ask in return is that people respect mine. And mine on the subject is that if there are any inter-circle relations, I believe that Briar and Tris would make a good match. One will notice, however, that is only my opinion and it is not by any means an absoult truth. The only one that knows who should be with who is Tammy, and I don't think that she has any plans for inter-circle rlationships, sadly.
To all, I hope I could clear up any missunderstandings. (July 10, 2007 at 12:10 pm)