AN-I need an editor! This is one of three stories I wrote. They all need help of some kind. Let me know if it is any good.
Chapter 1
Bella sighed as the eye-catching man walked past her and appeared to stop and look at her as he went by. He looked like he had just stepped off the cover of a sports magazine. He had those muscles you get not from lifting weights, which made you too muscle bound in places, but from swimming or volleyball. She spun around to see what little hot-bodied coed he must be looking at. Hell, she was in Miami, Florida during spring break. Drop dead gorgeous girls in thong swimsuits were everywhere. He would not notice someone like her.
Not especially ugly or anything: she was a little too tall, full figured, and boring in the looks department. She was what most called cute. She had continually been the tallest girl in her class at 5'9. Having a healthy appetite, kept her body from ever being thin. She was 155 pounds and a size 12. The guys that weren't intimidated by her height usually treated her like a novelty. She had curly, mud brown hair that fell almost to her waist and dishwater brown eyes, nothing-special there. Yeah, why would he notice her, in all her conservative one-piece bathing suit glory with all these other, shorter, skinnier, blonder, bikini clad girls around?
Why she even came here, she had no idea. Her parents had died in a fiery car crash her senior year of high school.
Because she was already 18 at that time, she opted to move in with Cathy, her future college roommate and neighbor; and Cathy's family for the rest of senior year then they were off to college together. What do college girls do for spring break? They come to Miami or at least Cathy had convinced her of that. So here, she was in Miami for spring break. And where was Cathy? She had taken off with the first guy that looked her way. Thanks a lot Cathy!
AN-Ok,I know it's short but I had to start somewhere. Where did you go on your first spring break?