Okay, so this is my "virgin voyage" of writing fanfiction. I would really like some feedback on what you guys think. It's just one chapter I know, but if you guys like it [let me know please] and I'll post more. So I hope you enjoy the first installment!!
A Heart's Impression
CHAPTER 1: A Fresh Start?
The bank of the river was cold and slimy. I begged my body to get up and drag itself out of the muck to no avail. I was beginning to regret my decision to flee to the river after my little skirmish with his servants.
How are you going to get yourself out of this, Sanria? Nice job! I couldn't help thinking bitterly, I can't even use my healing ability, I'm too weak! Damnit all.
After that surprise attack, I over extended my chakra use, and now I'm bumping along this cold, rocky stream completely useless. If I had any control over my eyes right now I would cry and revel in self pity, too bad I'll most likely die before that, with the way my luck is running.
I began to feel the darkness closing in on me, when I heard a voice, "Hey, what's that!?"
The first things I felt were the soft cotton sheets wrapped around me. I didn't dare move or open my eyes; I waited, hoping I could figure out where I was and how much danger I was in. I was disappointed that my body still felt a weak, but hopefully that wouldn't be too much of a hindrance.
I better make sure my escape is perfect if I want to get out of here alive.
I could tell I had some sort of needle in my arm; it must've been an iv of some sort. As I lay motionless on what felt like a narrow bed, I heard distant voices gradually making their way toward my direction.
"I want to know who she is and how the hell she ended up in that river, the moment she wakes up!" A woman's voice, strong and forceful… "I want a round the clock guard on her as well. The state we're in I'm not taking any chances of her being a spy."
"Understood." Several voices, men and women? No, just one other woman….
The sound of a door opening close to my position, how many? One, two, three, four, five;….five different styles of footsteps. I don't think I could take on that many in my state, I'll have to be patient and bide my time.
"Well Kakashi, brief the rest of us on how you found her," the forceful woman again.
"Naruto spotted her. He was running around in his hyperactive way as usual and saw all of that blonde hair," a man…this Kakashi, sounded a little bored. "This woman was already unconscious when we reached her."
"Good thing Naruto-kun saw her. Seems she was on death's door." Another man, much more lively than the first one. I could hear small grunts of agreement. I didn't realize I was in that much danger of dying, I didn't feel like I would die, guess you can't really tell when death will actually come knocking.
"Naruto does seem to be good for that sort of saving." Chuckled a third man, deep voiced…
"Hokage-sama, do you think the hospital is the most appropriate place to hold her?" The other woman, softer sounding, but very sure of herself as well.
"It should be fine, in her condition she'll be too weak to sit up on her own for long amounts of time." The forceful woman, Hokage…
Where have I heard that title before? I hope she's wrong about me being so weak, if she isn't, my escape will be harder than I thought. Damn.
I heard footsteps again, closer now to me. Sounds like heels, one of the women…I suddenly felt a warm breath on my ear, "Did you get all that, little girl?"
The Hokage! Does she know?!
I was suddenly heaved into a sitting position by my arms, gasping and opening my eyes, I faced down an angry brown eyed, blonde haired woman with a painted bluish diamond on her forehead. This must be the Hokage woman.
"Now that we see you're awake, why don't you tell us what you're doing here in Konoha." She smiled, but most certainly not in a friendly way.
I blanched a little as the room rocked and my whole body throbbed in pain, I guess I'm as weak as she predicted. "I don't know" I replied simply, "Apparently I was picked up by your people, so I haven't the slightest clue."
Wrong thing to say.
The angry blonde woman's face grew even more menacing and her grip increased, "Don't be a smartass! Test my patience again and I'll punch you through this entire wing!"
Hard not to believe her with that look on her face, that was for sure, I desperately tried to come up with a story; the room was starting to spin at an increasing rate. Focus Sanria, come up with something or you're dead!
"I,… I really don't know… I can't remember much before falling in the water. I just remember the water rushing around me and getting stuck in mud." Which was technically true, I suppose. The room was spinning faster and starting to change in color, how strange is that!, I couldn't hold my focus. "I don't know what you're looking for, but I'm no spy, I don't even like fighting really."
I tried to smile, but I felt the tunneling affect hit me like a wall of bricks. Damn.