Hot Spring Panic
This is my first fanfic of Ranma 1/2 manga,so please review.
Flameing is alowed,but please tell me what I should change to write better.
It was a sunny morning in Nerima,Tokyo Japan,and most people were waking up now for early work,but the normal people
slept until at least 7 or 8 a.m.In the Tendo/Saotome residence,it was anything but normal for another family,but for them,
it was as normal as could be.
Ranma/Genma Saotome's bedroom
Ranma was having a great dream about a bid tournament with everyone he had ever fought competing.He was going down the line
of fighters:Sentaro,the Golden SKating pair,Kuno,and he was just finishing off Ryoga,when something firm and furry pushed him
off of his futon.He jolted up and by learned instinct, took a loose fighting stance.He then grogily realized that his father
slept in panda form,which he almost always does,and scratched his back acidently hitting Ranma with hi huge,furry paw.
Ranma had a look of pure anoyance on his face,and punted him into the Koi pond.A very wet and anoyed panda scarmbled out of
the pond and swated him through the door,into AKane's room with a sign that said 'what was that for,boy?!'.
Akane was lucky enough to be awake at this time and glanced at her clock that said 7:00 a.m before punting an uncouncous
Ranma with her mallet out of her room,into Genma,who swatted him back into the koi pond with a sign that said 'now be quiet
boy! some people are trying to sleep!'.
2 seconds later,a red-headed girl emerged from the pond and made her way to the kitchen.AFter pouring some hot water on hims-
-elf,he then walked to the dojo.On the way,he met Akane who yeled at him for barging into her room while she was still in bed,and fighting with his
father right in her room,giving him no time to say a word.
Akane made her way out to the town festival,glancing at Ranma who was hitting a practice dummy in the dojo.She met with Kasumi on the way there.
Nerima,Tendo/Saotome Residence
"we're home!" a voice called from the Front door.
Akane and Kasumi Walked into the kitchen.
"would you like some tea Akane?" as Kasumi started to brew some tea.
"sure Kasumi,thanks.By the way,where is Ranma?"
"I think i saw him in the dojo when we walked in."
"Okay thanks."
"OH,I almost forgot,here.I won a pass to compete in a hot spring race.The prize is a trip to any hot
spring in the world." Kasumi said with a wink towards the dojo.
"Well I think I'll go tell Ranma.It could be a way for him to get to Jusenkyo." she said with a small laugh.
Tendo dojo
In the dojo,Ranma was practicing the thing he did best in life: Martial Arts.When Akane popped into the dojo entrance,
he stopped his Kata and looked up at her.
"something wrong Akane?" he said sarcasticly.
"no,but before we have any other interuptions,because I think I saw Mousse there when i won it,
I won a pass to compete in a hot spring race,and the prize is a trip to any hot spring in the world,and I was wondering if
you would like to be my partner,which i know you won't...
meanwhile...
"Shampoo!!" yelled Mousse from the door of the Nekohanten.
Shampoo walked into the room and Mousse went on exitedly,
"I won a pass to compete in a hot spring race and the prize is a trip to any ot spring in the world and--"
He was cut off by Shampoo throwing a buket of cold water over him,swiping the pass from the now duck-Mousse,and rode
away on her infamous bike towards the Tendo/Saotome house.
Ranma was in a daze for a few seconds,until finally he responded.
"Ofcoursewhenistherace?!thanksforaskingmeAkane,thankyou,thankyou,thankyou--"
He was cut off by Shampoo crashing through the wall on her bike.
"Ranma be SHampoo's partner in race to go Jusenkyo,yes?"
Ranma vwiped his head from Akane,who now had 'the look'on her face,to Shampoo,who looked awfully sure of herself.Finaly,
Akane broke the 'dramatic' silence.
"well i'm very sorry SHampoo,but Ranma is already going with me,and you never listened to Kasumi's talk about men
and bathtubs,this is not th chinese amazon,this is Japan.besideds,if you don't believe me,just ask Ranma.RIGHT Ranma?"she
said with a tone of 'agree with me or else' in her voice.
Ranma on the other hand,was having his girl problems again,thanks to his infamous father,Genma.(the author takes time to
look up from his work to give Genma the death look,whom turned into panda form and started playing with that beach ball
while holding up a sign saying,'im just a cute,cudly little panda' before retturning to his writing)
Both girls looked over at Ranma,waiting for an answer.
"uh...well...yeah....sorry Shampoo,but AKane did ask me first and I..." Ranma noticed Akane's aura growing and quickly
finished saying "I....am going with her,why don't you go with Mousse?"
After this,Ranma gave a little 'eep!' because normally SHampoo would have already bonked him on the head with those
big bombori,but not this time.which could mean only one thing....she's planning something.but Ranma was to busy
celebrating that he didn't get bonked to notice,until Akane bonked him with her infamous mallet.
"hey! that hurt ya know!stupid tomboy,I said that I wa--yeouch...." called out ranma as he was sent flying into the air,
courtusey of Akane Airlines.Ranma ironicly landed in Dr. Tofu's office,and casualy picked himself up off of Dr. Tofu's desk,and
headed home muttering something abput stupid tomboys.When he got home,he found AKane in the kitchen.
Ranma was about to apologize,but AKane started before him.
"You already were going with me,why did you have to make it a hard 'decision'?"
Before Ranma could say or do anything,she was out the kitchen,and into her room.
Ranma stood there,holding his handas out,squeezing the air like he was holding someone's neck,and sweating a river
on the back of his head.
End of chapter 1
please review.Maybe in the next fanfic i write,i will have a little shoutout and write people's reviews.
Maybe I will even write 9i little story of the charachters opinoins!
This is my first fanfic of Ranma 1/2 manga,so please review.
Flameing is alowed,but please tell me what I should change to write better.
It was a sunny morning in Nerima,Tokyo Japan,and most people were waking up now for early work,but the normal people
slept until at least 7 or 8 a.m.In the Tendo/Saotome residence,it was anything but normal for another family,but for them,
it was as normal as could be.
Ranma/Genma Saotome's bedroom
Ranma was having a great dream about a bid tournament with everyone he had ever fought competing.He was going down the line
of fighters:Sentaro,the Golden SKating pair,Kuno,and he was just finishing off Ryoga,when something firm and furry pushed him
off of his futon.He jolted up and by learned instinct, took a loose fighting stance.He then grogily realized that his father
slept in panda form,which he almost always does,and scratched his back acidently hitting Ranma with hi huge,furry paw.
Ranma had a look of pure anoyance on his face,and punted him into the Koi pond.A very wet and anoyed panda scarmbled out of
the pond and swated him through the door,into AKane's room with a sign that said 'what was that for,boy?!'.
Akane was lucky enough to be awake at this time and glanced at her clock that said 7:00 a.m before punting an uncouncous
Ranma with her mallet out of her room,into Genma,who swatted him back into the koi pond with a sign that said 'now be quiet
boy! some people are trying to sleep!'.
2 seconds later,a red-headed girl emerged from the pond and made her way to the kitchen.AFter pouring some hot water on hims-
-elf,he then walked to the dojo.On the way,he met Akane who yeled at him for barging into her room while she was still in bed,and fighting with his
father right in her room,giving him no time to say a word.
Akane made her way out to the town festival,glancing at Ranma who was hitting a practice dummy in the dojo.She met with Kasumi on the way there.
Nerima,Tendo/Saotome Residence
"we're home!" a voice called from the Front door.
Akane and Kasumi Walked into the kitchen.
"would you like some tea Akane?" as Kasumi started to brew some tea.
"sure Kasumi,thanks.By the way,where is Ranma?"
"I think i saw him in the dojo when we walked in."
"Okay thanks."
"OH,I almost forgot,here.I won a pass to compete in a hot spring race.The prize is a trip to any hot
spring in the world." Kasumi said with a wink towards the dojo.
"Well I think I'll go tell Ranma.It could be a way for him to get to Jusenkyo." she said with a small laugh.
Tendo dojo
In the dojo,Ranma was practicing the thing he did best in life: Martial Arts.When Akane popped into the dojo entrance,
he stopped his Kata and looked up at her.
"something wrong Akane?" he said sarcasticly.
"no,but before we have any other interuptions,because I think I saw Mousse there when i won it,
I won a pass to compete in a hot spring race,and the prize is a trip to any hot spring in the world,and I was wondering if
you would like to be my partner,which i know you won't...
meanwhile...
"Shampoo!!" yelled Mousse from the door of the Nekohanten.
Shampoo walked into the room and Mousse went on exitedly,
"I won a pass to compete in a hot spring race and the prize is a trip to any ot spring in the world and--"
He was cut off by Shampoo throwing a buket of cold water over him,swiping the pass from the now duck-Mousse,and rode
away on her infamous bike towards the Tendo/Saotome house.
Ranma was in a daze for a few seconds,until finally he responded.
"Ofcoursewhenistherace?!thanksforaskingmeAkane,thankyou,thankyou,thankyou--"
He was cut off by Shampoo crashing through the wall on her bike.
"Ranma be SHampoo's partner in race to go Jusenkyo,yes?"
Ranma vwiped his head from Akane,who now had 'the look'on her face,to Shampoo,who looked awfully sure of herself.Finaly,
Akane broke the 'dramatic' silence.
"well i'm very sorry SHampoo,but Ranma is already going with me,and you never listened to Kasumi's talk about men
and bathtubs,this is not th chinese amazon,this is Japan.besideds,if you don't believe me,just ask Ranma.RIGHT Ranma?"she
said with a tone of 'agree with me or else' in her voice.
Ranma on the other hand,was having his girl problems again,thanks to his infamous father,Genma.(the author takes time to
look up from his work to give Genma the death look,whom turned into panda form and started playing with that beach ball
while holding up a sign saying,'im just a cute,cudly little panda' before retturning to his writing)
Both girls looked over at Ranma,waiting for an answer.
"uh...well...yeah....sorry Shampoo,but AKane did ask me first and I..." Ranma noticed Akane's aura growing and quickly
finished saying "I....am going with her,why don't you go with Mousse?"
After this,Ranma gave a little 'eep!' because normally SHampoo would have already bonked him on the head with those
big bombori,but not this time.which could mean only one thing....she's planning something.but Ranma was to busy
celebrating that he didn't get bonked to notice,until Akane bonked him with her infamous mallet.
"hey! that hurt ya know!stupid tomboy,I said that I wa--yeouch...." called out ranma as he was sent flying into the air,
courtusey of Akane Airlines.Ranma ironicly landed in Dr. Tofu's office,and casualy picked himself up off of Dr. Tofu's desk,and
headed home muttering something abput stupid tomboys.When he got home,he found AKane in the kitchen.
Ranma was about to apologize,but AKane started before him.
"You already were going with me,why did you have to make it a hard 'decision'?"
Before Ranma could say or do anything,she was out the kitchen,and into her room.
Ranma stood there,holding his handas out,squeezing the air like he was holding someone's neck,and sweating a river
on the back of his head.
End of chapter 1
please review.Maybe in the next fanfic i write,i will have a little shoutout and write people's reviews.
Maybe I will even write 9i little story of the charachters opinoins!