PR/N: All my corrections will be underneath in red, so you will learn something as well as correcting. Before I proceed I have a problem with one of your characters "Claire" she is a Mary Sue and no one likes a Mary Sue (Mary Sue btw is a perfect character)
Part One
Hermione's Dream
Hermione's POV
"Help Me! Please, anyone, help me!" Hermione was running as fast as she could down a deserted Hogwarts corridor. No one was in any of the classrooms. It was the dead of night. She was dressed in a sleeveless shirt and pyjama pants.
All of a sudden, a tall dark figure ran out of one of the classrooms. It threw itself upon her.
"AGHHH!" she screamed. She immediately began to run as fast as her legs would take her.
Hermione's heart leapt about on a trampoline and she gasped and panted for breath. She was lying in her own dormitory and in her own bed. She had different pyjamas on. She knew that is must have been all a dream. Carefully she slid out of the bed, shuddering as her bare feet touched the cold stone floor. She went into the showers and began to wonder what her dream had meant.
Harry's POV
"What was that?" He sat up suddenly. He was sure he had just heard a familiar scream. His stomach tingled with anticipation.
"No. No way." He said aloud. "Not Hermione."
"Huh?" Ron grunted from the next bed.
"Oh nothing. Did you hear a scream or something?"
SNORE. That meant Ron had drifted back to sleep. Harry slowly climbed out of his bed, pulled on his robes and grabbed his wand. He hurried down the spiral staircase and to his surprise he met Hermione.
"Herm! Did you scream or something?" Harry asked
"Yeah." She said slightly embarrased. "I had an odd dream."
"What was it abou-…?" Harry began to ask, but Claire cut him off.
"Herm, why didn't you wake me up?" Claire asked. She was Hermione's best friend. She had transferred from America during their fifth year.
"Sorry." Hermione apologised. "You said not to wake you up early."
"Ugh! Since when do you listen to me?!" Claire complained. Hermione didn't answer, she was watching Harry, who was running to the other end of the common room.
Claire's POV
"She's doing it again!" Claire thought, "Staring at Harry with her eyes popping out of her head!" It was a well-known fact, that Hermione liked Harry, but Harry was shy and never said a word about who he liked to anyone. So Hermione was stuck in a daydream all day and night.
"Herm." Claire said. "You like Harry right?" Hermione didn't answer. She was stuck in her world, but snapped out of it as soon as she remembered to check all her homework for the day.
"Hang on C. I need to check my homework." Hermione said without answering Claire's question.
Claire sighed.
"Fine. I'll be at breakfast with the guys. See you."
Draco's POV
Draco walked down into the Slytherin Common Room. He felt pretty good. He had performed the wonderful dream spell on Hermione, so she might be thinking of him.
Draco had a soft spot for Hermione, but it was secret and he never said a word. His reputation would be gone is he did (PR/N: never abbreviate)
"Another night, with her wonderful little dreams." Draco thought. His idea of a good dream was he, jumping out on Hermione, while she was lost in Hogwarts. Little did he know she was going to kill him if she ever discovered this.
"Hey Draco! Come on where all going to up to breakfast." Goyle shouted
"Coming!" Draco replied.
Hermione's POV
Hermione ran to her dormitory, to grab her secret book. The one she wrote everything in, including her deepest secrets and her love for Harry Potter. This book was her diary.
She stuffed her book into her bag and ran down to the Great Hall. When all of a sudden WHAM! She slammed into Draco Malfoy.
"Ooff!" he exclaimed
"Oh sorry, Draco." She said. He picked up her books, which had been knocked out of her arms and handed the back to her.
Hermione stared at him. Her mouth open and not saying a word. Maybe Draco was confused with who she was or something, but she mumbled her thanks and slowly backed away.
Harry's POV
"I have to tell her. I have to." Harry thought
"Hey, Harry." Claire said.
"Oh hi Claire." Harry replied
"What's for b-fast?
"Eggs and bacon." He replied. "Yummy."
"Hiya guys." Hermione had approached the table. "Guess what? I bumped into Malfoy on the way here, he said sorry and handed me my books! Werid hey?"
"Don't look now, that Malfoy jerk is starring at us." Ron added
"Yuck. He makes me queasy!" Claire said.
"Yup." Harry replied, smiling. He loved it when people put Malfoy down. After all their classes, the gang walked back into the Common Room for a rest.
Hermione's POV
Hermione dashed upstairs, to find a falcon on her bed. She grabbed the note:
Hermione,
I don't know how to say this but, I really like you. Please meet me by the lake at midnight tonight
Love
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Hermione was so delighted! What if the note was from Harry? Who knows.
"Oooh I can't wait!"
A/N: I know, short piece. But I'm going to write a series, so there's more to come! Please review!
Disclaimer: I don't own any of the characters, except Claire, the rest belong to the Grand High Sorceress J.K. Rowling!
Major Thank-you: I have to Thank Merlyn ( yes she is a writer for F.F. Net) She proofread the story and helped me with the corrections. So If you say anything about how much better the Grammer and puntuation is and stuff thank Merlyn Because it was with her help that i got a much better piece!
Part One
Hermione's Dream
Hermione's POV
"Help Me! Please, anyone, help me!" Hermione was running as fast as she could down a deserted Hogwarts corridor. No one was in any of the classrooms. It was the dead of night. She was dressed in a sleeveless shirt and pyjama pants.
All of a sudden, a tall dark figure ran out of one of the classrooms. It threw itself upon her.
"AGHHH!" she screamed. She immediately began to run as fast as her legs would take her.
Hermione's heart leapt about on a trampoline and she gasped and panted for breath. She was lying in her own dormitory and in her own bed. She had different pyjamas on. She knew that is must have been all a dream. Carefully she slid out of the bed, shuddering as her bare feet touched the cold stone floor. She went into the showers and began to wonder what her dream had meant.
Harry's POV
"What was that?" He sat up suddenly. He was sure he had just heard a familiar scream. His stomach tingled with anticipation.
"No. No way." He said aloud. "Not Hermione."
"Huh?" Ron grunted from the next bed.
"Oh nothing. Did you hear a scream or something?"
SNORE. That meant Ron had drifted back to sleep. Harry slowly climbed out of his bed, pulled on his robes and grabbed his wand. He hurried down the spiral staircase and to his surprise he met Hermione.
"Herm! Did you scream or something?" Harry asked
"Yeah." She said slightly embarrased. "I had an odd dream."
"What was it abou-…?" Harry began to ask, but Claire cut him off.
"Herm, why didn't you wake me up?" Claire asked. She was Hermione's best friend. She had transferred from America during their fifth year.
"Sorry." Hermione apologised. "You said not to wake you up early."
"Ugh! Since when do you listen to me?!" Claire complained. Hermione didn't answer, she was watching Harry, who was running to the other end of the common room.
Claire's POV
"She's doing it again!" Claire thought, "Staring at Harry with her eyes popping out of her head!" It was a well-known fact, that Hermione liked Harry, but Harry was shy and never said a word about who he liked to anyone. So Hermione was stuck in a daydream all day and night.
"Herm." Claire said. "You like Harry right?" Hermione didn't answer. She was stuck in her world, but snapped out of it as soon as she remembered to check all her homework for the day.
"Hang on C. I need to check my homework." Hermione said without answering Claire's question.
Claire sighed.
"Fine. I'll be at breakfast with the guys. See you."
Draco's POV
Draco walked down into the Slytherin Common Room. He felt pretty good. He had performed the wonderful dream spell on Hermione, so she might be thinking of him.
Draco had a soft spot for Hermione, but it was secret and he never said a word. His reputation would be gone is he did (PR/N: never abbreviate)
"Another night, with her wonderful little dreams." Draco thought. His idea of a good dream was he, jumping out on Hermione, while she was lost in Hogwarts. Little did he know she was going to kill him if she ever discovered this.
"Hey Draco! Come on where all going to up to breakfast." Goyle shouted
"Coming!" Draco replied.
Hermione's POV
Hermione ran to her dormitory, to grab her secret book. The one she wrote everything in, including her deepest secrets and her love for Harry Potter. This book was her diary.
She stuffed her book into her bag and ran down to the Great Hall. When all of a sudden WHAM! She slammed into Draco Malfoy.
"Ooff!" he exclaimed
"Oh sorry, Draco." She said. He picked up her books, which had been knocked out of her arms and handed the back to her.
Hermione stared at him. Her mouth open and not saying a word. Maybe Draco was confused with who she was or something, but she mumbled her thanks and slowly backed away.
Harry's POV
"I have to tell her. I have to." Harry thought
"Hey, Harry." Claire said.
"Oh hi Claire." Harry replied
"What's for b-fast?
"Eggs and bacon." He replied. "Yummy."
"Hiya guys." Hermione had approached the table. "Guess what? I bumped into Malfoy on the way here, he said sorry and handed me my books! Werid hey?"
"Don't look now, that Malfoy jerk is starring at us." Ron added
"Yuck. He makes me queasy!" Claire said.
"Yup." Harry replied, smiling. He loved it when people put Malfoy down. After all their classes, the gang walked back into the Common Room for a rest.
Hermione's POV
Hermione dashed upstairs, to find a falcon on her bed. She grabbed the note:
Hermione,
I don't know how to say this but, I really like you. Please meet me by the lake at midnight tonight
Love
----------------------------------
Hermione was so delighted! What if the note was from Harry? Who knows.
"Oooh I can't wait!"
A/N: I know, short piece. But I'm going to write a series, so there's more to come! Please review!
Disclaimer: I don't own any of the characters, except Claire, the rest belong to the Grand High Sorceress J.K. Rowling!
Major Thank-you: I have to Thank Merlyn ( yes she is a writer for F.F. Net) She proofread the story and helped me with the corrections. So If you say anything about how much better the Grammer and puntuation is and stuff thank Merlyn Because it was with her help that i got a much better piece!