MALCOM IN THE MIDDLE
This is one of my very first stories so don't criticize it TOO much! I would like some suggestions though…
Malcom rushed down the hallway. He leapt into the bathroom and slammed the door shut. His hands were shaking with dread as he struggled to lock the door.
"Come on Malcom, I know you're in there", Reese laughed. Malcom leaned against the door gasping for breath.
"Let me in Malcom", Reese sighed.Malcom was confused. His older brother Reese had always bullied him, but it was never this violent. Malcom was scared. He sat down on the side of the bath. After what seemed like hours there was a knock at the door.
"Who is it?" Malcom asked, hardly breathing at all. He strained his ears to hear a sound. There was a muffled voice on the other side of the door. It sounded like his mothers.
"Get out of there NOW!" It said. Malcom cautiously unlocked the door and opened it. Reese was standing there smiling and holding a tape recorder in his hands.
"AHHHHH!" Malcom's shouts could be heard all throughout the neighbourhood. Malcom slammed the door shut so hard that the whole house shook. The door had nearly come right off its hinges. Malcom leapt onto the toilet and clambered half-way out a small window. Reese pulled at his legs furiously. Malcom continued to yell like someone was murdering him. He grabbed onto the tree under the window and held on tight. But Reese was too strong. Malcom was hauled back inside. Malcom turned to face Reese. His hand made a fist and was raised high above his head. Malcom gasped as Reeses' arm came smashing down hard on his face. Pain shot right through Malcom's head. He fell to the ground. Reese jumped onto his chest and pinned him. Malcom was desperate to escape. He looked around and saw his mother's hair spray. He reached for it and sprayed it on Reese's face. Reese clambered off Malcom and covered his face with his hands. His agonising cries filled the house. Their parents were away at some neighbourhood meeting and the boys' babysitter was asleep on the couch. Malcom raced outside into the yard and hid under the house. It was cold and damp but it was safe...for now. All of a sudden Malcom heard growls. It was Reese. Heavy footsteps clumped into the yard. Malcom held his breath, his heart was pounding his insides. The Reese's red, angry face appeared right in front of Malcoms.
"There you are..."