Umm well… this my first shot at a story. Please don't be overly critical just give ideas for improvements. Oh and sorry about any awful punctuation. Grammar's not my thing!
KK here goes, wish me luck!
Nico's POV
In my dream a stranger was dragging me along.
"Quickly we must hurry!" she said.
"From what – who are you, where are you taking me?" I stared into her face. She was beautiful, that kind of natural beauty that makes your heart stop. Her silky hair, which was a dark charcoal colour, cascaded down her back to her waist. Her eyes were unnatural warm amber with the longest lashes I'd ever seen. 100 different expressions flashed across her perfect face, I recognised some – confusion, anger, anxiety disbelief. Until it settled on one… fear.
"Please, it will find us," she cried, tears welled up in her eyes "I can't loose another friend, please Nico, please!"
"But I've never seen you before in my life!" I yelled. I pulled my olive hand away from her chocolate brown one.
And that was when the ground opened up and swallowed us whole…
So that's my first chapter. What do you think?