AN this is in no way endorsed by Gothicgirldarkness666 this is done to help people who read your story and go 'well, the tiny portions of story that are readable as English are great, if only she or someone else could post it tidied up and without spelling mistakes then I could post a long flowery review telling Gothicgirldarkness666 what a great author she is', if you want, copy and paste this over your original, believe me, I was an awful author once (and sometimes still am).

Once upon a time there was a beautiful girl named Miyuki Luna Melancholia Darkness Draven A'maranthus (AN: A'maranthus means love lies bleeding isn't that Gothic lol right?) Willow Sakura Twilight Requiem she has long ebony black hair with purple streaks in it and she had crystal blue eyes that showed deep emotions. (AN: she looks sort a like Amy lee!) she has pale white skin & beautiful black feathers because she's a fallen dark angel but she tries to be good but people try to make her evil. she's Goth (AN: if you couldn't tell your really stupid lol) and she was wearing a black sleeveless corset & a black floor length skirt that went down to her feet that had a slit up to her thighs showing off her long pale legs & she was wearing a pair of high heels & a black chocker necklace.

her powers are controlling the darkness (AN: oh my god just like raven only they're not sisters) controlling fire (AN: the flames are Gothically black) & she's telekinetic (AN: which means she can move stuff a round like raven) & she can fly (AN: Because of her wings(?)) (AN: sorry for all the AN's but I have to explain stuff lol lol lol lol XD) and she can read minds and using magic.

Miyuki is very smart and beautiful she knows English (Undead Beta AN: better than you I hope), Spanish and Japanese. she can hack into computers & all the guys love her, raven is her friend and Robin is her bf (AN: boyfriend) which make starfire rely jealous because she's just a prep.

also earlier I forgot to mention that Miyuki wears rely Gothic make-up like black lipstick, black eye-liner and black eye-shadow but she didn't need no concealer because she has flawless skin & she's never had a pimple or anything.

"hi robin what's up" Miyuki asked

"nothing you know that evanescence is having a concert tonight do you want to go with me" he asked

"Oh my god, I love evanescence" I said(? Change in POV)

"cool so I have two tickets, want to go with me?" he asked

"yes!" said Miyuki kissing him on the lips(? Change In POV)

Miyuki ran up to her room to get ready for her date with robin.


alright that's the end of chapter 1 OH MY GOD NO FLAMZ FLAMZ ARE SOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO(?) & MY WRITING IS REALLY FOOD! (?)