This is my first story so I'd appreciate any advice :)
DISCLAIMER: I don't own the Percy Jackson, Heroes of Olympus or Kane Chronical series.
My writings not that good.
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I opened the pack of headache/stomach-ache tablets hoping it would help me. I wasn't used to feeling this ill, it's always just a cold or a stomach bug, I never feel like I'm being stabbed over and over again each time hurting even more. So I sat down on the sofa I the darkness and silence, as light and noise caused it to hurt even more. I tried to calm down and figure out how could a headache cause so much pain. It was abnormal, no headache could hurt this much, could it?
Just then Sadie, Walt and Zia came loudly into the house and I was close to tears of pain.
"Heellllooo" Sadie called, nearly splitting my head open in agony.
Strangely I was reminded of a Greek myth where Zeus's head hurt so bad that Hephaestus split Zeus's head open when Athena was born. Greek mythology was even more messed up than Egyptian. But now I didn't need Hephaestus to help me split my head open, when i had a stabbing headache and a Sadie.
Still I didn't want to say anything, a headache could never be that bad to them unless they had experienced the same, but I had a feeling that this wasn't just a headache. Then they burst into the living room turning up the lights on full brightness.
"hey", I managed to stutter before getting up to try to turn off the lights.
"Carter, are you having a little baby headache?" Sadie teased waving the pack of medicine in front of my face before getting a glimpse of my face.
"Carter are you okay?" she asked this time more gently, now everyone was quiet and starting intently at my face.
" Yeah, fine" I breathed barely able to form words. Before promptly collapsing, I was still conscious by I could barley see, small stars. But I was determind to stay awake.
It was pure agony, but I wanted to say that I was fine, but that would of been a bit pathetic in my state so instead I tried to explain what was wrong. I didn't want pity just a bit of help.
Zia leaned over me and felt my forehead, she and Sadie shared a look and I vaguely remember being dragged through a portal and being placed somewhere soft and comfortable by gentle hands before the spinning world and pain overwhelmed me and I passed out.
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Carter looked awful, slightly worried and scared. The last time I saw him looking this bad was...when the two headed snake monster tjesu heru bit him, that time he nearly died, and I learnt his secret name trying to heal him, and I could tell that this wasn't the same.
"No light, no noise, head ,stomach, hurts. Its doesn't help" Carter murmured deliriously.
Zia looked so panicked that I ordered her to sit down, but she refused to and instead knelt next to Carter placing her palm on Carters forehead, only to look at me with eyes wide with shock.
"We need to help him, NOW!" She instructed, but it was more like a cry of help and panic was painted in her eyes. Her usual calm face was now only showing fear, worry lined were etched so deep into her face they looked like she'd aged a decade. Her amber eyes were filled with worry, her lips pursed together so tightly that it must have hurt and her face colourless. I felt like I had to help, and I did so without a second thought. It was distressing for me to see Carter like this, we went to seeing each other twice a year to knowing his secret name, which gave me access to all his memories, fears and secrets. Carter Kane was going to be okay. He had no choice.
Without properly thinking I opened a portal to the duat and screamed for our parents. Who arrived seconds later to see me, Zia and Walt all huddled around a curled up Carter.
"What wrong? What happened?" our father, Julius Kane/ The god Osiris demanded
"Carter, oh Carter" our mother Ruby Kane soothed as she rushed to Carters side.
"I don't really know, apart from that he had a headache, light and noise seemed to make it worse and the he looked awful and collapsed. He is still conscious I have no idea what brought it up." I rushed, even to me I sounded pained and my voice higher than usual.
It was weird, how could he collapse and look like the last time he was poisoned, all that from a headache? It was obviously something more, Carter was always the one to minimise things.
All I could do while my parents set up a bed and eased Carter into it was to hope that he would be okay.
Thank you for reading the first chapter of my first story! Please review and tell me what you think of it and what I could improve. The next chapter will be out very soon- by the end of Thursday 24th at the latest.
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