~Author's Note~
Hey there guys! So just informing you/everyone. This idea grazed my mind just a minute before my head racked the pillow last night. So uhm, I hope you can review my story and tell me the parts that I should improve on.
My feet were throbbing and aching painfully as I ran and ran and ran away from the rebels. I didn't care
about my dress getting torn apart in shreds by the sharp roots of the trees and bushes that I ran past from. My
breathing was coming in and out, in wild senseless pants now, my lungs trying to do a good job at doing what
they're supposed to do. I am painfully aware that I have just left the Palace and now in utter
vulnerability of being caught or even killed by the rebels. How stupid am I to just suddenly do that?!
Hours seemed to have ticked by as I realized that I was leaning against a tree hidden by thick thorny bushes
trying my best to even out the ragged pants coming out of my mouth. Though my leg still agonizingly hurts from
when I tripped over the wandering tree branch on the ground and I scraped my leg hard enough on a sharp
stone for it to bleed ceremoniously. The gash was about 5.3 inches long in finger measurement. Then to pass
time I contemplated on my current situation and balanced out the good and the bad to pass time.
Well guess what. The bad measured out greatly.
This is it. I really am going to die. I thought to myself and browsed through the names and faces of all
those I love who I need to leave behind. God, what would my family feel if they were to receive
the body of their dead daughter. Oh God, what would Maxon feel?
And just as I was ready to lie down on my back to relieve myself from the homicidal thoughts, I heard voices coming
out from behind me. I tried and focused hard on slowing my breath, fearing my ragged intake would give me
away. But even after that, a moment of silence, I thought I lost them. Still I didn't move, wanting to be
sure. Seconds later the voices I heard became more clear. They were right in front of me.
"We should have come at night," someone -a girl- huffed. I flattened myself more against the tree, still hoping nothing would give me away.
"They wouldn't have been outside at night," a man replied. They were still running, or trying to, and it sounded like they were having a rough go of it.
"Let me carry some," he offered. it sounded like they were getting very close. Wait, what?! Who am I to say that?!
"I can do it."
I held my breath and scooted away noiselessly from the two of them. And there was 2 reasons for that.
1. She didn't want to listen to such a romantic exchange.
and 2. She didn't want to be caught by the rebels.
Then suddenly I heard one more come, whistling. So I did my best to impersonate as tree branch. Just
before I thought that I was going to die. The man beside the girl stood up and whispered something to
her and pranced off to the whistling guy. Just as the girl finished packing up the scattered books, I
accidentally stepped on a fallen twig and it crunched.
Just loud enough for the girl to see me.
My brain was screaming in panic while my face stayed motionless yet trembling. Running away would've
been a great idea if it wasn't for the big gash on my leg that will probably make me just limping slowly
away from the encounter.
Still realizing that I was staring up at her, I noticed that neither one of us had said anything at all.
Then suddenly she smiled then curtsied in front of me.
A really respectful one at that. Without even a trace of mockery.
The she just skipped away towards the shadows and I was just left there, looking confused and dumbfounded.
I tried to go back to the palace when I remembered. Jeez, I'm lost, I just tumbled here so that I could've at least NOT encounter a rebel.
And before I could've at least sit down on the ground before me. A head pounding nausea washed over me. I felt my stomach tighten, looking
for something to heave out of my system. But there was nothing. I felt really sick that the colors from my surroundings were
fading and blurring and turning black. I suddenly accounted the big gash on my leg. That must have been it! I was loosing blood too fast
and I didn't have enough time to save myself, my body suddenly felt to heavy for me and my eyelids started to close involuntarily.
And before I even realized it. I'm
falling down to the ground, letting myself surrender to darkness.
Then, thump... I hear something crack.
