Ok, this is my second attempt to make a good fanfiction story. My style of writing is third-person, and I switch who the chapter's following almost every chapter. This is my first attempt at a prologue, but I think it was rather good.
This fanfiction takes place around naruto's plot, and there will eventually be run-ins with characters from the main series, but there are some facts that I changed to suit my own story.
Update: 1/6/12
Alright, there are a few changes that I'm making to this part. I now have what I want Kawaii to look like in my mind, and it's not entirely like what I had before. As such, here are the differences:
-Kawaii's hair-color has changed from grey to purple.
-Kawaii's irises are red.
-Kawaii's age is now given. While this is a vague guess, during the Chunin Exams Kawaii is around seven years of age.
Update: 1/4/13
Wow. Over a YEAR, and I haven't come back to this story in so long . . .
I've decided to work on editing the chapters I have already up. Nothing huge, I've just improved my writing skills since the time I made this and I want to try fixing some mistakes I made.
Rūkī Kodomo sighed as he leaned against the railing in front of him. The Chūnin exam preliminary round was well underway. Indeed, although the current fighters had only begun seconds ago, this fight looked like it was going to be over extremely fast. The sand ninja named Kankuro was completely immobilized by the sound ninja.
"Wow."
Rūkī turned his head to look at the source of the voice. Not too far away from him was a young kid with purple hair, who was watching the battle excitedly. "That's really cool!"
That only got Rūkī to shake his head in confusion. He knew the kid's name was Kawaii, but what he couldn't understand was why the kid was here. Well, not just that. How was the kid still here?
As Rūkī wondered about that, the kid's eyes suddenly opened wide as he gave a cry of shock. It was imitated by several nearby people, and when Rūkī looked down at the battlefield he was startled to find the sound ninja was now restrained by a wooden puppet. "What - how did this happen?"
It was one of Rūkī's squad members - Sapōto - that told Rūkī the answer. "Right after the sound ninja should have broken his neck."
Really? As Rūkī watched he was startled when the strange wrapped object Kankuro carried around unwrapped itself, revealing the real Kankuro. In very little time Rūkī heard bone crack, and proctor Hayate stated that the battle was over. Not long after that Rūkī casually watched the digital board to see if he would be part of the next fight. While he was calmly watching it, he heard one of the other genin watching it not quite as calmly. "Come on! Me! COME ON!"
Rūkī simply eyed the genin that had spoke. It was a girl that was standing near him. She seemed to be on the same squad that the very young boy was on. The other teammate was a boy with white hair. He looked tired, which made sense considering he had fought one of Rūkī's squad members. Poor Michi . . . he put so much time and effort to get here just to be knocked out in the preliminaries.
When the board gave the name, Rūkī immediately smiled at Sapōto. " It looks like it'syour turn."
Rūkī could only grin as Sapōto leapt right down into the battle area. It seemed that she was obviously excited at the prospect of fighting. But Rūkī was startled when he realized who Rūkī's opponent was. Rūkī turned with shock as the genin girl that had excitedly spoke before smiled at the young boy that was her team member, telling him that it was his turn. The boy . . . Kawaii Akuma, according to the board, smiled back at the girl. "Y-yeah."
Rūkī frowned. From what he could tell Kawaii was about six or seven years old. Everyone else here TOWERED over him. What was more Kawaii's kind smile, combined with the clearly gentle and kind personality he possessed, just didn't suit a ninja. He wasn't imposing in any way. The one thing that looked imposing about the boy - and that wasn't saying much - was his strangely red eyes, but even they just seemed to radiate kindness. To top it off, Kawaii's right arm was badly burned. As the boy grunted his teeth and slowly turned towards the stairs, his arms limp at his sides, Rūkī was completely baffled. "Sapōto never gets this lucky."
The girl on Kawaii's team almost immediately turned to look at Rūkī. "What?"
Rūkī just shook his head as Kawaii slowly made his way to the stairs. "He can't even walk correctly."
To Rūkī's surprise the girl, Supaiku if Rūkī remembered correctly, didn't look offended at the obvious insult to Kawaii. Indeed, the girl actually gave Rūkī a slight grin. "When Kawaii was young his brain was damaged. His motor skills are pretty much shot. It takes a lot of effort just for him to get his body to stand. A normal walk is just too much for him to -"
Both of Kawaii's teammates cringed as Rūkī heard a commotion. He turned, and was partially amused when he saw Kawaii tumbling down the stairs. When the young boy got all the way to the bottom, he only just put his left arm out in time to avoid slamming his face into the ground. As Kawaii slowly worked to get up, Rūkī suddenly noticed something startling. Only one of Kawaii's legs would move at any given time. What was more, his arms hung limply from his side as he then slowly made his way over to where Sapōto stood. Sapōto, understandably, looked just as surprised.
Rūkī eventually shook his head. "How . . . who let him become a ninja? I'm going to assume he can't use ninja tools at all."
The white-haired boy chuckled at that. "No, he has to concentrate hard to grasp something. He could never be able to correctly use a kunai, shuriken . . . pretty much anything."
Rūkī frowned. "Then he must be a ninjutsu or genjutsu user?"
The black-haired girl chuckled. "What, you mean use hand-signs? Not at his level of motor skills."
Rūkī almost grinned as he gave a sarcastic comment. "Oh, I get it. He just acts cute and it makes it very awkward for the opponent to fight. He's quite skilled at that, obviously."
As a man behind Kawaii's team members chuckled Rūkī turned to face him. The man spoke with a deep voice that startled Rūkī. The voice just didn't fit the man's figure. "Don't get us wrong, I certainly see why this confuses you. It seems strange that he has seemingly no way to combat someone, don't you think?"
Of course it did. Rūkī tried to think of some way the boy could help his squad even with his limitations, but he soon shrugged his shoulders in defeat. "So what, he's the strategist?"
As the man nodded, Rūkī sighed. He turned and watched as Kawaii finally reached the spot he was supposed to be in. Sapōto looked just as confused as Rūkī felt. Why even bother with a match? Kawaii was completely defenseless, he could barely move by himself. Still, as the Proctor started to speak, Kawaii cleared his throat. "I-I'm sorry sir, but can I . . . say something to Sapōto before the match?"
The proctor looked rather confused, but eventually nodded. Kawaii gave a slight smile as he turned to face Sapōto. "Look, I . . . I don't like to hurt people, it just feels wrong to me. But I will do it if I have to. I don't want to insult you, but . . . if we fight each other, I'll probably hurt you so badly that you will need to go to the hospital. However, it's possible my attack could kill you. I know this will likely be taken the wrong way, but . . . if you don't want to get hurt, you should give up."
Rūkī was completely confused. If the child wasn't so young, and if he didn't look so serious, Rūkī would have thought the boy was mocking Sapōto. Sapōto flinched, and as rage appeared on her face Rūkī knew Sapōto wasn't going to surrender. Kawaii obviously realized that as well. "Look, I just don't want to hurt you."
Sapōto made her answer very clear when she got into a fighting stance. "I wouldn't worry about your opponent if I was you, kid. I'd worry more about whether your opponent will let you live after that!"
Kawaii sighed again. "Well, I tried. I'm sorry for interrupting, Hayate sensei. I've said what I wanted to say."
The Proctor frowned, but then spoke. "Sapōto and Kawaii, you may start at any time."
Sapōto grinned as she grabbed out her senbon needles. "I'm going to make this slow and painful you bastard!"
Rūkī heard Kawaii sigh as he raised his left arm. Even that small act was obviously a challenge to the poor kid from the way he gritting his teeth. Rūkī didn't bother to watch this one. He knew that Sapōto had this won. She'd probably turn the poor kid into a pincushion.
But when Rūkī looked up at the board he heard the other genin gasp as a powerful gust of wind suddenly whipped past Rūkī's face. His ears began to ring from the noise of a large explosion and he heard a quick, cut-off cry of shock from Sapōto followed by a sickening crunch. And it all happened before Rūkī even had time to turn around. When he did turn to look his mouth opened in shock.
Sapōto was embedded into the wall on the other side of the fighting field. She had quite a few strong burns covering her body, and soon Rūkī leapt down into the field and dashed over to her. He knew the fight was over. There was no way Sapōto saw this one coming. Her eyes were completely unfocused and she wasn't moving at all. She was either unconscious or . . .
Rūkī sighed in relief when he saw that Sapōto was breathing. She was still alive. With that problem out of the way Rūkī looked at the floor. He couldn't believe what he saw. Starting from where Kawaii was standing was a large area of scorched floor leading to Sapōto's current position. Kawaii looked worried, but otherwise unharmed.
The only thing Rūkī could get out of his mouth was "How?"
How had Sapōto been defeated by an opponent without any genjutsu, ninjutsu, or taijutsu? This . . . this didn't make any SENSE! When Rūkī looked at Kawaii, Kawaii gave him a guilty smile as he looked the other way. When the proctor stated that Kawaii was the winner Kawaii smiled again then began his strange shuffling walk back to the stairs.
Update 2/24/12
Hello! Before I continue onto part 2, I want to go back through these chapters and work on editing them. I want to clarify areas that don't make sense, look at facts I may have forgotten, work on the structure of the story . . . you know, editing. If there are any areas you aren't understanding, or areas that you have a very difficult time following, just let me know. I watch the reviews like a hawk, so I'll certainly catch it if there's a new review. If you don't feel comfortable with that, just PM me. I promise I won't murder the first person that states they have noticed problems.
On that note, if there are parts you like in particular, or parts that you would like me to expand on, just tell me.
Update 1/4/13
This should be the only chapter that has any huge changes. One of the main changes is in Rūkī's personality. Originally he was a hyper and naive character. However, now that I've actually worked on his character a bit Rūkī is now a calm and patient person.
Another thing I changed was the way Kawaii speaks. I am not afraid to say that I made him a bit too mature the first time around, and I had him use words he wasn't supposed to know.
I don't have a planned schedule for when I'm going to work on what story. I use reviews to improve my ability as a writer. Because We Four Freaks has gotten so many reviews (as of this update, 105), it's a priority to my other stories. However, this story has the second highest amount of reviews so I'm going to start paying attention to it too. The PROBLEM is . . . well . . . as of this update, it's only got 4 reviews compared to We Four Freaks' 105. While YES that somehow earns it second place . . . that's a HUGE gap.
So, to recap: I'm not dead, I've been working on We Four Freaks because I'm getting a HUGE number of reviews on it compared to my other stories. I DO need to take a break every now and then though, so I'll work on this story when I need that break.
Update 2/6/13
Nothing big, just corrected a part where I called Surudoi a guy. I can't believe I didn't notice that sooner :(