When All is Broken
The dark
The dark embrace of the night
Covered the moon with its shadowy touch
Stars shielded and veiled as
Thick mists of clouds drifted slowly
How far?
How far had the moon gone?
Lingering just beyond my reaching hand
Heaven's tears descended
Small fleeting drops tapping against my face
So cold
So cold was this black land
So dark not even shadows could play
What luminescence could penetrate
This swallowing hopelessness and despair I have fallen into?
This song
This song I am hearing being sung through the wind
How soft yet ragged are its howls
Completely oblivious I am to breaking whispers
Dying like dim embers of vanishing fire
One scream
One scream was all I heard
Ringing through my body in constant echoes
What insanity is this that I am enduring?
Had my mind not been shattered eons ago?
Lost dreams
Lost dreams serve tragedies of past
Faith bruised and battered by abandoned desires
Fighting to swim amidst tearing waves of guilt
Ventured too far out in this sea of grief
But yet
But yet have I to be completely taken by dusk
Fading light disappearing but not yet diminished
Glimpses of pure sensations flitter across
It is too dark this night to catch them
I live
I live for a promise that has killed me
A dream I once had, torn simply to dust
Left tattered and broken
Shards of memory that cut so deep when I look back
And still
And still the darkness has not lifted
Though the time of dawn came many hours ago
What is there in this life for me?
I stare dully at the blackened sky and see only
The moon…
A/N: Well, I don't know how good this is, but my friend's English teacher seemed to like it, so I thought I'd have a go posting it up here. :)
Admittedly, I had to read it through quite the number of times before I saw that it would go quite well with the life of someone from RoTK. My only question was: who?
Funnily enough, it ended up being Jiang Wei, though I think that there are only some lines in the entire poem-thing-y that actually portray his emotions and logic at the defeat of ShuHan. I'll let you decide which line/s go best with him. :)
Review please, if you have the time, and crictism is always welcome, especially if it can improve my writing in any way. I don't think that there are any mistakes concerning spelling, since I've editted it so many times. I believe that it's one of my better works, but judgement is all up to you. :D
Anyways, I hope you enjoyed reading it to some extent, and seriously, review and tell me what you like or didn't like about it. Anything but the title; yeah - I admit the title was crap. It was originally "Shattering Conscious" but that didn't seem right to the occasion so whatever.
Yours truly,
Kurai-Shuwazi