Kay, I decided to rewrite chapter 1 cuz I think the original one is
actually quite boring, no dialogs and everything...and is very short. Well, I
had had some good reviews, but I think I gotta edit this. Still can
improve right? A new part had been added to make this longer, by the way.
THANKS FOR REVIEWING MY WORK!!! Thank you, thank you. (blurgal waves like a
good performer)
Disclaimer: I don't own Finding Nemo. Kay! I've got it over with. Let's continue with the story!
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Chapter 1 Marlin's childhood
A female clownfish was swimming towards Marlin in the dark dark sea, her expression worried, trying to mouth some words to him. "I can't hear you! What did you want to say my dear?" She became even more flustered, and frantically tried to make herself heard. She looked as if she was shouting, but no sound came out. Suddenly...
"Wake up! It's time for school!" Marlin's dad jumped on him.
"I don't want to go to school! Five more minutes!" Marlin tried to stay asleep, a fin over his eyes.
"Time for school! Time for school!" Marlin's dad zoomed around the anemone. Marlin, defeated, woke up, his eyes still half closed.
His dad stopped acting crazy and smiled. He hugged his son.
"Good morning Marlin!"
Marlin blinked, smiled and hugged him back.
"Morning Dad."
"First day of school and ready to go and get some knowledge! Your stepmother had made breakfast! You can go and have it with Martin. I'm going out. Bye Marlin!"
"Bye Dad." Marlin's smile faded away as he watched his father go. He went to the other part of the anemone to get his breakfast.
"You are late! Your stepbrother had been here a long time ago. He was certainly more punctual than you. Now you had to gobble up your breakfast or you'll be late for school." His stepmother gestured to the pieces of seaweed placed for them to eat. Marlin took the larger piece.
"NO! This is for your stepbrother. He needs more nourishment than you. The other piece is yours."
Marlin took the other piece. It was puny. He finished his breakfast in about two seconds. That piece of seaweed is so small, he could finish it in two gulps.
His stepmother frowned.
"Don't gobble your food, it's rude. See, your brother never gobbles his food. He's such an angelfish, aren't you my Martin Darling."
Marlin looked at Martin. He's shoving big pieces of seaweed down his little throat and asking for more. "His mother mades him sounds as if he's a god," thought Marlin, a grin creeping up his face.
His stepmum noticed his grin and sensed that he is laughing at Martin.
"Don't think that you're all that young man, you are going to REEF school (Ray's Excellent Education for all Fishes) while Martin is going to CI, (Clownfish Institution) an all clownfish school. Martin is going to a much better off school than yours."
Marlin sighed and rolled his eyes. She had been bragging about it since Martin had been accepted into CI, which was a long time ago. But then, looking on the bright side, any school without Martin in it is a good school.
***** In school.
Marlin looked all around him. Everyone was total strangers to him, and he was the only clownfish there. He stood there, hoping that someone would call him and make friends with him. And someone did call him.
"Hey there, that orange fish with white stripes."
Marlin turned around. It was an angelfish and a crab.
"Hi, my name is Angela. I'm obviously an angelfish as you can see. His name's Hermit. He's a bit shy."
"Erm... Hi. My name's Marlin. I'm a clownfish."
Angela's eyes widened.
"A clownfish? Hey, you're funny right? Tell us a joke!"
"Yeah...Tell...us...a...joke," Hermit sqeaked from inside his shell.
Marlin sighed. Why can't anybody understand that clownfish aren't funny? "Actually, clownfish are not funnier than any of the other fish in the ocean..." Marlin started to explain, but was interrupted by Angela.
"Oh, don't be such a wet blanket. Tell us a joke!"
"Do...somethink...funnee," Hermit squeaked.
"Okay then, I think I know quite a good one." Marlin sighed. Here it goes again.
"There was this mollusk, it walks up...no, swims up to a sea cucumber. You know actually nobody talks but in a joke, everyone talks. So the mollusk says to the sea cucumber..."
His rather bad joke was interrupted by the arrival of the teacher, Mr Ray. (Father of the stingray shown in the movie)
"Mr Ray!" all the kids (not including Marlin) squealed and ran up to him. He (I mean Mr Ray) landed on them.
"Now, where had my class gone?"
"We're here!" Some of the fishes in his class lifted up his fin.
"Oh! Now hop abroad the Explorer!"
*** Marlin soon made friends with everyone in class. However, all they did is to ask him for jokes, and he had to repeat the joke on the sea cucumber and mollusk over and over again.
One day, Marlin went to school as usual. He heard someone calling him.
"Hey, you're a clownfish right? Tell us a joke!"
Marlin turned around, ready to tell that fish that clownfish aren't funny, when he realized that that fish wasn't calling him. There was another clownfish. And a female one at that. It was love at first sight. Marlin felt his heart flipping over. He smiled his most charming smile at her, and from the way she smiled back, it can be confirmed that she felt the same way too.
~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~* To be continued...Muahahaha.
The faster you review the faster I update. (grins evil grin revealing sharp teeth.)
Disclaimer: I don't own Finding Nemo. Kay! I've got it over with. Let's continue with the story!
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Chapter 1 Marlin's childhood
A female clownfish was swimming towards Marlin in the dark dark sea, her expression worried, trying to mouth some words to him. "I can't hear you! What did you want to say my dear?" She became even more flustered, and frantically tried to make herself heard. She looked as if she was shouting, but no sound came out. Suddenly...
"Wake up! It's time for school!" Marlin's dad jumped on him.
"I don't want to go to school! Five more minutes!" Marlin tried to stay asleep, a fin over his eyes.
"Time for school! Time for school!" Marlin's dad zoomed around the anemone. Marlin, defeated, woke up, his eyes still half closed.
His dad stopped acting crazy and smiled. He hugged his son.
"Good morning Marlin!"
Marlin blinked, smiled and hugged him back.
"Morning Dad."
"First day of school and ready to go and get some knowledge! Your stepmother had made breakfast! You can go and have it with Martin. I'm going out. Bye Marlin!"
"Bye Dad." Marlin's smile faded away as he watched his father go. He went to the other part of the anemone to get his breakfast.
"You are late! Your stepbrother had been here a long time ago. He was certainly more punctual than you. Now you had to gobble up your breakfast or you'll be late for school." His stepmother gestured to the pieces of seaweed placed for them to eat. Marlin took the larger piece.
"NO! This is for your stepbrother. He needs more nourishment than you. The other piece is yours."
Marlin took the other piece. It was puny. He finished his breakfast in about two seconds. That piece of seaweed is so small, he could finish it in two gulps.
His stepmother frowned.
"Don't gobble your food, it's rude. See, your brother never gobbles his food. He's such an angelfish, aren't you my Martin Darling."
Marlin looked at Martin. He's shoving big pieces of seaweed down his little throat and asking for more. "His mother mades him sounds as if he's a god," thought Marlin, a grin creeping up his face.
His stepmum noticed his grin and sensed that he is laughing at Martin.
"Don't think that you're all that young man, you are going to REEF school (Ray's Excellent Education for all Fishes) while Martin is going to CI, (Clownfish Institution) an all clownfish school. Martin is going to a much better off school than yours."
Marlin sighed and rolled his eyes. She had been bragging about it since Martin had been accepted into CI, which was a long time ago. But then, looking on the bright side, any school without Martin in it is a good school.
***** In school.
Marlin looked all around him. Everyone was total strangers to him, and he was the only clownfish there. He stood there, hoping that someone would call him and make friends with him. And someone did call him.
"Hey there, that orange fish with white stripes."
Marlin turned around. It was an angelfish and a crab.
"Hi, my name is Angela. I'm obviously an angelfish as you can see. His name's Hermit. He's a bit shy."
"Erm... Hi. My name's Marlin. I'm a clownfish."
Angela's eyes widened.
"A clownfish? Hey, you're funny right? Tell us a joke!"
"Yeah...Tell...us...a...joke," Hermit sqeaked from inside his shell.
Marlin sighed. Why can't anybody understand that clownfish aren't funny? "Actually, clownfish are not funnier than any of the other fish in the ocean..." Marlin started to explain, but was interrupted by Angela.
"Oh, don't be such a wet blanket. Tell us a joke!"
"Do...somethink...funnee," Hermit squeaked.
"Okay then, I think I know quite a good one." Marlin sighed. Here it goes again.
"There was this mollusk, it walks up...no, swims up to a sea cucumber. You know actually nobody talks but in a joke, everyone talks. So the mollusk says to the sea cucumber..."
His rather bad joke was interrupted by the arrival of the teacher, Mr Ray. (Father of the stingray shown in the movie)
"Mr Ray!" all the kids (not including Marlin) squealed and ran up to him. He (I mean Mr Ray) landed on them.
"Now, where had my class gone?"
"We're here!" Some of the fishes in his class lifted up his fin.
"Oh! Now hop abroad the Explorer!"
*** Marlin soon made friends with everyone in class. However, all they did is to ask him for jokes, and he had to repeat the joke on the sea cucumber and mollusk over and over again.
One day, Marlin went to school as usual. He heard someone calling him.
"Hey, you're a clownfish right? Tell us a joke!"
Marlin turned around, ready to tell that fish that clownfish aren't funny, when he realized that that fish wasn't calling him. There was another clownfish. And a female one at that. It was love at first sight. Marlin felt his heart flipping over. He smiled his most charming smile at her, and from the way she smiled back, it can be confirmed that she felt the same way too.
~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~* To be continued...Muahahaha.
The faster you review the faster I update. (grins evil grin revealing sharp teeth.)