So this is my first writing, so I hope you like it. Feel free to give me any input that you think would help me. So for anyone that knows "The Raven" by Edger Allen Poe, this is supposed to be vaguely like it. Anyway, thanks and let me know what you think.
Upon this I penciled in his hair, when, with many a flirt and flair,
Out he stepped, man so fine, man so dreamy I cannot define.
Not the least Hesitation made he; seeing me anxious became he;
and with hands so sooth and firm he, found me, took me to the floor-
found, us both, wound together tight, danced together upon the floor-
Danced, and kissed, and so much more.
Then this hot hunk of man beguiling my sad fancy into shining,
By the loose desire so plainly, shone his hunger is his eyes.
"Though I feel your lips with mine, are you to be forevermore mine?"
Sexy pride, red hot passion, him on me in my mind-
"Tell me what thy see me as here, that you would put me in this bind!"
"I'll be with you and love you" Quoth he, "Forevermore."
Much I melted to this dreamy to feel his eyes follow me plainly,
Though his answer little talking - complete understanding, he would not be walking;
For I cannot help thinking that of him, this living human being
On the floor we will remain, here within my chamber door,
Doing things as we please and wish things beyond telling for,
Our love will be shown and acted forevermore.