Me: Well considering some of the major editing I've done with my other stories I have to edit this one as well. It centers around Antoine mainly so if you dislike his character could you be so kind as to tough it out. Same if you have a strong dislike for OCs and FCs because there will be a fair amount of them in this.
Now I don't hold any ownership to the Sonic gang they belong to SEGA, DIC and the Sonic Team. I own the plot of this story and my OCs who're going to appear shortly. Also Pokémon belongs to Nintendo and the Pokémon team not me. I still own my OCs and the plot though so no pirating it.
An adventures beginning
A purple walrus was bent over his work bench screwdriver in hand as he attempted to screw in a couple more screws to get his machine to work. He grunted and removed his red cap to wipe away some of the sweat as he put his screw driver away in his utility belt. A brown coyote came in carrying a box full of compartments he was panting heavily as he put the box down beside the walrus. The coyote was wearing a blue uniform with red trimming and gold cuffs along with red boots.
"So when are you to be planning for zhis to work Rotor?" the coyote asked heavy French accent evident in his manner of speaking. The walrus looked up and stared blankly at the coyote as if he hadn't even realized he was there until that very moment. The coyote huffed slightly annoyed that the walrus hadn't heard him.
Suddenly a loud and boisterous voice broke in "Hey Rote ya got that thing-a-ma-do-ey working yet?" and a blue blur sailed in. When it stopped moving it was revealed to be a blue hedgehog with a tan belly and arms wearing nothing but red and white sneakers with gold buckles, white gloves and a guitar shaped medallion around his neck.
"Hello Sonique zhe 'edgehog I am seeing zhat you are to be stopping by very quick non?" the coyote asked with a tint of annoyance in his voice. The hedgehog looked at him with one eyebrow raised then shook his head as if it wasn't worth his time. That seemed to annoy the coyote more because he huffed again.
" is it working yet Rote 'cause me an' Tails here can't wait ta try it" the hedgehog stated removing his backpack and setting it down on the floor. Out of the backpack poked a fluffy head followed soon by the rest of the young fox. The fox was orangey-brown in colour with white on the tips of his tails as well as his muzzle and a part of his chest fur. He was wearing white gloves as well as red and white shoes.
"Whoa" he stated shaking his head and looking around slightly dizzy as was evident by his shaky gaze which soon rested on the coyote. "Hey Ant I didn't know you had a twin" he stated before shaking his head vigorously "Now could you both stay still for me?" he asked causing the coyote to glare at the hypo hedgehog who gave a sheepish chuckle.
Antoine sat on the tree stump glaring at the oil covered hedgehog and a slightly annoyed look played across his own face. "You were not supoised to being touching zhe machine Sonique" he grumbled looking down at his oil covered boots, then shaking his head to try and get the oil out of his normally blonde hair, blue eyes filled with annoyance.
"Yeah so? You weren't even meant to be in there Ant" the hedgehog shot right back at the distraught coyote. Their little argument stopped right there as a whooshing sound reached the coyote's ears he quickly ducked down just in time as a hover board flew right over top of him, just narrowly missing the top of his head.
"Yo Manic" the hedgehog called out jumping up and waving to the green figure on top of the board. Which turned out to be a mistake, as its rider lost control and a loud thump was heard from ahead of them. "You just crashed and burned man" the hedgehog finished laughing.
A green hedgehog with tan arms and belly walked out from the crash site, but where the blue hedgehog's quills were slick and cool this hedgehog's quills were untidy and ruffled also he was wearing an orange vest along with an orange belt with a pack attached to it he had on white gloves and red and white shoes also spiked wrist bands. He also wore a drum medallion around his neck.
"That was totally radical dude but man what's with all the huts around here?" he asked dazed. Antoine found himself smirking while the blue hedgehog started laughing again. "What, what did I say?" he asked confusedly as he looked at the both of them dizziness forgotten.
That's when a magenta hedgehog marched in. Her quills were styled to look like hair and her crimson eyes were filled with anger. She was wearing a short purple dress with purple boots and a keyboard medallion hung around her neck. "Manic just look at what you done to my hut!" she shouted waving his hover board in his face.
"Dids he be destoying zhe whole wall again Sonia?" Antoine asked curiosity filling his features. The blue hedgehog was laughing once more albeit much quieter than before almost as though he was scared of the magenta hedgehog.
Then another hedgehog arrived but this one was shorter and pinker she was also wielding a large pink hammer. She was wearing a short red dress along with red boots and white gloves with gold rings on her wrists. "Not just the whole wall but our girls night in session" the pink hedgehog screamed in a rage fire filling her green eyes. Antoine let out a squeak of terror and ran past a surprised Rotor into a workshop. Sonic followed by Manic, Sonia and the pink hedgehog all followed him in.
Inside the workshop Sonic dodged the hammer that kept swinging his way while Manic was being chased by Sonia. The twin-tailed fox from earlier was trying very hard to not let anybody near the device on the table unfortunately he had to duck when a pink laser blast suddenly came his way. Antoine backing away from a mad, killer keyboard wielding Sonia, tripped and grabbed the first thing he could, which happened to be the starting lever to the machine.
Everything sort of stopped as a bright flash filled the room catching everyone within it and transporting them away. Just as the bright light clear Rotor followed by a golden-brown rabbit with metallic legs and a metallic right arm wearing a bright pink leotard and a squirrel/chipmunk hybrid wearing a blue vest along with knee high blue boots came in.
"What happened sugar-Rote Ah thought ya'll said that it was finished?" the rabbit stated pointing to the broken contraption on the walrus's workbench.
"Well it was Bunnie" the walrus sighed then he noticed something "Wait where'd everybody go they all ran in here before us didn't they?" he asked looking around confused.
"Oh mah stars ya'll right sugar-Rote where'd they all get to?" the rabbit asked.
"I don't know but I just hope they're safe" the squirrel/chipmunk hybrid answered for the walrus.
"Yeah I hope they're safe" he agreed and the rabbit nodded in understanding.
"Ah hope so to" she stated.
Running across the ground and panting was a small yellow mouse like creature it had red cheeks and brown stripes on its back, a lightning bolt shaped tail and black tips on its pointy ears. It suddenly stopped running nose twitching and it looked up into the sky to see a giant portal open and spit out the unconscious form of a brown coyote in a military uniform. Without thinking the creature ran up to him sniffing inquisitively.
When the unconscious form didn't stir in the slightest it got a mischievous grin and let a few sparks stray out from its cheeks then with a small cry it discharged a bolt of electricity into the coyote causing him to jump up screaming. Once he stopped he twitched slightly, still smarting from the charge.
"Where, where es everyone else being?" the coyote asked once he realized he was alone. Then he eyed the creature cautiously re-thinking that it was maybe not quite alone enough.
Me: well how'd I do? Since it is revised the characterizations might come on a little bit better for one thing this chapter was again basically just setting the scene and introducing the cast. I hope that I can do better this time around with the story.
This is still my first official cross-over fic so I really, really, really would like some feedback on it if possible.