Disclaimer: I do not own Naruto…sadly…
Okay, I have to admit that my first Fanfic really, really sucked. I took that fanfiction and fixed it up, still the same concept, but I hope it's slightly better.
Enjoy! (No flames please)
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"Good morning, father," the shy 16-year-old girl said with a little bow as slipped on her brown sweatshirt. Today was the day, she was hoping at least for a goodbye.
"Hmph," grunted her father, not realizing the pain that his comment gave his daughter.
"I'm going out now, father," she said solemnly. The man looked down at his daughter's white eyes, they looked pleading. Unlike how they normally looked, but it didn't matter, she was still weak.
"Yes, Hinata," he said hesitantly, not sure how to respond. After pulling her backpack on, the girl walked out onto the sidewalk of Konoha. She looked up at the piercing blue sky and sighed.
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"Oi! Hinata!" came the voice of her teammate, shadowed by a bark from his dog, Akamaru.
"G-Good morning, Kiba-kun. Shino-kun," Hinata said, this could be a major setback.
"Where are you going so early this morning?" asked a concerned Kiba. No reply. Kiba asked again, a little more sternly this time.
"I'm going to train, Kiba-kun," she said, looking at her feet.
"What's with the pack? Where are you going?"
"As I said, I'm going to train alone, Kiba-kun," she said as she turned around and started to walk away.
"Shino and I will come with you, then, we needed to do some training today," replied Kiba, not yet noticing her strange actions.
"No," she said sternly, surprising her teammates. Seeing the surprise on their faces, she covered for it, "I mean, I want to train alone. With you guys there, it would just be a distraction."
"Hinata, are you ok?" said Shino. He had noticed her strangeness from the beginning.
"I'm-I'm fine. I'm going to train now," she said. Seeing her teammates come closer, she got worried, "I am going alone. Don't follow me," she said before running off.
Shino and Kiba looked at each other, coming to the same conclusion. Follow her. They ran off towards her, she left the village and slipped into a thicket of trees. They pursued her through the dense forest until they came to a stop at the edge of a clearing, Hinata was looking around, making sure she wasn't followed, but then she heard them. She pulled out a kunai.
"Who's there? Come out, now." Kiba walked into the clearing followed by Shino.
"Oh-Oh, K-Kiba-kun, Shino-kun," she stuttered. Kiba and Shino walked forward slowly.
"Hinata, we were concerned, what's wrong?" said Kiba, his voice full of worry. She looked at him with what almost looked like fear.
"Please, I have to do this. I am going to go and train alone. Don't follow me." She smiled a small smile and disappeared in a puff of smoke.
Kiba and Shino were beside themselves. Why would she do that? Why was she acting so strangely? Kiba finally broke the silence, "She's…gone?"
"Think about it. For as long as we have know Hinata, her father has abused her, yelled at her, and called her weak. I guess she must have just finally had enough of it. Come on, let's go back to the village," Shino suggested. They walked back to the village without another word between them.
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It was brown and dark. She couldn't see anything. Hot winds and sand pushing her this way and that. She couldn't see anything through the sandstorm. She became dizzy, she heard footsteps coming across the sand. Coughing, she fell to the ground and all went black.
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It had been four months. There was no hope of seeing her again. Kiba sat in the field where Hinata had disappeared. Where can she be? he thought, She's been announced dead…her funeral is in a week…
RUSTLE RUSTLE
Shino walked into the clearing. "Kiba. Hokage-sama wishes to see us."
"Why?"
"Hinata." That's all Shino said as he walked out of the clearing. Kiba's heart started to race. Hinata? Here? She's alive? "Hurry, let's go." Kiba and Shino jumped through the trees.
As they approached Hokage tower, Kiba found himself tripping over his feet. He was deep in thought thinking about Hinata returning. When they arrived at the Hokage-sama's office, they opened the door to the site of the Hokage, she looked terrible, like she hadn't slept for days.
"Come in, take a seat," she grunted, Kiba and Shino took their seats slowly. "As you well know, I have summoned you because of Hinata." They nodded, Kiba's heart racing, "She has been spotted in the Sunagakure ninja village."
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Well,
I hope it was at least decent. I think it's slightly better than
the original. I will be posting the sequal to this soon. Please
review and tell me anything else I can do to fix it up.
Arigato
and Sayonara
