Let's face it, the original version is crappy. But this one will make it possible to write a sequel or maybe even make it a trilogy.

The Spirits Within

Chapter One – The Spirits Within

There once existed a world, a beutiful world free of pain, and disease…, of death, and suffering. There existed no unhappyness, no misery, and no one to enjoy this treasure. Then, God created the perfect being, Humanity . Humans had eyes to see with, ears to hear with, fingers to touch with, and a heart, a heart to feel with. They had but one weakness... The heart. People enjoyed His creation so much, that they began quarreling over it, and so was darkness in their hearts born. God, seeing as His perfect creatures didn't turn out as perfect as it seemed, He punished them. He sent from space a rock, which was named Meteor, which means "Bringer of Darkness" in the Ancient Tongue. With Meteor also came disease, death, pain and suffering, and darkness from people's hearts grew, and released the spirits within...

200 years later…

"The spirits were then imprisoned in this special stones which went by the name of, Sora?" The teacher waited patiently for the spiky-haired boy to speak. Sora scratched his head, looking around for something that reminded him of the answer, "Err… I don't know?" he finally said, and pushed some strands of his brown hair out of his face. Another spiky-haired boy, but with crimson red hair raised his hand. "The Gemstones" he said quickly, "An ancient piece of magi technology that imprisoned spiritual or ectoplastic entities, their creation was attempted many times but the Elders only succeeded that one time-…" The teacher then interrupted, "Ok, ok that's enough." Sora looked away, "I knew that…" He said as the bell rang.

The red-haired guy yawned widely as he gathered his books. "Hey Mikau, what class you got next?" Sora nearly yelled over the noise of the other students. "Spanish, I think…" he replied. "Spanish? With the creepy new girl?" Sora asked, walking out of the room. "The who?" Mikau asked back, but as if on cue, when he walked out of the room, a girl with blonde hair passed him by, looking straight forward. She had the deepest purple eyes ever. They where the kind of eyes that made you feel depressed by just looking at them, they seemed almost not human. Hmm, her face looks familiar, Mikau thought, staring at her.

"You know, I don't really appreciate it when you're drooling over someone else."

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When I said "rewritten", I meant "rewritten", if you read the other version you'll see that it has been completely changed, for the better I hope…Well, we got two mystery people here, but fear not, they will be revealed next chapter… heh… Also, this is short, but if you have read my previous stories then you'll know that alll my intros are short...