The Light
NAPLAN WRITING ASSESSMENT
STORY
We were out on a boat, just Sebastian and I.
The boats motor had faltered, and we were stranded. In the middle of the ocean. With no means of communication…
It was raining, the sky was dark, and the ocean was wild and raging. Tossing and turning our helpless boat like a rag-doll. I clung to Sebastians soaked, white, button-up shirt and cried. We had very little chances of making it out of the storm. Alive. I winced as a bolt of lightning struck somewhere in the distance, illuminating the sky. We were nearing the heart of the storm. The closer we got, the less chance we had. Sebastian hushed and comforted me, saying that everything was going to be okay…
The wind roared and the rain thundered down, harder and stronger than before. If we did make it out, there was a bloody fine chance we'd die of hyperthermia instead. I could feel the warmth slowly leaving my body. It wasn't long now…
I heard Sebastian gasp, so I looked up and over his shoulder. I whimpered in terror as a 32 foot wall of water loomed over our small fishing boat. Sebastian must've heard my quiet cry because he took my head in his arms and hugged me to his chest.
"You're going to be alright… We'll be okay…" I could tell he was crying by the way his voice cracked, but the rain streaming down his face blended with the tears. I hugged him tight, it was all over…
I heard the roar of the wave and the hushed soothing words Sebastian was muttering in my ear. At least I'll see my family again. A comfortable thought to take my mind off the fear and cold that overwhelmed my senses.
I felt Sebastian hold me as tightly as he could, it wasn't warm, but it was comforting… I heard the roaring and crashing of water, then I was deprived of his embrace and felt nothing except but the cold grip of the water. It clung to me, stung my eyes, and burned my lungs. I couldn't breathe, but I could see… Not much at first, just the dark abyss of the sea, nothing but darkness and depth. Then a small spark, right in front of my eyes. Tiny lights. They looked like fireflies, small tiny glistening specks of light that floated around the water. The more that appeared, the warmer I began to feel. They were beautiful, warm and bright. Surrounding me, making me feel all fuzzy and comfortable. More and more seemed to rise out of the oceans depths, until I was completely surrounded. I felt safe again, like people were hugging me.
I accepting the embrace and gratefully closed my eyes until all that remained was a soft, shinning glow.
Okay, that happened… But that was the exact copy of the story I wrote on the first – out of 4 – day of my NAPLAN assessment. I hope you enjoyed it! I changed the characters obviously, they were originally father and daughter. But anyways, that's that! Now back to writing Night in Black!
- Wingsie
