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Care For Me
Chapter 1: Gabriella Montez
Gabriella Montez had always considered herself to be a pretty normal child with a pretty normal childhood. That was until her 11th birthday. She had asked her parents for a new bike for her birthday. Her dad promised her that he would get her a new bike, and he never broke his promises.
It was May 17, 2000, Gabriella's birthday, and her party was in full swing. It was almost time to open the gifts and Gabi noticed that her daddy was nowhere to be found. She went to find her mother to see if her dad had called. When she found her mother, her heart dropped into her stomach at the sight before her. Maria was on the floor in her bedroom curled into a ball. Scared out of her mind she ran to get her abuela.
"ABUELA! ABUELA! COME QUICK, SOMETHING IS WRONG WITH MOMMY!" a scared Gabi yelled to her grandmother, who was outside entertaining guests while Maria went to answer the telephone.
Anna, Maria's mother, came rushing to her daughter's side immediately thinking the worst. What she saw upon entering broke her heart. She flung her arms around Maria and tried everything she could to try to sooth her daughter.
As Maria started to calm down she started to mumble "Carlos". Anna slowly started to realize what she was saying and instructed Gabi to go back outside to the party and they would be out soon. Gabi was never one to disobey so she slow lifted herself from the floor and trudged outside to try and have as much fun as she could.
With Maria and Anna
"He…..He…He's Gone Mama" Maria stumbled out while still trying to catch her breath and calm down.
Confused Anna coaxed her daughter to calm down before trying again to speak. When she finally did get Maria calm she explained to her mother that Carlos had been in a horrible ten car pile-up on the highway caused by a man trying to elude the police and was killed on impact.
"How am I gonna tell my baby girl that she will never see her daddy again mama?" Maria questioned while still sobbing.
"I don't know Angel but we will figure something out." Anna responded. She really didn't really know how to console her daughter whit something like this happening, but she knew one thing: Gabriella couldn't see her mother in this state. She needed a little time alone. So she decided that it would be best if Gabriella came to stay with her for a few days just until she could get everything arranged and she wouldn't have to worry about anything else.
"How about I keep Brie for a week or so just so she doesn't have to see you breakdown and you don't have to worry about hurting her if you breakdown in front of her" Anna provided a temporary solution to the problem at hand.
"Gracias mama that would help me out a lot" Maria graciously replied back to her mother. She was so thankful that she had a mother who knew her and knew when she needed to be alone.
"That's no problem Angel," Anna replied while coming up with something that might work and make this situation a little bit easier for Gabi, "How about we tell Brie about this in little steps. Tonight we will tell her that Carlos was in an accident and tomorrow we will tell her that he didn't make it."
"That could work mama, but you Gabi is a very intelligent young lady. She will ask if she will be able to go see him or talk to him and when we tell her she can't she will know what is going on" Maria pointed out.
"Well then I suppose we should tell her all of this after her party" Anna plainly stated hating the fact that in just a few hours she would have watch her Brie's heart shatter into pieces .
Anna suggested that Maria get some rest and that she would wrap up the party in a few hours. Reluctantly, Maria agreed and watched her mother walk out of her room. She then peeled herself from the floor and went to her closet. She grabbed one of Carlos's button down shirts and slipped into it. She decided that she would lay down she curled up into a ball in the center of the bed that she used to share with her husband and clung to his scent as she cried herself into a much needed nap.
With Gabriella at her party(Gabi's POV)
As I slowly started to creep outside I began to wonder what my mom was mumbling before abuela told me to go back to the party. What could have been so bad that it would make mama just cry and lay in the middle of the floor? Why is daddy still not here yet? I wonder if…….
"Hey!!!" Gabriella yelled as she was stripped from her thoughts and shot in the face with water by none other than her pest of a neighbor Jon.
"Ha Ha I got you Gabi" Jon boasted while running in the other direction.
If it weren't for her mother he wouldn't be here. She told him that he wasn't invited to her party because all he does is pick with her. He got so mad because everyone in the neighborhood, even all of his friends, were going and he would be the only kid left out, that he went crying to my mom and she made me apologize to him and give him an invitation. I argued that every time he sees me all he does is pick on me and try to make me cry. For some reason she is convinced that he is some sort of angel because she said that he couldn't possibly be trying to make me cry, maybe he was trying to tell me that he liked me. EWWWWW. I get sick at the thought.
"BRIE," My abuela yelled across the lawn trying to get my attention.
I ran over to her and breathlessly I asked "Yes abuela."
"How would you like to spend a week with me?" She questioned.
I love my abuela. She takes care of me and mama when daddy is away on business or something like that. I also loved when she asked if I wanted to spend the night with her. That usually includes a lot of shopping, watching some movies, getting our nails and toes done, and all sorts of girly things.
"YES ABUELA I WOULD LIVE TO SPEND A WEEK WITH YOU!" I immediately responded without hesitation.
Shortly after the proposal from my abuela I started thing and putting pieces together. Mama was crying and currently not present so she thought something was wrong.
Puzzled by what her brain was slowly making putting together she asked her abuela, "Where is mama, abuela?"
Taken slightly back by what her grand-daughter just asked she quickly came up with a response." She is not feeling well so she is lying down"
"Is that why I am going to spend a week with you, because mommy is not feeling well?" I inquired.
"Si senorita" Anna calmly stated, glad that at least for right now the issue was put to rest.
No one's POV
As the evening carried on they played a few party games, cut the cake and opened the presents. Gabi had been distracted enough to not notice that her daddy has yet to walk through the door. As she finished getting her things packed for her getaway with her grandmother, she heard her name being called. She through the last few things in her bag and rushed into her mother's room where Maria and Anna were waiting patiently for her.
Maria's POV
As Gabi bounced into the room I began to wonder if my heart could take the reaction that Gabi will give once I tell her about Carlos. I pat a spot next to me on my bed and Gabi jumped in the bed and immediately hugged me, like she could tell I needed it.
"Mija, I need to tell you something very important about your father," Maria started.
She started to see realization in the face of her one and only. She could only imagine what she was thinking.
"Mama where is daddy? He never came for my party. Is he still at work? Is he coming home soon? I want to see him before I go with abuela for a week." Gabi stated starting to panic and fear the worse.
" Baby, I'm sorry, but daddy was in a horrible accident earlier when he was on his way from work." I managed to get out as I had started to cry again.
The response that I got from Gabi was very unexpected. First she just froze, the out of nowhere she let out this gut wrenching scream that broke what was left of my heart.
2 Years Later(No one's POV)
"Don't worry baby, "Maria said to her 13 year old daughter Gabriella, "We will be back just as soon as the ceremony is over."
Maria was a very successful partner at the law firm she worked at. Tonight she and Anna were going to a dinner to honor her. Gabi is not feeling well so she is staying home and trying to convince Maria or Anna to do the same. Seeing she would not win this battle , she gave up.
"Ok mama. Te Quiero ( I love you)." Gabriella replied as she gave in to her mother's pleading tone. Little did she know that would be the last time she saw her mother alive or hear her voice again.
Seeing the time, Maria rushed to finish getting ready so she could pick up Anna.
"Te Quiero tambien mi mija. (I love you too my daughter). I will see you as soon as it is over" Maria expressed to her only child.
Later that night
Gabi was awaken from her peaceful dream by banging on the door. She fell asleep on the couch waiting on her mother to come home so she could see how her night went. When she got up she quickly glanced at the clock on the wall and it read 2:07am. She wondered why her mother had not waken her. She brushed it off when the banging on the door started to get louder. She rushed to the door and yanked it open, ready to give whoever was on the other side of it hell for waking her up. When she saw two uniformed officers on at the door she got confused.
"Can we come in Ms. Montez, it is about your mother" One of the officers asked.
She stepped to the side and let the officers in, confused, she led them to the living room where only minutes before she was sleeping peacefully.
" Is my mother in any trouble, should I go get her. I'm pretty sure she is in her room still asleep" She asked wondering why they were there and her mother was upstairs sleep.
"Ms. Montez during the ceremony a disgruntled employee came in and went on a shooting rampage and shot everyone that was in attendance. Your mother and grandmother didn't make it, I'm sorry" the other officer said.
"NO YOU'RE LYING! MAMA IS IN HER BED ASLEEP AND ABUELA IS AT HOME!" she screamed.
She then took off running towards her mother's room only to find her bed empty and still made from earlier that day. Still in denial she picked up her cell phone and tried to call her. Suddenly one of the officers walked in holding her mother's cell phone and the clutch she took for the night. At that sight Gabi broke down as a feeling of Déjà vu was experienced. Just then she faintly heard the officer ask her if she had anyone she could call or stay with and that reminded her that everyone she had in this world had been stripped from it. Now she had no one, literally no one. Where would she stay? Who would she stay with? What would happen to her.
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